This is a phenomenon of a Star Wars fanfic. The only reason I haven’t just 5 starred everything is that the author has a habit of over describing some items in multiple locations that it would break the immersion. I am not saying describing every deadly thing a ship/droid/power suit is not amazing it is just that the lists blur together as a block of info. I don’t have the English writing background to be able to say of a better way but maybe change it from a straight list to something similar to a tour of the ship with some dialogue in between. Now the rest that I gave 5 stars don’t need more explanation I enjoy them immensely so onto my last tick/the only other 4 star is the fact of what the mc is to the force now I know it’s not fully explained even with legends lore but I don’t see it as impenetrable to the force more like the vong and being undetectable to it. Again keep up the great story telling and I hope this “criticism” isn’t unwanted or I will feel like a douche nozzle. GREAT STORY WOULD RECOMMEND FOR STAR WARS FANS!
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This is a phenomenon of a Star Wars fanfic. The only reason I haven’t just 5 starred everything is that the author has a habit of over describing some items in multiple locations that it would break the immersion. I am not saying describing every deadly thing a ship/droid/power suit is not amazing it is just that the lists blur together as a block of info. I don’t have the English writing background to be able to say of a better way but maybe change it from a straight list to something similar to a tour of the ship with some dialogue in between. Now the rest that I gave 5 stars don’t need more explanation I enjoy them immensely so onto my last tick/the only other 4 star is the fact of what the mc is to the force now I know it’s not fully explained even with legends lore but I don’t see it as impenetrable to the force more like the vong and being undetectable to it. Again keep up the great story telling and I hope this “criticism” isn’t unwanted or I will feel like a douche nozzle. GREAT STORY WOULD RECOMMEND FOR STAR WARS FANS!
The Wound In The Stars
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