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Genshin Impact: Soul System
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A soul traversed through dimension and realm, to arrive in the world of Teyvat. There, the soul finds a perfect body, or to the souls previous knowledge, a Soul-bearing puppet, which had the appearances of a certain character he had seen within a game called Genshin Impact.
Upon possessing the said body and awakened. He now has to figure out what he should do onwards to not have a big impact on the story, after all, he is an existence that wasn’t a part of the game he had played, his presence may mean changes to the story line that he was familiar with.
But with the help of a certain system, he will live in this world without any regrets. Perhaps even finding happiness in this life.
A/N I don’t own anything but the character idea!
Cover artist: KuroiDa
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Dejé la historia después de que el protagonista fuera tan molesto durante dos años seguidos que el sistema decidió abandonarlo, el diálogo está bien pero necesita mejoras, hay demasiadas interacciones que no hemos visto y no se explica mucho que digamos por lo que las relaciones parecen forzadas, la historia parece no tener sentido con respecto al efecto mariposa ocurren alteraciones en lo que debería haber sucedido cuando él protagonista no tiene nada que ver un ejemplo de esto sería más enemigos al inicio cuando se dice reiteradas veces que no ha hecho nada esto sería perfectamente razonable si hubiera hecho algo por enfurecer a los monstruos locales o acelerar los planes de la orden del abismo sin embargo solo nos dice que ha interactuado muy poco con personajes principales y secundarios dejando fuera algunas excepciones, el protagonista parece tener un orgullo innecesario y un comportamiento algo impulsivo qué le hace creer que él es el centro del mundo y qué tiene el poder de lograrlo todo. La historia parece interesante al principio pero muy rápidamente se convierte en incesantes tonterías que hacen que El lector pierda el interés. Aunque no recomiendo la historia me parece un buen esfuerzo del autor y espero que su calidad de escritura y trabajos mejore. La historia en sí no fue mala lo malo fue como desarrollo el autor la historia el autor tampoco es malo simplemente se le complicó y no supo cómo captar el interés del lector.
Author here, I’m thinking of rewriting the whole thing because it feels so disastrous
very good story the only problems I have it's that the dialog is a little lacking and it's a little to fast paste which makes it seem worse if the dialog and interactions had a little more depth to it as well as a little more charecter development/depth like how did he meet them and what's the story that allowed him to get close to them all ect act plenty of stories apart this way and have flash backs or indepth dialog about this but the lack of/fast pace of the dialog and story as a whole makes the whole interactions with the cast seemed rushed or forced tldr story's very good just the pacing and dialog with the lack of some detail is the problem also ~oni chan --->
Great Fanfic , tho occcasional grammar mistakes and slow updates it's still great since writing is your hobby [img=recommend]
It has a good start and premise though i would have recommend that you actually show us the main character meeting and interacting with the genshin cast as simply telling us doesn't really sell the idea of them being friends. How is he friends with them? How do they interact? What kind of relationship to they have? These are the things that should be shown naturally and not just "oh they are friends". After that, then you can have some timeskip.
Its a great wtart and has a lot of potential .....pls keep updating regularly i just hate it when a work is going on so well and suddunly the author gets bored of it and leaves it
The story is developing well, but the author needs more confidence to continue working, and I would also like the size of the chapter to be larger. And so everything is very good.