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Madara in the Omniverse
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Soo basically he trasnigrates to marvel gets a system but it only shows stats and has shop doesn't give quests. another thing his personality will be like madara and he will also look like madara.
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good idea terrible performance it's so filled with nonsense that reads like a kid who had just read the urban dictionary and couldn't make up his mind about anything
It has potential if I had to say so. There are a lot of problems in this though as stated :- 1.The sentences are readable like you will understand what the mc is trying to say but there could be alot of improvement on some obvious mistakes. 2.Author in the beginning keeps changing his mind and keeps adding stuff in while something is happening. If I had to give a tip to the author is just have a general plan on what you are going to do with the story, like have a solid plan you can revolve around. 3.Story development wise it's decent like I can see what the authors trying to get to but not taking the right steps. 4. World back ground is what do I say it's marvel.... and character design is well Madara is Madara.... The plus point is as stated :- 1.The story is new so it's still changeable. 2.idk why but for me this feels kinda refreshing 3. I like the idea of where the author is trying to get to but not sure if he will get to them. 4. It's not cringy. 5. It has potential Things to improve from my pov 1 Get a editor or just learn basic English. 2.Don't just change the story whenever you like. It might not be effecting the novel now but it will if you do it later. 3.Post more like once or twice a week.
It has everything for someone like me who like overpowered and not beta-simp. Mc is overpowered and not beta-simp and he has Sigman rules and keeps his priorities straight but all of this doesn't mean he is cold-hearted, he has minimal moral and e.g you will know if you read the latest chapters and he has personality of madara cause he is the reincarnation of madara and a madara with no power amd memory of his past life in modern world where anime and marvel is just fictions but don't worry the naruto version madara didn't take over the body.
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It has a bumpy start but after the time skip it starts to get good. The writing quality is okay for a fanfic. There are a lot of changes in the story which makes it hard to follow but the author fixes most of them in the later chapters. The conversations between the characters are a bit to short. But they are generally good. I would recommend giving this a read. Fixes you can do: Grammer checking before publishing (use commas and capital letters). Try to put yourself in the mc's shoes which is Madara and what he would do. Make the chapters a little bit longer they are ending to fast, you can make them longer. Describe their surrounding so the reader can understand better where they are, this will also make the chapter longer. Don't switch perspective to much as it can get a bit confusing for the reader.