DHillion

DHillion

LV 15
2020-03-02 Unido Global
Emblemas 33

Moments 373
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DHillion
1 days ago
Commented

Urla feels kinda odd, she seems there but not there at the same time. I'm curious to see how the author is going to develop her further.

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DHillion
1 months ago
Commented

Author there needs to be distinction between conversations and inner thoughts.

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DHillion
1 months ago
Replied to DHillion

Depends on your country of origin.

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1 months ago
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how can I help

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DHillion
1 months ago
Posted

An excellent start to what I think is a very promising story and look forward to more updates to come.

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DHillion
1 months ago
Commented

This is a repeat of an earlier chapter.

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DHillion
1 months ago
Posted

the story of particular has a good deal of potential but it's being held back with all the excessive background information of characters who haven't played any major role in the story as of yet. it would be better to avoid all the sexual insinuations tells time for the situation to happen the plot is solid and I believe it could be a really good story I've got to back off all of the info drops until it's necessary for them to happen.