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Greg moved to America after his heart had been broken by his only girlfriend.
He had the option to work from home (as an anonymous streamer) but all he did was reminisce about his first and only love that had been with him for only a short while.
The day before an interview to TBC Company, he saw an accident and not thinking Greg rushed to the scene to save any survivors.
That’s when he saw an Sophia walk out of the car and faint. Since his phone was dead he couldn’t call an ambulance but he could at least offer mouth to mouth resuscitation. He didn't know that he took her first kiss and she inadvertently fell in love with him.
Will Sophia repair his broken heart and restore his faith in love? Join the roller-coaster.
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The writer is my #1 reader and wanted to support this book. Please, encourage this Author to continue, the story is good and in terms of grammatical error, that would be fixed sooner or later. [Right? #1} Give this book a chance.
Revelar Spoiler I'm giving you a five star, but you know what we need to do right? I don't want another reader to bash me for giving you this stars, Work it, my friend, remember, what's needed to be fixed. Go, go, go! Fighting. I'm recommending this book, give it a chance, you will love it.
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You MUST work on editing your story. I'm sorry for the low rating but I couldn't get through the first chapter as there are uncountable grammar and syntax errors. English is my third language but I do my best not to make mistakes in my writings. Please take this into consideration, nobody will carry on reading your novel it you don't work on the mistakes.
I rate 5 ⭐️because of your story is good.. keep up the good work.. i believe you’ll make this story better and better in the future... good luck author and dont give up 👍🏻💪🏻
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please find time to fix the use of english word the story is good but the editor or writer made some mistakes in using english words just my opinion I don't want to offend you but what I'm saying is a fact I hope you can continue your love of making novel take this as a practice
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read for first 20 chapters already. as an aspiring author myself. I don't mind about the grammar issue so much as I'm pretty technical to the level that I could tolerate 7th language English level. but the problem is on the paragraph breaks. if you're writing fantasy. then it's normal that you have a lengthy narration / conversation quote. but this is the romance genre where everyone reads it as "loving story". consider to fix your paragraph. made it max 5 sentences/paragraphs or 3 sentences/paragraphs. world background wise. you need to improve it as I see that you're using the heavy narration, try to change world building from narration to conversation .it will works 4/5 for the determination of the author to write despite of no one seems reading on it.
Nice Story.... You are doing so well 😍😍😍.... Author.... Keep it up.... We will support You...... 👍👍👍...... Mass Release.... Plsss.... 🙏🙏🙏
Awesome full of sweet moments. The scene is also enviting to read. What made me interested are the chapters are arranged from 2 different point of views.
Wow very interesting u are such a good writer keep it hope. it's really nice reading your book.keep the good work rocking.love from me to you 💋💋💋
This Story is decent but the poor grammar and languahe are ruining the book. The author stated several times to edit it but he doesn't and instead he focuses on publishing daily. I deopped the story after a short while so I can't say much about it, but the way she falls in love with him is poorly described and just states "love at first kiss" but it was kinda obvious, after all the title states it. All in all if the author really improves the quality of his writing, it should be a good read though .
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Read 3 paragraphs and was not sure what I was reading. Not a single comma, which makes sentences often very difficult to read. And it's mentioned that the MC weighs like 130kg, most of it is fat and not muscles so he can be considered handsome or something like that. Incredibly confusing since regardless of how you put it, it's weird. 130kg of fat on 190cm body height is very very big and you would not be considered handsome. 130 kg muscles on 190cm is huge as well and would look more like some of the strongman or idk. I'll try and complete the first chapter but I can only hope the reading experience becomes better and you don't have to think 5 times what the author wants to tell you.
Seem like an interesting story. Would love to know whether he also fall in love with her? Hope both will find happiness with the right person.
I'm sorry I couldn't give you all five star, I highly recommend this book. It's exciting and fun to read, update release is excellent and everything else. With the exception of the Grammar, if you can get past that, then you would love this story. Give this Author some love and add it to your library for future, editing of the book. You would love their story.
Looking at the reviews here, and the comments in the novel, there isn't much I can really add on which you are not aware of. Writing Quality: I know English isn't your first language, and that you are making an effort to imrpove but it really is very hard to read. Structurally, it is all over the place as you have so many ideas jumbled into one sentence. I do implore you to do these basics: (i) Use Grammarly. It is free and very useful (ii) Break down your sentences more. (iii) Proper punctuations (full stops) and capitalize. You have to start somewhere, and just slowly get used to the basic grammar writing before doing other things. Story Development: The progress and things that happen are good. You have so many ideas that it makes the story interesting. It has SO MUCH potential. However, if people are unable to follow it due to the inability to read smoothly, a rough gem will never shine. You need to polish it so its shine can be seen. Character Design: The ML and FL are believable. You can understand the ML stone heart and the FL naivety when it comes to falling in love. Keep that up. It is good. I am sorry I cannot give you 5*; I believe in being honest. Only the stability of updates get full marks whereas the rest needs lota of work. All the best, Author.