Sinopse
Heaven site.
" Man I already am strongest but don't have any beauties hey don't laugh on father's pain Tathagata and you also pagoda".
"sorry my king ha ha ". a golden old man is apologizing to the young man .
" oh sorry" a strongly looking old man is also apologizing.
" my king why don't u reicarnate yourself to earth at that time u can create your one harem.
" look ho is saying ho doesn't even have a single lover. "
" you old pagu how about you who doesn't even get erect ".
you two keep your mouth shut . Reincarnation is a good idea but I 1st seal all of my powers " .
"even if u seals all your power u will still be the strongest " then reincarnate by body to a very weak person and also seal all of my memory only leave the small memory part of my cultivator side . and don't interfere with my new life "
By saying these that man got vanish from the heaven ..
" come back soon with our Queens , my king " with the water dropping from there ear those two old man also got vanish from heaven.
"In earth ".
where am I and what's with the dream. oh crap it's time for my school if I late I would be punished ". A very weak look but a very delicate looking young boy saying these by wearing his school uniform. " mom dad I am going to school see u " with a bread in his mouth he running toward his school
-- Ranking de
Poder 
-- Pedra de
Poder Você também pode gostar
5Opiniões
- Qualidade de Escrita
- Estabilidade das atualizações
- Desenvolvimento de Histórias
- Design de Personagens
- Antecedentes do mundo
Compartilhe seus pensamentos com outras pessoas
Escreva uma avaliação
The story is fun and instersting but the grammar is really bad and need an edit also the explaination about background story for each character is lacking and the flow of story feels rushed.
Hey there! Good day for writing! If you wanted to see whether you can get paid by distributing the current work or getting financial support by writing new work, you might want to contact kenreview@outlook.com. A brief introduction, some sample chapters or links will be appreciated when reaching out.
The storyline is that bad but the GRAMMAR!!! It annoys me so much. I think you should probably try to fix your grammar, you’ll get more readers👍😄
If someone edit this please comment here so I will know xD... The story is good and very creative its just that the grammar is.... LOLOLOSLOLSOALSOALS
Just the amount of grammar issues in the synopsis turned me off, you should really fix that. 1401401401401401401401401401401041041040140`40`40`40104104104104