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Simple, Direct, On Track, Very Satisfying. No Overarching Story or Evil Masterminds Behind Puppets Of Puppets. Just A Plain Simple Straightforward OP MC With A Chill Personality. Highly Recommended. It Almost Seem Like A Cartoon Show, Different Islands Same Pathway.
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Best story I have read in about 3 years I would recommend it to anyone online because I am to lazy to care about doing it anywhere else. Overall this story has a 10/10 Mac to follow and I love his personality, style and so on. Keep it up, PLEASE!
It's more than I expected, it's great that it's not from any side, it's just the MC's adventures and that's great, 5 stars from me, GO FOR IT!!
MC personality fkin ruins it. Acts pretty full of himself and the entire plot bends itself for him. Also just wastes time chasing booze, even a brain-dead harem anime is 100x better than this. If you want a rude, stubborn, full of shit MC this is for you.
4.8 This is a good fanfic and one of the better ones within one piece. MC is OP and the adventure and plot progression drives this fanfic. hope this continues until the very end
So awesome I’m loving this story ❤️❤️Takumi is so cool I love how caring he is without him even realising ❤️❤️❤️❤️xxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxx
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At first I really like this fanfiction; I read the original version and at one point it becomes terrible. The author introduces a concept that hadn’t appeared before, which I really disliked. However aside from that unfortunate moment it’s pretty cool.
It’s alright I guess. Got some instant gratification but it gets stale pretty quickly. And of course we got the Chinese npc dialogue. I read quite a few chaps and then just got bored
Btw to all those that say mc is depressed and wouldn’t change mc did but its in the later chapters. Thanks author for this wonderful masterpiece.
I like it... The stories of characters are well written... A indept view of one piece... Though I would have preffered the mc to continue his journey as a lone traveller watching various characters and plots from an outsider point of view.. One against the norms as a lone traveller should be but that just my opinion...
Best one piece fanfic I've ever read. Good translation. ..................................................................................................................................
Heres how the story goes: MC gets to new island, signs in, power up, throw in a popular character, popular character gets surprised at his potential, tries to recruit him and gets rejected. Repeat. Same thing at least till chapter 40, repeated like 5 times. MC feels like an edgy teenager.
The character is strong because there is a system, but there is no content describing training at all. There is no goal to become stronger. Just a journey to log in, without a goal. The main character is made to be a child but likes to drink. In his previous life, he was only 17 years old. He did it to make other characters look down on him and then be shocked that he can drink well. It's nonsense. Another thing is that the character's nature of not liking to respond and doing the same as other people is annoying. But that's what's annoying. If there wasn't a strong system, it would have died long ago in the One Piece world. This story can be read continuously, but if it's not fun, it's considered bad. I hope it will be improved to be better.
The story was enjoyable at the beginning however it became very boring very fast and what can completely made me stop reading this novel is Enel join the crew of the protagonist
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I think everything is perfect just not the mc as he is like a machine with really no emotion and if he does something then the author has to take some time to explain why he felt doing that and to be honest without his system he is literally a character not even worth mentioning in the story......like he does not even train or something everything he gets at a plate from the system And the side character i think this translation is only for them not the mc as he does nothing and make his own double standards so yeah the story is pretty perfect without this annoying mc
It's a very great One Piece fanfiction!! I like it!!! 👍👍 It have a great plot/storyline and great english/translation.. The grammar is good too... I like the idea about sign in system, then quest to do in that place.. But it still the easy place.. I think it will be interesting to see sign in place like Marineford, Enies Lobby, or Mariejois and what his quest will be.. I don't mind MC/Takumi character.. But why you must make him alcoholic since child?? Love your story author san.. Keep up the great job 😁👍😍😍😍
It's a very good fanfic, but what I don't like about it is that the main character lacks personality, very cold and insensitive, as if nothing matters, which makes the story feel bland.
to be honest i really hate this fanfiction due to 3 reasons, somehow getting naruto abilities in the first 3 chapters with him basically being a slave to a system which is honestly just boring and overused for plot at this point. I also did not like how he was pretty much just some depressed teenager with everybody else trying to get him out of depression or some shit, the story is also pretty crazy with a 10-year-old drinking alcohol at the age of 10, learning all 3 types of haki, and etc.
