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The villainess shall be mine
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The world was about to end and his life was about to change.
But Mark, a pathetic and ugly 30-year-old man, was more concerned about his relationship situation than anything else.
He lived a lonely life, and as he grew older, his face became uglier than it already was. The chance of marrying his ideal woman was slim to none.
Like everyone else, he wanted a second chance... And his wish was granted in a way that he never expected.
One day, after falling asleep during his daily self-reflection, he suddenly realized that he didn't wake up inside his room.
Then he realized that he was given a second chance to redo his life in a different universe.
But is this the second chance that Mark yearned for?
It didn't take Mark too long to understand that this world was beyond his wildest imagination and he was caught up in a greater plot than he expected.
Will his desire to find the love of his life matters in front of the truth behind the creation of the world?
Follow Mark's journey as he travels beyond time, beyond space, and beyond reality where he may finally find the love of his life.
After all, it takes more than just determination to change oneself and reach one's goal.
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Author here! Almost 200 chapters. New readers may think that this story is about the MC chasing a villainess girl and then they fall in love. Well, that's how it sounds, right? However, it's not... It's about pain and how to deal with the pain... When the whole multiverse wants you and your loved ones dead. When you get caught in an insane plot and it can drive you insane... Then from the insanity, you search for the right answer. The story has a more complex take on the theme, with an extremely smart and omniscient antagonist. Well, it might not even be in the theme anymore. More like sarcasm. Moreover, the MC himself learns and evolves, mentally and physically. It's gruesome... The adventure is full of painful experiences... Loss and a lot of thinking, and more thinking... There seems to be no perfect answer... There are always unexpected twists Far from a romantic story. If you read you will know how complex the story is... I know that the earlier chapters were pretty average, even a bit boring, but if you manage to read up to chapter 130+, you will understand why this story is worth it!
Pretty great book so far. Initially you would want to smack the MC on his head but he forces himself to change and his transformation feels natural. And his abilities are pretty freaking great :0 Very well written chapters with a lot of stuff going on and yet everything fits in a proper flow.
I finished reading the first 3 chapters. Got to say I like the self-awareness of the MC in the beginning, very easy to follow with the pacing that I think is good on how you pulled it off. A well thought out backstory with said that the MC knows his position and he understands his placement in his old world then suddenly being transported into somewhere he doesn't know is quite surprising for me at least.
I finished all 19 chapters and although I enjoy your premise and everything leading up to MC awakening his hidden gift, I found an issue with the execution of during the time Judgment and Pride were introduced. Chapter 14 and 15 were the biggest issues since we have sudden swaps between first person pov and third person pov. For example, you use "I", yet you refer to the other Adams in a third person manner. If I see other people that look like me, I think I would still be using "me" rather than view the other person by my own name using first person POV. This is something to be careful of especially with writing different point of views. His sudden transformation before this point was fine, but when it got here, that's when it got convoluted. Then I also liked the flashbacks that you've implemented, but be careful of what I mentioned prior regarding swapping POVs. The next thing I want to mention is regaridng information overload. Some characters are memorable. MC's parents, Lillia, the Frost Queen, and the baby she carries, etc. However, some other people are much too forgettable and a lot of them were introduced too fast without much explanation. This also goes to my point of information overload, where the readers are introduced to too much at once and stuff became rather confusing. So after all of that dialogue, we don't understand why did the God of Creation choose our MC to inherit its powers. Chapter 18 was okay with the stories, but 19 was a lot of information clumped together. I know that you're trying to mimic a novel style with the paragraphs, but online books are much harder to read if there's too much sentences and information slapped together. I recommend spacing some parts and work on seperating the dialogue into more paragraphs to make it easier to read, so you can improve your execution in this aspect too.
