Here's some notes. Narrator voice shouldn't be used to comment on things that are observations or opinions. Things like how perfect/flawed a characters attire is are better left for a character to observe. The word choice is a little verbose here. Try to stay within two descriptive adjectives in your character descriptions. Optimally the reader should be able to imagine a character. Let details like color and shape be your first visual. This will help you choose your words in a more effective way. Good luck, hope this helps.
Yumi written in a different way can mean moon as well.
"I'm Mutsuki Yumi. Starting today, I'll be everyone's sensei. I look forward to working with you all in the future."
Naruto: Strength Through Teaching
Anime & Comics · ChaosNinja
whom
Shisui fell into silence. However, Mutsuki continued, telling Shisui that the story was far from over. This incident not only intensified Lord Second, Senju Tobirama's distrust for the Uchiha, who he already disliked but also led him, after becoming the Hokage, to implement various policies specifically governing the Uchiha.
Naruto: Strength Through Teaching
Anime & Comics · ChaosNinja
Infinite Moon Moon?
"I'm Mutsuki Yumi. Starting today, I'll be everyone's sensei. I look forward to working with you all in the future."
Naruto: Strength Through Teaching
Anime & Comics · ChaosNinja
tiger mouth
Until the cockpit finally stabilized, Gwen whose tiger mouths were oozing blood from clutching the web lines finally anxiously spoke up.
Marvel: Spider-Man? No, I'm Superman!
Anime & Comics · iRedX43
It's named after one. Sauce please.
[How is that not unbalanced?! Susano'o is a freaking war god!]
Madara in the Avatar World
Anime & Comics · KojiSan
heath > heat
Kevin barely felt the heath from the flames, he noticed that his strength is increasing exponentially recently. Just a year ago, this kind of flames would feel kind of hot, like newly toasted bread, but now the flames barely feel any different from a normal breeze.
The Marvelous Superman
Others · Passerby_Venne
identity sound be Identity
Chapter 2: identity
The Marvelous Superman
Others · Passerby_Venne
username checks out
The truth is that I don't speak or write in English. I write the chapters in Spanish and translate them into English before publishing them. I know that sometimes it can be a bit annoying to see these spelling mistakes, but hey, at least you can make fun of me using that as an excuse.
The Last Rising Sun
Anime & Comics · NotPolarArtic
I believe I was mistaken. I'm still learning the characters and haven't memorized it well enough evidently. Thank you for setting me straight.
"I'm Mutsuki Yumi. Starting today, I'll be everyone's sensei. I look forward to working with you all in the future."
Naruto: Strength Through Teaching
Anime & Comics · ChaosNinja