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An ordinary guy by the fulfillment of fate was in front of God, who gave him the opportunity to entertain him, traveling to different worlds! what will the main character do during the journey? start a harem? build a business? everything is possible because he has his whole life ahead of him.
Or maybe more than one...
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please take note that this fan fiction has quite big problems with time!
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Escreva uma avaliaçãoit's a real good story, but i would like to provide my unnecessary input to the author: 1) Please try to proofread if you can, but it's not much important, so even if you don't it works for me 2) Please make sure the MC doesn't start getting girls like Ash catching Pokemons, currently the pace is good, but just don't everyone to his Harem 3) Maybe make Fi go SkyNet just for fun? (a recommendation)
Story is good, however the reason that its not five stars is because the grammer is so hard to understand. Sometimes the author uses quotations for speaking and sometimes he uses hyphins. The author also needs to work on sentence flow otherwise the story is great and entertaining
5 year old simp on crack, this is the most simple explanation I can give anyone, not recommend. But some of you have no taste so go ahead and lose a few brain cells.
It's a pretty good story. Frankly, you only have to work on your grammar and vocabulary and this will be a nicer book to read. However, it's not unreadable unlike other fanfictions in this platform. For the romance part of the story, I think that the relationship between the MC and the girls are progressing a bit too fast. The female leads are coming off as a choroine(easy to get heroine). Let's take for example, his relationship with Alice. You could have let atleast a few months pass before developing the relationship like that. Good looks does give a good impression but it's not everything there is in forming a bond. The first meeting could have progressed into something like a getting-to-know-each-other kinda format. I mean, which girl would just so easily enter a man's house, someone who she just met at that. Aside from those points, I really enjoyed my time reading this. I hope you could update this again, author. God bless and good luck in your future endeavours.
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It is great!! Looking forward to more chapters, I really like how the MC likes Alice Nakiri which is quite a change in pace. Also, the incorporation of Kuroko no Basket is quite interesting because most fan-fic would revolve around Basketball when they involve Kuroko and other basketball characters.
The grammar is bad but other than that it's a good story please proofread the chapter before posting them
More Chapters Every Day Brother Heheheh Thanks For Novel Brother Hopefully Not DROPPED In Novel Brother And God bless you Brother And Keep Spirit Brother Nice Novel Brother
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You need to work on grammar, I get confused just reading 1 paragraph. At least you included what the character looks like but you contradicted yourself by saying he looks ordinary and then saying he look like a beautiful young teenager.