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Very enjoyable read didnt realize i was in the last chapter and.... well got hit by fken reality dude was like you do realize that's all the chapters right? and then I died. Morre plez Im old no money no house beggar please more chapter author plez
One of the best novels I've read on wn, and extremely addcting to the point where I always check it the moment I open wn. Everytime I see that it's updated, I literally go over the moon. Writing Quality - Though there are a few grammatical errors, the writing style and words are nothing short of exceptional. Every thing is described nicely and easy to understand. Plus, grammar doesn't matter much these days so you get 5 stars. Stability of Updates - Love that it's updating everyday, but sadly I read too fast to be satisfied. I respect your effort for keeping up everyday! 5 stars! Story Development - A bit cliched but also has originality. Incredibly enjoyable to read, plus I like the small twists every now and then. It also makes me want to know what happens next, getting me more addcted. 5 stars again! Character Design - <Spoilers> Cool reincarnated neet from another world with the power of a god and a cold tall woman with ice powers and a cute baby. Excellent diversity so far. And the character development- oh yes the character development- exquisite~ Love how he has to change his mindset first to be able to become stronger and control his power. Also love the fact that his life mission is to get the best gf in the world. World Background - When I first read this, it left me speechless. Putting both fantasy hierarchy and the space setting is an incredible idea, plus there's also an backstory of how it came to be like that and that makes it all the more interesting to read. And it's so incredibly well written that it actually makes me think that such a setting could be real and out there somewhere in the universe. Overall Score - P E R F E C T I O N I would 100% recommend this to anyone I meet. Need more chapterrrrrs!!! (I think I'm going to need treatment for my addiction now)
I just finished reading your first chapter. I must say you put a lot of work in it and it's creative. However, it's a lot of exposition in the first Chapter. All the backstory, worldbuilding... You know. Every Information that's not conveyed by Dialogue or Action. The other scenes beside the Exposition are good though. Keep as much Information as possible hidden from the audience They are smart, and will figure it out You have a great Set up. Try to show a little bit of scene of mc getting bashed up in his date or something. I'm not a date expert. So, I can't tell you this in detail. Only can give an idea of what should be written first. If you show such scenes where mc feel very low and sad, although he put a lot of effort in this date, it would give a proper way to convey emotions of the mc in a dialogue or actions. Also, show only what is necessary for the character to know, not for the audience. Like the god of creation and God of void info. It's too much for me to process this much info right at the beginning and I'm sure it is same for other readers Additionally, it makes it reasonable to tell our mc and the the audience patiently, the Info that's very basic for anyone to know. It is currently all internal, I think that's hard to convey without any external reflection. Like, talking with someone else about it, or showing the emotional change through action can get a better effect. If you just tell what happened, it also takes a little bit away from the Reader finding out about it. You know... Now, I am not an expert though... I've seen many novels doing the same thing at first. some get popular while some doesn't. It depends. So, it's up to you whether you feel right to change the arrangement of plot a bit and add some emotional scenes in it to make it more lively and natural. That's all I have to say. I'll leave a review on webnovel if you like. However, I need your permission If I can put this up or not. thinking Anyway, good work. You did a great job! Keep it up!
Story is undoubtedly good, but i guess there was too much simping for me. Mystery and action parts were decent but romance was weird in that situation, it feels like author forced mc to simp after girls
This my first time writing a review and my English is pretty bad so sorry if I made any mistakes. This is one of my favorite novels I discovered it by chance but it turn out that I found gold. Writing Quality- there are almost no grammatical errors English isn't my first language so even if there's some grammatical errors they are negligible since everything is understandable. the writing style is so good that you feel like you're inside the story especially the different POVs of the same moment, that's what truly suck you inside the story. ⭐⭐⭐⭐⭐ Stability of Updates - there's no need to talk about this, the update is daily without any delays⭐⭐⭐⭐⭐ Story Development - steady development of the story with a lot of unexpected but enjoyable twists that make you eager to know what happens next and make you think of a lot of possibilities it can even make you join the {F5 SECT}.⭐⭐⭐⭐⭐ Character Design - maybe you won't like the mc at first but as you see him changes (becoming smarter,stronger, more confident and more aware about what's around him) you'll love him. as for other characters they are so real that you can feel their emotions and understand their thinking⭐⭐⭐⭐⭐ World Background - it reminds me of the novel <I’m the Evil Lord of an Intergalactic Empire!> but it's something bigger and mor diverse it makes you think we are just a speck of dust in the universe and there's something hidden in space that we didn't discover and it might reach us at any moment.⭐⭐⭐⭐⭐ -WARNING- THIS NOVEL IS ADDICTIVE, PROCEED WITH CAUTION. Wow it's my first time writing something this long.
Good read! Each character has their own personality and feel real enough. The background is also very good and the power structure is visible early on too. Your update stability needs more work though. Overall it's a nicely written story! 👍
maybe the start isnt incredible but it gets a lot better after chapter 50 approximately and it keeps getting better. very good plot twist, incredible first important villain and incredible protagonist with an interesting process of thinking. recommended to the people interested in complex protagonists, particular developments, great worldbuilding and fantasy story. overall 9.75/10
Very good story but I can tell that the story doesn't click with me. Might try to read more later but will probably not. Hopefully this gets finished and not dropped.
This is my first web novel and so far its very good, i am only on chapter 46 but i really like it. I got recomended to read this thru TikTok and i am glad i was
Hey author-San wanted to leave a review as well as a question I have…. First my question who is the main female lead, and the romance when we gonna see some development with Adam and whoever is gonna be is counterpart or even harem(which I am rooting for here HAREMMMM) (if you can answer that) Next my review as of chapter 32 I love the story so far honestly have no compliants if I had any it would be the “split personality/primordial Authorities” amazing concept just it needs to fleshed out a pit more for me
Control your power authorr... if scientists get the scent of your amazingness, then they will surely take you away for experiments ! It's just an amazing book! It's super deep and super thought out! I don't even know how to describe it, just go and read this absolute gem! GO!
