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Hey everyone author here, this is the first time I wrote a novel and I love doing it. So if you are a new reader Welcome to this novel where you will be introduced to a Main Character with a laid-back personality but with a goal as he is reborn back to a month before the merge with a mobile game. This novel has a harem and a huge one at that with the female leads being just as overpowered as our MC. So please enjoy this novel and I am looking forward to your feedback and comments on this novel Thank you Anime_timez24
I just love the way the author developed the plot . i really like how u explained everything in details regarding the background settings like how the game mixed with reality and soo on. even though the story might feel like it was just all positive with no challenges for MC but come on dudes we have enough where all those MCs are fighting hard and can't protect their loved ones . I am not criticizing, those plots are very good and i enjoy them too but i find this one more appealing. and finally the author keep up the good work, I hope u get more popular and write more interesting novels like this u have our support my personal request is that u don't drop this novel , i want to see the ending 😁. and one last thing bro i really appreciate the way u unified all the content under one without any nation on top . i really hate when some authors praise there own nation but criticise other nations . i respect there patriotism towards there mother country but don't go showing hostility towards others nations . this may lead to unnecessary disputes .
This novel is an absolute delight. The storytelling is smooth, and the way everything unfolds is just captivating. I'm looking forward to more chapters. Truly a remarkable read.
I really enjoy this novel and how everything is explained. The story flow is also perfect. Waiting to see more of this novel. Overall, it is an amazing novel.
Read until chapter 55, nothing really happens. Auther just keeps on rambling about the future and events that play no significance to the current events. MC is your typical useless luck struck plot armor MC. Outside of making money through the stock market, which he pawned of to one of the female characters, he really doesn’t do anything important. The flow of the story is on the slow side and the events are so random that it ruins the reading experience. For the Auther. Don’t explain so much useless information. Show your story don’t tell. Show the MC having a meeting and telling each individual their goal and when they need to accomplish said goal by. In other words, you’re trying to make your MC this great leader without them showing any leadership skills. Don’t tell us why a character is going to be important or how they’re related to the MC, show us through their interactions with the MC. Example, when you had the two neighbors scene talking to his parents, don’t explain who they are. Instead just leave them until they show up in the main plot of the story. Then inform the readers using the interaction between the MC and the other characters. That’s all I’ve got for you. In summary it’s not a bad story, the author just needs to learn how to write better. An editor would help but I’m aware of how expensive that can get.
Revelar Spoiler
I like the novel and I am just curious if the MC gonna teach the heroines the duel cultivation technique he has in the future if so, I think it’s pretty good because all the other cultivation novels I have read only have the MC having to duel cultivation techniques, but not the heroines and it would be pretty good if the technique has a buff For an effect afterwards, but that’s my opinion and you don’t have to listen to it but so far I like the novel and the novel is Interesting and I hope you keep on updating it and keep on doing what you’re doing because I think the novel could be a pretty good novel and I hope that it will not end and discontinues even if you have to take a year off to think about more stuff about the novel and I think that could be One of the top 10 novels at this rate
Umm, the novel is really amazing in my opinion and has great potential, but it is kinda taking too long to start with the world and development and stuff, because until now I have noticed that the chapters are like 35% info dump, 20% describing the room or the clothes or whatever, 25% s*x scenes, and 20% actual story development and stuff, I would really like to focus more on the development because it becomes kinda annoying when I read a new chapter everyday only to find that 50% or something of the chapter is just info about whatever something he is using instead of just a simple description, makes me want to leave the novel until it accumulates like 500 chapters to have a decent read and get a decent development. But hey I love the story in general and can’t wait to see him being OP against the people who will find out how strong he and his family are later on, that’s why I keep waiting wanting to see what’s going to happen, but it just doesn’t go that way in the story, or it is just not moving on to see how he is going to make the city his the chamber of commerce workings or the sect and stuff like that you know. Thanks for reading my opinion, and sorry if you take offense to my criticism. (English is not my native language, so there may be grammar mistakes here and there in the comment, so sorry in advance)
beaucoup d'histoires intéressant mais j'aimerais que tout les informations soient en français
This is an amazing story so far. I really like the development. Each character has their own uniqueness. I really recommend it. Keep up the amazing work, Author.
gigg tuuu. yjjjt de la semana que viene no hay problema en el trabajo de la semana que viene no hay problema en el trabajo y no se puede hacer nada más que el lunes y el día que viene a las 6 y media y media en la tienda de la casa de la abuela y el jueves a las 6 y media en la tienda de la semana que viene.
i really enjoyed to this 40 chapters, the story flow didn't goes too fast or too slow that i liked, and how MC and system talks it's not annoying to me, i can't wait how are you gonna build this game like world in the future i hope you don't drop the story i really like it
I'm still reading it now, but I want to say that I really enjoyed this novel and I recommend reading it.
