SrLao

SrLao

male LV 11

Es en la lectura de las historias, buenas o malas, donde encuentro el placer de seguir viviendo. Equipo NoHarem

2019-06-27 Unido Global
Emblemas 5

Moments 1082
SrLao
SrLao
1 months ago
Commented

Is this written with the help of chatGPT?

SrLao
SrLao
1 months ago
Commented

No puedo leer esto. Demaciada redundancia y adjetivos. Las formas de ser de los personajes y el contexto en donde estan, no coinciden y chocan. Lo dejo, exitos futuros para el autor

SrLao
SrLao
5 months ago
Commented

I don't like to stop anything from the dynamics and rhythm in the relationship between Jessica and the protagonist.

SrLao
SrLao
5 months ago
Commented

this one is completely superfluous

SrLao
SrLao
5 months ago
Commented

you know, if he can somehow increase his body weight or special 1000 ton weights to help him train, he could become stronger. and since he ages very slowly, he would retain the new level of strength longer. Let's say you can lift 200 tons with some effort. If you add training, in a few months or a year he could lift 1400 tons, being his peak of strength, with “moderate” training. And I take as a reference that the “calm” Hulk can lift 70 to 100 tons. As for the strength he gets when he gets angry, it would be like the effect of adrenaline, being the UCM version. (traductor)

SrLao
SrLao
5 months ago
Commented

I think you missed this paragraph after making the change in the fight (traductor)

SrLao
SrLao
5 months ago
Posted

Writing Quality (3★), Updating Stability (5★), Story Development (2★), Character Design (3★), world background (1★). It's not a bad story, it's entertaining. The characters are sometimes funny. As of this writing, there are daily chapters. There are plot holes and situations that contradict past events. I was generous with the character design score. They're not flat for the most part and follow a reasonable logic (not always). As for the background of the world... I can only point out that in chapter 14, there's a reset that cancels out all the previous chapters. This last one bothered me so much that I'm going to give it some time to get more chapters out. And if it improves, I'll change my score. (Traductor)

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SrLao
SrLao
5 months ago
Commented

Bro... This chapter was horrible, you put a reboot, seriously?

Este livro foi excluído.
SrLao
SrLao
5 months ago
Commented

Please tell me that he will be able to transform and detransform at will into a version of Hulk

SrLao
SrLao
5 months ago
Replied to Geo_Hel

I know how it works. What I'm saying is that the black suit, while it retains more heat from the light, also means that it prevents the sun's rays from reaching his skin. Leaving only his face exposed. The difference with Superman's black suit is that apart from retaining the sun's rays, it also distributes them evenly, those solar rays, on the skin of the entire body.