Thank you very much for your review. They may not be common, but when I do get them, they mean the world to me and inspire me to keep on writing, so thank you very much!
Definitely an unreliable narrator. Information is limited and there are also, of course, the impacts of propaganda.
94 years ago, the Fire Nation was invaded by the Air Nation Army on a conquest to spread their cultish religion to all corners of the world, but the Fire Nation intervened hoping to spare the world from another civil war, but it was too late. The Air Nation had convinced the Water and Earth Nations to take up arms against their peaceful neighbor plunging the war in a nearly century long war. In a decisive victory, Fire Lord Sozin crushed the armies of the war-mongering Air Nation and took the first step to bring peace and prosperity to the world.
All That Was Left: Book I: Survival
TV · TheStormCommando
To you as well! And Happy New Year!
To you as well!
I sadly cannot see which paragraph you were commenting on, but one thing I try to employ a lot of is the unreliable narrator. Sometimes, it will be due to bias, and other times, due to lack of information, just like what you were saying. "The brainwashing and distortion of facts."
94 years ago, the Fire Nation was invaded by the Air Nation Army on a conquest to spread their cultish religion to all corners of the world, but the Fire Nation intervened hoping to spare the world from another civil war, but it was too late. The Air Nation had convinced the Water and Earth Nations to take up arms against their peaceful neighbor plunging the war in a nearly century long war. In a decisive victory, Fire Lord Sozin crushed the armies of the war-mongering Air Nation and took the first step to bring peace and prosperity to the world.
All That Was Left: Book I: Survival
TV · TheStormCommando
Frankly, I have to agree with you on many points. A lot of things from the first book will be relevant later in ways that would be spoilers to say, but notwithstanding, I already am rewriting this first book. It will still be the same setting and such, but I plan on making it a lot more interesting. To tell you the truth, I really appreciate this review. It feels the most honest and constructive. I have an AO3 account where I am currently working on a rewritten version since this is 5 year old work back from when I was a Highschool Freshman. Notwithstanding, I appreciate the honesty, but I still hope you stick around. It's good to have honest people reviewing my work.
Hello There! Really glad to see that you enjoyed it. It's review like this that make my day and constantly just give me that extra motivation to keep on writing. I hope you continue to read and enjoy the series, and I look forward to seeing your thoughts on what comes after.
No worries. Glad to see you back!
Well, you're just going to have to wait and see. :)
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original Avatar: The Legend of the White Flame: Book I: Survival
Seven years before the Awakening of the Avatar, in a Fire Nation occupied city on the Continental Earth Kingdom's East Coast, an orphan boy by the name of "Fluke", with a past he does not remember, finds himself attempting to simply survive the hellish conditions of his city's slums, not yet knowing the role he'll come to play in the intensifying Hundred Years' War25 Chs 8 Coleções
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All That Was Left: Book III: Honor
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The Siege of Ba Sing Se has ended. The remnants of Iron Fire desert, desperate to flee the Fire Nation as it heads down a dark path.146 Chs 118 Coleções
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All That Was Left: Warfare (Contest Submission)
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After barely surviving the chaos of the Citadel Streets, Luke is drafted into the Fire Nation military, enrolled in their academy, and must find a way to survive the war to come.114 Chs 30 Coleções
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All That Was Left: Book II: Warfare
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The Hornets have been killed and very little is left of Luke's old life. He must now adjust to life under the Fire Nation and learn his place in his new family.114 Chs 171 Coleções
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All That Was Left: Book I: Survival
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6 Years prior to the awakening of the Avatar, an orphan named Luke is living on the streets of Fire Nation occupied city, Citadel. How his story will fit in with that of the world's savior is yet to be revealed...66 Chs 434 Coleções
Glad to have you back! Hope you find the rewrite and new books to be even more enjoyable!
Avatar: The Legend of the White Flame: Book I: Survival
Fantasy · TheStormCommando