I loved this book. finally something else then a pirat/marine/government/antigovernment. The MC is nonchalant and only cares about traveling the seas to check into new locations. The storyline is so good. Really recommend reading this book
The greatest problem here is that mc lacks any kind of emotion. While reading these you want to feel something (even if that feeling is not good) but here its just bland. In a rundown version of mc character , mc sems like chinese "young master" with his nose above the clouds in onepiece verse. He just moves because system said so and while meeting other characters there isn't any kind of feel to it. It's like a documentary by old history teacher , reciting whatever is there.
I read the story and I have to say I really liked it, especially the character. I hope he continues like this and never gives up.
The story itself isnt bad and the rest of the characters are done pretty well. The biggest problem is the Mc. You would think he would show some type of emotion after all this time but he's just an apathetic emo kid with too much power. His personality is so bland and boring that it takes away from the rest of the story. Most of his system tasks revolve around interacting with other people but he's so shit at it that it makes some tasks take a longer time for no other reason than the fact that being a drunkard is his only personality trait.
Very good translator it's just the novel is very bad it's a no emotion emo cool acting mc I would have rather the mc be a cringe young master type because atleast there you could find something funny but here there is only a 10 year old emo robot alcoholic mc
The author does a good job with the writing and that is what hurts the most, the Chinese do not know how to make a good one piece plot, in short he is just a depressive child who one day woke up the system and began to obey. religiously, the protagonist has no charisma or self-esteem, he is just a robot that obeys the system, the interactions are so low and forced.
Ta god :) es lo único que puedo decir de esta lectura ahora solo voy a escribir para subir esto y dar mi apoyo a este libro, que mas podria decir de este libro, y es la rápida subida de Capitulo sin bajar la calidad de escritura.
Personally, in my opinion, this story is not bad with the MC focusing on his goal of completing the task given, plus writing that suits me
Feel free to ask me anything, and I'll do my best to answer with what I know about this book. If you notice anything lacking in the quality of the novel, please let me know. I've tried to translate as free of Chinese elements as possible and have changed the Chinese names to fit One Piece characters. I'm always looking to improve, so if you spot any issues with the translation, I'd appreciate your feedback to help me enhance my skills. For this whole week, you'll receive chapters every two hours. I hope you'll support me so I can continue releasing two chapters every two hours next week as well.
Simple, Direct, On Track, Very Satisfying. No Overarching Story or Evil Masterminds Behind Puppets Of Puppets. Just A Plain Simple Straightforward OP MC With A Chill Personality. Highly Recommended. It Almost Seem Like A Cartoon Show, Different Islands Same Pathway.
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Revelar Spoiler Best story I have read in about 3 years I would recommend it to anyone online because I am to lazy to care about doing it anywhere else. Overall this story has a 10/10 Mac to follow and I love his personality, style and so on. Keep it up, PLEASE!
It's more than I expected, it's great that it's not from any side, it's just the MC's adventures and that's great, 5 stars from me, GO FOR IT!!
MC personality fkin ruins it. Acts pretty full of himself and the entire plot bends itself for him. Also just wastes time chasing booze, even a brain-dead harem anime is 100x better than this. If you want a rude, stubborn, full of shit MC this is for you.
4.8 This is a good fanfic and one of the better ones within one piece. MC is OP and the adventure and plot progression drives this fanfic. hope this continues until the very end
So awesome I’m loving this story ❤️❤️Takumi is so cool I love how caring he is without him even realising ❤️❤️❤️❤️xxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxx
Revelar Spoiler At first I really like this fanfiction; I read the original version and at one point it becomes terrible. The author introduces a concept that hadn’t appeared before, which I really disliked. However aside from that unfortunate moment it’s pretty cool.
It’s alright I guess. Got some instant gratification but it gets stale pretty quickly. And of course we got the Chinese npc dialogue. I read quite a few chaps and then just got bored
Btw to all those that say mc is depressed and wouldn’t change mc did but its in the later chapters. Thanks author for this wonderful masterpiece.
I like it... The stories of characters are well written... A indept view of one piece... Though I would have preffered the mc to continue his journey as a lone traveller watching various characters and plots from an outsider point of view.. One against the norms as a lone traveller should be but that just my opinion...
Best one piece fanfic I've ever read. Good translation. ..................................................................................................................................
Heres how the story goes: MC gets to new island, signs in, power up, throw in a popular character, popular character gets surprised at his potential, tries to recruit him and gets rejected. Repeat. Same thing at least till chapter 40, repeated like 5 times. MC feels like an edgy teenager.
