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The daily life of an adventurer
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Please go to my other novel "Adventure Beckons: The Seed of Evil"
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The Story line is pretty good and I like the characters I find that the story is going a great direction, I am really excited to read more chapters , good luck
As fellow new author,I admire how you started your novel. I can already get a general feeling on the direction of the novel is taking,but even then you didn't limit many possibilities of plot development. I'm looking forward to how this story is going to develop. Good luck
Author's review here. At first, the story might seem boring and confusing as the points of view alternate. However, there will be many fight scenes later on, and please feel free to comment me advices. Thank you for reading.
There is a noticeable improvement in quality as the chapters progress. Descriptions and dialogue are better, you get a better sense for the environment in latter chapters. My critiques are that the story feels all over the place and it takes a while to get into what it should be about. It took around 5 chapters to get to the game, and while that would be fine in a typical book webnovels tend to be a lot faster paced. The first five chapters feel like it was becoming a detective story. Sean's attitude seemed to vacillate between meek and passive-aggressive and I feel as though the abuse leveled his way was somewhat unbelievable. To be kicked by a game store employee after being beaten up feels like it's laying it on too thick. The things I feel you can improve on are scene descriptions. If you work on that for a bit I'm sure there'll be a noticeable improvement in the quality of your story.
I really enjoyed game related novels as I am fond of reading webtoons like the legendary moonlight sculptor and overgeared. Keep it up and more power to the author
Absolutely love the comedy and the mystery setting combined in this novel, it got me hooked up and wanting to read more of it! Great job, would love to see more >:3
You will get the hang of it and it will be fine. I hope you can also finish your novel. Best of luck. I don't know what to write else so I will fill this up with these words.