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When some random guy was transmigrated in dc universe with some wishes.
I am just writing a fanfic for my wish.
Dc comics does not belong to me but warner bros only my oc belongs to me.
My english writing skills maybe bad,so forgive me if it is hard to read.
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the writing is kinda trash honestly alot of stuff is glossed over especially with the multiverse and stuff like that is just confusing how did he die like at just every universe he travels to and the mc just struggles in fights he could have easily won the whole ex fiasco is just kinda stupid like I was in a similar situation and got over it quickly this guy is bathing in succes and fame for like years and still hung up is stupid and mc isn't even abusing his powers no overall plan othere than being a neat he didn't try magic and was kinda like it's not my thing is stupid like the guy is just pitifully weak compared to real strong people in dc he's relationship with the league is confusing to say the least the intoregation and isn't he supposed to be like buddies with superman
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The writing quality while not awful is stil pretty bad. There are a lot of spelling mistakes and the grammar is not exactly fantastic either. Story development? I would give this a 0.5 if i could because there is no development it's just a bunch of thoughts smashed together with almost 99% of the time no explanation of how he got to know anybody or got in a certain situation. his character is barely fleshed out and the random people are just thrown in there as his friends with no explanation as why, how or even when they met. The only reason i can follow anything is because i know a bit about the world of DC and even than i have no idea most of the time were he is and how the world works in this story. I would only read this if you like reading the summary of a summary
you need to put more effort into detailing you can't just say what happens like a summary without explaining it with full depth some of these ideas you are playing with could be 10-20 chapters if you explained it right
Man, it's horrible to read, it's a giant block of text that is almost unreadable and confuse, you need to focus to use more spaces, or at least find an editor for you.
Author here,guys i would not make mc have thor's god ability since he would be too op as he already had kraots and geralt's abilities but the others can gain thor's ability if they can lift it.Also i will try to give him abilities that will not be too op since op characters are too common and he is already kinda op since he have kratos abilities.Also please kindly tell me if there are any mistakes on the characters since i'm kinda an actual newbie.
Literally the worst story I've ever read .................................................................................................................................
Honestly it seems like someone's read way to many superstar novels but doesn't know how to make a story. Isn't it common sense to add a space after a period or comma, what about breaks for a new paragraph. You had to at least read 1 story in the past. Endless it was an absolutely terrible novel and it didn't have any of the things I'm talking about, then you have no excuse. Lastly stop rushing everything. It's not a marathon, slow down. and smell the roses.
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bruh what is going on this is just terrible there are just huge blocks of text and its not coheraent at all its all over the place in story telling the characters make no sense its just bad the idea is good but the way its done is just garbage