I don't like the whole multiple personalities thing the mc have going, the rest was ok.
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Its not your typical otome villain story. Its actually good man. Its been a lovely experience so far. Thanks for your work here dude.(BDW I'm from the future, so if u have any queries, feel free to ask..!!)
Revelar Spoiler I wanna smack the MC's head soo much like mannnnn it was frustrating but yeah he has a realistic character growth pacing somewhat slow at times but this one is i guess "a diamond in the rough"
Review that EVERYONE going into this story should read. With the emergence of the whole otome and villian webnovel/lightnovel genre, readers in the audience come with certain expectations. You expect a whole academy, a kingdom or what not. No, its not that this novel doesn't have that similar stuff. But as of this review which is the max chapters (40ish), the whole story is very different to what one would expect from coming in. The novel's world building, the amount of POV changes just for 1 particular scene, the slow pacing, the amount of exposition, the amount of deepness really suggests that this world powers will be as large as a CULTIVATION novel (Multiverse/universal level confirmed). All of this makes the novel feel quite heavy to read. This is definitely not your typical slice of life rom com novel you would expect. Speaking of comedy, there was almost none of that and its very serious (though I expect it to come during the academy arc). About 20 chapters + that's when the story starts becoming less expository and heavy, but the qualities this novel have are still there. Not to mention, the story feels very shounen (tra*sh to strong) but on a seinen level of maturity (18-40 males). Lots of introspection to add to that. Thus, this novel's content is definitely not for everyone catered to this genre. It's a super big world and a serious take on the genre. If you cannot handle this, then I do not suggest picking it up because even the chapters feel long themselves. You probably won't be able to survive the first 25 chapters or so. END OF REVIEW FOR EVERYONE TO READ. ---------------------------------------------------------------------------- REVIEW THAT YOU CAN READ IF YOU WANT TO. Now I will go into some thoughts I personally have for the novel. Writing linguistic- I was surprised to hear that the author is NOT a native. Because the English in this novel is quite good. The grammar and punctuation itself barely had any problems for webnovel standard. The most common mistake was commas where they shouldn't be. Even though fiction writing can exempt some things, half of what shouldn't there are plain mistakes. If there is an improvement, that would be to make it more flowery and better immersion. But that's difficult to do and I'm basically talking about the actual bookstore publishing level. In other words, as a webnovel quality it is satisfactory. However, I do suggest to tone down the POVs for new characters and keep in mind it will slow scenes down in the novel. Especially coming into the novel, I was overwhelmed. I can't imagine how it would be for a non-native. Story development: Overall, because of its pacing its pretty good. Things are slowly fleshed out and not rushed at all. But one can easily imagine the downsides. If you read the above its not hard to find the consequences. I say its pretty good, but that's because I was able to somehow keep my retention and understand it. Some would REALLY Hate it because of how much content and expository is smashed in your face. It really reminds me of reading Earth's Greatest Magus (One of the all-time top stories on Webnovel). Thus for some people the story development can be very bad. Characters are very good and developing well. I like the main ones so far and heavily look forward to them. The author with his POVs shows that he takes care in presenting them as 3D. Although if I had to be critical, they pale compared to a book-store level (they feel more like characters than humans). But on a webnovel level, very good and enough. World Background- As large as a cultivation novel. Expect 600 chapters + at minimum. That's what it feels like. -------------- Conclusion: It's a novel that can potentially be one of the top novels on this site. It's definitely a hidden gem. I hope this novel becomes at least one of my top 10 favourite novels on this site because it really does feel like it will become one. Every review of mine now ends with me wanting to ship. Oh wait... 40 chapters and with its pacing and lack of heroines I really can't. There's only 1 heroine really that we seen so far (a few? maybe have appeared but just brief). Author I beseech you to create a romantic drama! I wish for at least a strong heavy, dramatic love triangle at the minimum. (Think Oregairu and White Album 2). Harem in the sense of multiple girls interested around mc is preferred. Not in the sense of polygamy and such. You can write realistic characters and hopefully no ruin of story with sm*t. With your story, sm*t scenes should be used to really show that their relationship has extended to this level of LOVE. Not lus*. 1-2 wives is what I like: Love is war. I want to ship! And enjoy the anticipation of my ship sailing or sinking. And the heart wrenching drama that unfolds. Not everyone gets a happy ending. Liu vs the Villainess. Doesn't this love triangle sound great if you focused on them? One's an ice cold beauty, another is an apathetic villainous. We don't need other heroines! Imagine the dynamic interactions. Wouldn't it be so interesting? I would love it if you would do this. They are probably so similar too. You can play around the Mc's taste and that's why he feels great affection for both; however, struggles to choose as they're similar. Ofc its more complex than that but its stuff you can work around with for the complexity of romantic relationships. Awesome novel. Keep it up!