Im on chapter 50 and honestly this book is not as great as I thought!! The author is putting in way to much information that is unnecessary and honestly who is even going to remember all of this???.... no one and honestly it just seems rambling when ur reading!! This book was interesting in the beginning but now that it is getting into way to much information and honestly its boring really really boring to read there is no action and there is basically no advisement in the story its jjustkeeps explaining characters with way way to much detail and its boring!! and honestly there is no need for it and all u have to do is tell a little about everything but to this extent!!!
the free reading is great the build up isn’t bad. shame that it’s ruined by having everything spoonfed to him by his so called “powerful parents” and “future women” i can just see how he becomes more powerful en collects pokemon along the way with his parents watching like stalkers. If you like that kind of story go ahead otherwise don’t bother reading.👍
hi can anyone recommend me novels like "village heads debauchery ","fullfilling my lustful fantasies","perversion douluo dalu","a perverts world" ,etc where the mc can do whatever he wants with anyone and no one would care. Thanks.
I have read until chapter 93 and I am satisfied with the current storyline of this novel. I hope author will keep up his good work.
Guys if you are a fan of harem and good seggs ...then read this one ... Writing quality ⭐⭐⭐⭐⭐ Story ⭐⭐⭐⭐⭐ Sex quality ⭐⭐⭐⭐⭐⭐⭐⭐ Explanation ⭐⭐⭐⭐⭐ Characters.⭐⭐⭐⭐⭐⭐⭐⭐⭐⭐
A truly cultured text with nice characters and world building. No ntr Certified. Definitely a fantastic read from a new author. Thanks for this great text author
OK ...let me just say it. ...if you read this book you will get emotions like jealousy and envy. ...but overall it is a very good read.....mc is op from the start compared to the world. ...and I like it. ....so a good read for me. ...author please don't drop this and continue the book ....
story is over all good but MC has all things in starting that disturb story line
I, Melon Dao approve of this scripture and decided to add it to my forbidden library of culture. This venerable is very pleased as you are doing an honorable job of teaching and spreading culture and hope you continue this sacred quest. This scripture belongs to the genre of game to reality and Mc will develop an invincible family with different kinds of waifus (especially, Mother-in-law) Last but the least, This Scripture Has no NTR.
Hey everyone author here, this is the first time I wrote a novel and I love doing it. So if you are a new reader Welcome to this novel where you will be introduced to a Main Character with a laid-back personality but with a goal as he is reborn back to a month before the merge with a mobile game. This novel has a harem and a huge one at that with the female leads being just as overpowered as our MC. So please enjoy this novel and I am looking forward to your feedback and comments on this novel Thank you Anime_timez24
I just love the way the author developed the plot . i really like how u explained everything in details regarding the background settings like how the game mixed with reality and soo on. even though the story might feel like it was just all positive with no challenges for MC but come on dudes we have enough where all those MCs are fighting hard and can't protect their loved ones . I am not criticizing, those plots are very good and i enjoy them too but i find this one more appealing. and finally the author keep up the good work, I hope u get more popular and write more interesting novels like this u have our support my personal request is that u don't drop this novel , i want to see the ending 😁. and one last thing bro i really appreciate the way u unified all the content under one without any nation on top . i really hate when some authors praise there own nation but criticise other nations . i respect there patriotism towards there mother country but don't go showing hostility towards others nations . this may lead to unnecessary disputes .
This novel is an absolute delight. The storytelling is smooth, and the way everything unfolds is just captivating. I'm looking forward to more chapters. Truly a remarkable read.
I really enjoy this novel and how everything is explained. The story flow is also perfect. Waiting to see more of this novel. Overall, it is an amazing novel.
Read until chapter 55, nothing really happens. Auther just keeps on rambling about the future and events that play no significance to the current events. MC is your typical useless luck struck plot armor MC. Outside of making money through the stock market, which he pawned of to one of the female characters, he really doesn’t do anything important. The flow of the story is on the slow side and the events are so random that it ruins the reading experience. For the Auther. Don’t explain so much useless information. Show your story don’t tell. Show the MC having a meeting and telling each individual their goal and when they need to accomplish said goal by. In other words, you’re trying to make your MC this great leader without them showing any leadership skills. Don’t tell us why a character is going to be important or how they’re related to the MC, show us through their interactions with the MC. Example, when you had the two neighbors scene talking to his parents, don’t explain who they are. Instead just leave them until they show up in the main plot of the story. Then inform the readers using the interaction between the MC and the other characters. That’s all I’ve got for you. In summary it’s not a bad story, the author just needs to learn how to write better. An editor would help but I’m aware of how expensive that can get.
