Lazy Life As The Primordial

LV 5

Darkstar11051999

Author is here, the book is pretty much here because I'm bored. 1- I'm not a native English speaker so there are bound to be grammatical errors. 2- There will be no story development as the MC is the strongest existence, and since I don't know how to write romance so I am predicting that it'll be trash. 3- The characters will pretty much be bland, I mean the dude can literally fart and wipe the omniverse and is lazy so what do you expect? 4- Updating stability is non-existent, I'll update whenever I feel like it and if I lost interest I'd drop it even after the prologue. 5- World background? I'm plagiarizing other works and not gonna add original content except my protagonist. _____________________ This is pretty much an honest and objective review on what you're gonna read, so if you want to continue then you're welcome.

LV 11

BrownOptometrist

Damn this is a masterpiece and definitely needs to be read. And incredible job Author-san and keep up the amazing job you've done so far 😊👍

LV 2

The_Sheep

is it sincerely your first time writing? it's very good, except for some things that can be easily fixed, like in a chapter where you repeat a lot of "He" at the beginning of the paragraphs to say what the MC is doing, try to diversify by putting his name "Jin" or even play with it, example: '' The primordial pervert otaku loses his virginity '' instead of '' He '' or '' Jin ''. Basically try not to repeat the words too much, it makes reading boring

LV 14

EverythingRelevant

To start off, the grammer and spelling is great, which means that this novel is 99% better than most fics already. Second, the author keeps you entertained throughout the novel and although it only has 8 chapters, you can feel the effort that the author has put in. This novel will definitely gain popularity in the future if it keeps going in the direction its going. Keep up the good work author! Rating - 10/10

LV 10

JUST_LAUGH

Amazing Book😍 since this is what I like strong from the start and not boring😊 add the world travel perfect👌. You might misslead to the chapter since currenly a little but each chapter avarage of 5k words there are chapter that 7k + words. Please don't drop this Author you hear me

LV 12

Silver_Epsilon

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LV 12

Silver_Epsilon

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LV 6

FAP_Master_

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LV 4

Itachi_Hyoudou

I would rate this bad boy a big 5 five star. This shit is hard. You can tell the difference between a fanfiction that the author puts effort and a fanfiction that the author doesn't put any effort. This fanfic has a great design. Great set up right from the start. I can surely say that this is a fanfic that author puts his efforts and work into. This is a masterpiece. Would highly recommend it to for anyone.

LV 15

Slushy_Apollo

Overall a good novel but idk if something happened or if the author dropped it since it hasn’t been updated in quite a while and I really hope we get news on it soon

LV 4

Khaos_Dgnrate

Can you please add more chapter tearl quick? .... i love this .... ....... .................................................................

LV 3

hello_there_0468

I love it, this is one of my most favorite books in my library. Author did a really good job even though it's only been a small amount of chapters.

LV 2

The_Sheep

* Critical text (points to improve and those things) * I just read everything, in the matter of grammar there is not much to talk about, only that you can improve in some aspects, as in the last comment I made on the use of "He" and also try to put yourself more in the character's place (female character * I know it's weird to put yourself in the shoes of a woman, but it helps a lot later when describing, creating a female character or trying to show her personality in the novel * and male character), another important thing that many authors of fan-fic don't, try, is to understand the character's personality, and not only try to clone him in the fanfic, notice and understand the character's personality makes the story more fluid, interesting and unique, because you won't have to copy what he does and speak, because you will already know what he can do / talk in each situation, I recommend you to read the fan-fic Annihilation Maker DXD, the author uses the personality of each character well without having to force or copy * (I am not saying that you copy or force the characters, just that you need to understand more the personality of each character and not only write what you saw in the novel / anime, it will make the development of the story and characters more interesting and original) *. Two other important points, first, try to change the original story more, it's cool to see a fanfic, but it's boring to see the same things that happened in the anime happen in the fanfic, try to create more unusual and interesting situations that could possibly happen but it didn't happen in anime, secondly, I realized that you don’t really like to write romance, and you tend to push a lot, you don’t have to push (probably because of the boring readers who are boring and want a harem at the first 10 chapters) do whatever you think more interesting (keeping in mind the personality of the characters etc) doesn’t have to be a super fast harem, the MC can just ask girls to go with him, and with time and situations they’ll create bonds and feelings, not need to be that fast (**** readers who want to see a harem in the first 10 chapters).

LV 4

LastGod

So this was OK up until after he got to the fate stay verse. During that, there became too many girls to even keep track of. After that, he didn't even care about the story where he was going. It's just a list of girls that he wants. I mean, I can write a list of hot girls also. It doesn't make it a good story.

LV 4

Dick_Wizard

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LV 4

PRiMoRiDiaL

The author destroyed his own story because of lack of imagination. If he just made that the mansion-house he has was connected to every world he goes so that he can meet those know him or those living in his house then that was better but he goes and do his thngy onmi powrrs where he will cuck himself cause he will be everywhere retard

LV 5

jeanpierregerardo

good history. *************************************************************************************************************************************************************

LV 1

CGS_134

It's good. But the protagonist is not good where he is simply because he doesn't kill the ones he doesn't like and he just acts like he's a mortal but he's not. has good grammar.

LV 2

staticshiv

When will you update again ????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????