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Everything was going well. It was a rather ordinary day for Asta. He was helping everyone he could in the village of Hage until one day he decided to assist a strange merchant who offered him, in exchange for his help, a potion that, according to him, granted magical power. Burning with the desire to finally be able to use magic, ten-year-old Asta agreed, but instead of magic, he received something else.
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As I read the first chapters, I realized that you made the same mistake as the original author: rushing. Everything is very fast, there are no smooth transitions between one event and another, everything happens immediately, without going into depth, without an elaborate construction of the events, things happen and that's it, simple as that. You are a beginning writer, you have good ideas and a lot of room to grow, I hope this review really helps you, I would certainly like to read new Black Clover fics.
It's fine I guess. It's not great but it was alright until the Author changed the dialogue from "Hello" to -- Hello -- At that point just put it on wattpad.
La historia está bien editada, los personajes y la historia se desarrolla de forma adecuada y da sentido el desarrollo de esta, no hay cambio en el desarrollo de la personalidad de los personajes, divertido y un desarrollo estable
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I really liked Asta especially meeting Noelle and helping with her doubts. I think it's too late for Nozel to take action now. Noelle realized what a real family is. I hope Noelle says a lot of things to Nozel and the other Silvas. Nozel always spoiled Solid and Nebra and treated Noelle like trash, even knowing the truth about Acier's death. He's even worse than Solid and Nebra. Hi, I have a question, when will the next chapter be?
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