Revelar Spoiler I like the novel and I am just curious if the MC gonna teach the heroines the duel cultivation technique he has in the future if so, I think it’s pretty good because all the other cultivation novels I have read only have the MC having to duel cultivation techniques, but not the heroines and it would be pretty good if the technique has a buff For an effect afterwards, but that’s my opinion and you don’t have to listen to it but so far I like the novel and the novel is Interesting and I hope you keep on updating it and keep on doing what you’re doing because I think the novel could be a pretty good novel and I hope that it will not end and discontinues even if you have to take a year off to think about more stuff about the novel and I think that could be One of the top 10 novels at this rate
Umm, the novel is really amazing in my opinion and has great potential, but it is kinda taking too long to start with the world and development and stuff, because until now I have noticed that the chapters are like 35% info dump, 20% describing the room or the clothes or whatever, 25% s*x scenes, and 20% actual story development and stuff, I would really like to focus more on the development because it becomes kinda annoying when I read a new chapter everyday only to find that 50% or something of the chapter is just info about whatever something he is using instead of just a simple description, makes me want to leave the novel until it accumulates like 500 chapters to have a decent read and get a decent development. But hey I love the story in general and can’t wait to see him being OP against the people who will find out how strong he and his family are later on, that’s why I keep waiting wanting to see what’s going to happen, but it just doesn’t go that way in the story, or it is just not moving on to see how he is going to make the city his the chamber of commerce workings or the sect and stuff like that you know. Thanks for reading my opinion, and sorry if you take offense to my criticism. (English is not my native language, so there may be grammar mistakes here and there in the comment, so sorry in advance)
beaucoup d'histoires intéressant mais j'aimerais que tout les informations soient en français
This is an amazing story so far. I really like the development. Each character has their own uniqueness. I really recommend it. Keep up the amazing work, Author.
gigg tuuu. yjjjt de la semana que viene no hay problema en el trabajo de la semana que viene no hay problema en el trabajo y no se puede hacer nada más que el lunes y el día que viene a las 6 y media y media en la tienda de la casa de la abuela y el jueves a las 6 y media en la tienda de la semana que viene.
i really enjoyed to this 40 chapters, the story flow didn't goes too fast or too slow that i liked, and how MC and system talks it's not annoying to me, i can't wait how are you gonna build this game like world in the future i hope you don't drop the story i really like it
I'm still reading it now, but I want to say that I really enjoyed this novel and I recommend reading it.
Im on chapter 50 and honestly this book is not as great as I thought!! The author is putting in way to much information that is unnecessary and honestly who is even going to remember all of this???.... no one and honestly it just seems rambling when ur reading!! This book was interesting in the beginning but now that it is getting into way to much information and honestly its boring really really boring to read there is no action and there is basically no advisement in the story its jjustkeeps explaining characters with way way to much detail and its boring!! and honestly there is no need for it and all u have to do is tell a little about everything but to this extent!!!
the free reading is great the build up isn’t bad. shame that it’s ruined by having everything spoonfed to him by his so called “powerful parents” and “future women” i can just see how he becomes more powerful en collects pokemon along the way with his parents watching like stalkers. If you like that kind of story go ahead otherwise don’t bother reading.👍
hi can anyone recommend me novels like "village heads debauchery ","fullfilling my lustful fantasies","perversion douluo dalu","a perverts world" ,etc where the mc can do whatever he wants with anyone and no one would care. Thanks.
I have read until chapter 93 and I am satisfied with the current storyline of this novel. I hope author will keep up his good work.
Guys if you are a fan of harem and good seggs ...then read this one ... Writing quality ⭐⭐⭐⭐⭐ Story ⭐⭐⭐⭐⭐ Sex quality ⭐⭐⭐⭐⭐⭐⭐⭐ Explanation ⭐⭐⭐⭐⭐ Characters.⭐⭐⭐⭐⭐⭐⭐⭐⭐⭐
A truly cultured text with nice characters and world building. No ntr Certified. Definitely a fantastic read from a new author. Thanks for this great text author
OK ...let me just say it. ...if you read this book you will get emotions like jealousy and envy. ...but overall it is a very good read.....mc is op from the start compared to the world. ...and I like it. ....so a good read for me. ...author please don't drop this and continue the book ....
story is over all good but MC has all things in starting that disturb story line
I, Melon Dao approve of this scripture and decided to add it to my forbidden library of culture. This venerable is very pleased as you are doing an honorable job of teaching and spreading culture and hope you continue this sacred quest. This scripture belongs to the genre of game to reality and Mc will develop an invincible family with different kinds of waifus (especially, Mother-in-law) