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Eastern · Cultured_Daoist69
yooo nice, a unique way to start the story frfr, the right amount of pace, so it doesn't drag too long either, shhhhh 👍👍
that last line frfr
pacing's too abrupt, he goes from point A to point B, and back to point A to go to point C with little to no transition. Ideally it's better to add something in between to make these chain of events flow more smoothly.
ty4chp 👍, idm any upload schedule, current one is fine as it is
Story is good, upload is frequent, but chapters are very short in return
Este livro foi excluído.
not so sure abt this and the previous chapter, as it is essentially him waking up from getting passed out, receives an explanation, then pass out again, it gives of a out of place segment to the flow of the story. For this part, I'd say something like the first iteration of your previous work would be more appropriate, with a slight change, in which he has woken up after he got saved by the demon queen from being poisoned, then she can use that as a leverage or something to make Leon more complient of her request
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Realistic · OneFist