Hades_Cloak

male LV 4

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2019-07-13 Unido Canada
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Hades_Cloak
22 days ago
Commented

thnx for the chap boss

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Hades_Cloak
26 days ago
Commented

thanks for the chap boss

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Hades_Cloak
1 months ago
Commented

thanks for the chap. also has anyone ever realized that the gems in steven universe are technically golems? like in other forms of fiction the gems real body is there gem that's somewhere on there body and not the body that everyone talks too. and like golems in fiction if you destroy the core them the golem dies even if its body is fully intact like the gems.

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Hades_Cloak
1 months ago
Commented

thanks for the chap mate

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Hades_Cloak
1 months ago
Commented

thanks for the chap mate keep up the good work .

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Hades_Cloak
1 months ago
Commented

thanks for the chap mate. you did good with this one.

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Hades_Cloak
1 months ago
Posted

I love how this story is going so far, and I can't wait to read more.

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Hades_Cloak
1 months ago
Commented

I haven't watched steven universe in a while so what you use doesn't really matter. and the only suggestion I would do is try to make the next chap a little longer. see how it feels and if it is too much then go back to the original amount and if it works then slowly work into it. if I've learned anything from other authors it's to try and push your boundaries little by little. and learn what works for you. (sorry if that was a little long winded.)

Hades_Cloak
Hades_Cloak
1 months ago
Commented

thanks for the chap mate. can't wait to see what they get up too next

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Hades_Cloak
1 months ago
Commented

thanks for the chapter mate. for the suggestions. you could do it that the next time the Mc upgrades the quest board the mission difficulty increases, so it would turn into teams of 4 and 5. that way you could put in scenes from the second group while the story still follows the Mc like at the moment. another thing for later in the story. to showcase the side characters' skills, you could have the artificer make a machine that creates holograms to let new members to experience there skills and it let's you put out a general capability of each character for you to build off of.