hello author I am currently writing this to you in regards to your story and I gotta say it's very good and I'm amazed at how you write the story and the level of details.I applaud you for your hard work and if you keep writing your dxd story until the end and hopefully your next story will be as good as your previous story.......p.s make them more smutty and take your time with it
in my opinion the main character develops his strength and dungeon to a proper degree dance set out in his journey to get stronger while Sophie evolves or ranks up until a hobgoblin or something else so to make herself more useful and more impact later on. and lastly add an harem in the MC dungeon and not the generic types that mc helps or save the girls. i want the mc character to enslaved and capture all kinds of female of any tuypes
This MC seems like a different approach than the other stories that I read before and I hope you keep continuing writing more chapters. i would like to know what happens next and take breaks for gathering more ideas for your story
This concept is amazing because I am sick of being tired of female characters in the NTR world is so stupid and I hope you keep writing more of these and can increase the words in the chapters to better enjoy this and hope MC gets a harem with these female characters and straighten up them up
keep up writing this story and hope you keep updating the stories and hope when you make a harem style writing. please make the appearance of the dynamic with other girls for MC
This storyline so far is good if you are aiming for either a crazed cult leader or The Mc character uses his system to make a harem of crazed worshipers and that's cool.but make it longer and more details in the story and sex stuff if you wanted this story to be more enjoyable. And lastly tried to update the story once a week or more to get the chapters more enjoyable with each chapter.
Your story is interesting and different from what I'm used to and it's not bad but it needs more work to get the story to a new level and your take on using Wednesday and Enid for your story but you need to age them up to around 18 or 17 and it will be okay to use them whenever you like.And lastly please don't stray from your angle of the marvel story and don't make to much side story from the plot and if you doing the dungeon master thing.you must make the appearing of dungeon so sudden.p.s make longer and more details and take your time with it and if you remake the story you need aid more sexual stuff with more details to help get more readers. I'm sorry if I sound pushy about this because a lot of people keep discarding good stories
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You should make the story longer for more enjoyment for the readers and slowly build the set up in the mood to get the reader aroused. it would get more people invested in your story. You should slowly corrupt Wednesday into a darker version of herself and show details how it happens as the mc hunts other girls that caught his eyes and also show more details about the dungeon because not everything has to be about fucking and mind breaking girls. it's need also be a conflict marvel and all the movies and tv shows characters ether stumble onto the dungeon or lure to it. and lastly pace yourself and take your time because I want to see if you have it's takes to make it here. p.s if you get stuck read darkshiro story in fanfiction.net for reference and idea
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This style of story brings a new start for the gunslinger way of doing it. I hope it keeps going more erotic scenes it helps bring more intrigued into for the main character in and slowly make him more darker than before as dwell in the way of the gunslinger
this concept of the story is quite interesting for being a Willy Wonka storyline in the DC universe and I hope it will update soon since the story is quite interesting to learn about a third party in the world of DC giving out a special kind of candy to offer various kinds of abilities and I also hope you make the story feel like a mysterious background character that controls the villains and hero side.
DC: Willy Wonka's Wonder Factory
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