Itachi as a girl is impossible for me. It's like the ultimate sacrilege. I'm out.
Oh no. Don't tell me you're feminineizing Sasuke or Itachi. I was barely getting used to Naruto. Excuse me... Naru-ko.
Annoying rule of the fanfiction world : when the MC/OC genderswap or is born male, there is a 90% chance Naruto will genderswap too. I should have seen it coming.
"Why are you a girl?" he couldn't help but ask.
You're My Special (SI-OC/Naruto)
Anime & Comics · EmmaCruzader
Aren't they supposed to be emotionless ?
"How dare you refuse Lord Danzo!"
Konoha's Tag-System Ninja
Anime & Comics · iRedX43
Author, in writing, consistency is important. Why do you suddenly switch from third to first person singular ?
Anyway, the plan was fully drawn in my head, and I will start implementing it once I get to the special grade level .
Jujutsu kaisen : Dust release
Anime & Comics · New_ring
You know that Itachi doesn't actually have to say the word "Dojutsu", right ?
"Dōjutsu, Amaterasu."
Shinigami in the Ninja World
Anime & Comics · Bleam
I'm sorry to say it like this, but using the first person singular in a secondary character's POV is just plain bad writing.
{Marin's POV}
A Star Reborn In Tokyo
Anime & Comics · TSOKyoto
It was near perfect. If Rachel's POV hadnt been written at first person singular, it would have been very good. Though you perhaps need to study her character a little more since you made her OOC in this single moment.
She is completely OOC. Canon Rachel was consumed with guilt. This is why she laughed so disturbingly in the story. What she demonstrated was how dark she is inside and how far she is capable of going. She regrets Bam's death, but she knows she would have still done it a second time. While seeking to become a star, she knows she is the opposite. She wants to get rid of her own ugliness but only sinks deeper into it. All these complex emotions are why she broke down. Your description of her makes her seem superficial.
Everyone exists only to serve me. I am destined to see the stars.
Tower of God: Sequence Strength
Others · Yesnth
First person singular for the point of view of a secondary character (who is therefore not a main character)... this is an erroneous process in writing. Which is a shame for a story so well written so far. It spoils the quality of your work. You shouldn't do that because it shakes up the hierarchy of characters. Is Byakuya suddenly a main character whose level of importance rivals Itachi's ?
Crows x Souls
Anime & Comics · QuackVader