The character is strong because there is a system, but there is no content describing training at all. There is no goal to become stronger. Just a journey to log in, without a goal. The main character is made to be a child but likes to drink. In his previous life, he was only 17 years old. He did it to make other characters look down on him and then be shocked that he can drink well. It's nonsense. Another thing is that the character's nature of not liking to respond and doing the same as other people is annoying. But that's what's annoying. If there wasn't a strong system, it would have died long ago in the One Piece world. This story can be read continuously, but if it's not fun, it's considered bad. I hope it will be improved to be better.
The story was enjoyable at the beginning however it became very boring very fast and what can completely made me stop reading this novel is Enel join the crew of the protagonist
Revelar Spoiler I think everything is perfect just not the mc as he is like a machine with really no emotion and if he does something then the author has to take some time to explain why he felt doing that and to be honest without his system he is literally a character not even worth mentioning in the story......like he does not even train or something everything he gets at a plate from the system And the side character i think this translation is only for them not the mc as he does nothing and make his own double standards so yeah the story is pretty perfect without this annoying mc
It's a very great One Piece fanfiction!! I like it!!! 👍👍 It have a great plot/storyline and great english/translation.. The grammar is good too... I like the idea about sign in system, then quest to do in that place.. But it still the easy place.. I think it will be interesting to see sign in place like Marineford, Enies Lobby, or Mariejois and what his quest will be.. I don't mind MC/Takumi character.. But why you must make him alcoholic since child?? Love your story author san.. Keep up the great job 😁👍😍😍😍
It's a very good fanfic, but what I don't like about it is that the main character lacks personality, very cold and insensitive, as if nothing matters, which makes the story feel bland.
to be honest i really hate this fanfiction due to 3 reasons, somehow getting naruto abilities in the first 3 chapters with him basically being a slave to a system which is honestly just boring and overused for plot at this point. I also did not like how he was pretty much just some depressed teenager with everybody else trying to get him out of depression or some shit, the story is also pretty crazy with a 10-year-old drinking alcohol at the age of 10, learning all 3 types of haki, and etc.
I loved this book. finally something else then a pirat/marine/government/antigovernment. The MC is nonchalant and only cares about traveling the seas to check into new locations. The storyline is so good. Really recommend reading this book
The greatest problem here is that mc lacks any kind of emotion. While reading these you want to feel something (even if that feeling is not good) but here its just bland. In a rundown version of mc character , mc sems like chinese "young master" with his nose above the clouds in onepiece verse. He just moves because system said so and while meeting other characters there isn't any kind of feel to it. It's like a documentary by old history teacher , reciting whatever is there.
I read the story and I have to say I really liked it, especially the character. I hope he continues like this and never gives up.
The story itself isnt bad and the rest of the characters are done pretty well. The biggest problem is the Mc. You would think he would show some type of emotion after all this time but he's just an apathetic emo kid with too much power. His personality is so bland and boring that it takes away from the rest of the story. Most of his system tasks revolve around interacting with other people but he's so shit at it that it makes some tasks take a longer time for no other reason than the fact that being a drunkard is his only personality trait.
Very good translator it's just the novel is very bad it's a no emotion emo cool acting mc I would have rather the mc be a cringe young master type because atleast there you could find something funny but here there is only a 10 year old emo robot alcoholic mc
The author does a good job with the writing and that is what hurts the most, the Chinese do not know how to make a good one piece plot, in short he is just a depressive child who one day woke up the system and began to obey. religiously, the protagonist has no charisma or self-esteem, he is just a robot that obeys the system, the interactions are so low and forced.
Ta god :) es lo único que puedo decir de esta lectura ahora solo voy a escribir para subir esto y dar mi apoyo a este libro, que mas podria decir de este libro, y es la rápida subida de Capitulo sin bajar la calidad de escritura.
Personally, in my opinion, this story is not bad with the MC focusing on his goal of completing the task given, plus writing that suits me
Feel free to ask me anything, and I'll do my best to answer with what I know about this book. If you notice anything lacking in the quality of the novel, please let me know. I've tried to translate as free of Chinese elements as possible and have changed the Chinese names to fit One Piece characters. I'm always looking to improve, so if you spot any issues with the translation, I'd appreciate your feedback to help me enhance my skills. For this whole week, you'll receive chapters every two hours. I hope you'll support me so I can continue releasing two chapters every two hours next week as well.