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Ryuuto Azusagawa was just your every day otaku but one day while he was going home from the grocery shop he suddenly died.
After his death he found himself in front of a ROB that granted him three wishes.
And this is his story.
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Noob author here, I'll be grateful for every advice and constructive critic you readers give me and I hope you'll enjoy this story and if you're wondering whether or not I'll write sex scenes then no, I won't at very least not for a while.
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The title is only temporary if you have any suggestions feel free to tell me
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I'm sorry to say the story is good but I find that you are going too fast for the story with rias its not holding the road it looks like its been written as if to get rid of it big bang romance and it's over its be better i think i would do it again but thanks for the idea of the story.
The concept is actually really nice, the only thing is that you went kinda quick with is the whole relationship with Rias.not that i care mind you, but for future stories take it slower. Other than that this story is surprisingly well made, good job
You know that the sacred gear system is made by the biblical god for the humans so they will have weapon that they can use to fight other faction So there is a big chance no this will absolutely happen after the mc get out of dxd the heaven faction will hint down rias because she wasnt a human Sacred gear can only be use by a being with a blood of human like issei he is not full devil he is only half thats why he can still use sacred gear Those gear that is listed on sacred gear system is impotant because most of those are made by the biblical god and every one of those have the potential to kill gods so now tell me author what's really going on what dxd are you watching and you didnt even remove the boosted gear to the system when the mc pass it to rias now the even can know and who the current holder is Heres another one the old satan faction 4 maous help biblical god to seal draig in the boosted gear do you think draig will let a pure blooded devil to wield him
The concept is good but how you wrote it is stupid like an op mc is good but after four or five chapters he already wants to marry that is just stupid if you want to build a relationship you can't do it of screen
Why... do you feel the need to compare the Mc's d*ck with everyone else's, like really, we already *****ng understand he's strong, her powerful, you DON'T need to keep saying that. Stop elevating the Mc's ego and power and TRY to make a believable power boost, at this point this fic is just wish fulfillment.
MC is the typical virgin MC who can't seem to control his hormonal urges, he thinks he values her for other things but upon seeing her beauty he proposed to her being a hypocritical materialist, who hides it, then is simply OP and gets with Rias in a couple of minutes. I don't even care that the pairing is rias, it's just so poorly done, and the story so poorly pitched that it's garbage.
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Shameless author with the shameless five stars review, if you guys have any suggestions for my story please write them here or in the comments, thank you for your help.
The story was pretty good at the beginning. But the mc ask to marry Rias the first time he met her. The love story is badly written. He ask to marry someone the first minute they met and they are in love. Done. This is the love story. The mc is a simp and that's painful to read.
When you see no harem having tons of power stones but low review. thats kinda sus, so i decided to contribute to giving this a one star👌 From what i can see here its a trash so 1 star
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The wishes are interesting and some of the people in the group are ones i haven’t seen used like hermione and widow but other than that the rest is not that good like how him and rias basically see each other once and are married a couple days later other than that its a okay read if u have nothing else to read
Bullshit 5 star reviews even though the story is really bad Pros : Nothing Cons: Everything about this stupid ass novel
The only way to describe this story is “Speed run”. The events happened fast and relationships are faster than Taylor Swift’s break up and new relationships. The story is like a one huge summary.
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Havent read it yet but the concept is promising so i added it please dont drop.
A good story I guess? It seems author forgets the title of the story because the MC just totally forgot to touch any warframe for over 10 chapters or something, and I dont see MC getting many chat group missions too. But otherwise it's good, give it a read.
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Writing quality 4/5 Decent quality, little to no grammar mistakes. Stability of updates 5/5 Upload decently often. Story development 3/5 I was a big fan until the Rias part. I have nothing against her I just believe the romance was way too unrealistic. In what world do you propose on first meeting? Character design 3/5 Unique definitely and I like it for that. I just think he is a bit of a simp, with giving away the boosted gear to Rias to impress her like what? You know how much of a help that would be if you use it yourself? World Background Cliche dimensional chat group. Nice though, new characters like Hermione and Black Widow so overall not bad. Overall 3.8/5 You could work on your romance and trying not to force things, go slower. It feels like I am reading a summary and not a story. I like it though, and can't wait for more chapters. Also don't drop. I'm watching you...
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the book was great for awhile until the Mc met Rias for the first time, his first words to her was "marry me" which instantly made me feel as if he was only charmed by her looks. the Mc says he "knows" her but they have been texting for like a week in which both were probably partly busy, I don't care who the Mc falls for it just feels so forced. I would give this a higher rating but there are a couple bots posting only 5 stars.
Its a shame, it started out so good but then the author had to add a cheap forced romance. I mean literally as soon as he first sees her "will you marry me", not even 5 chapters later they are inseparable. the novel had such promise.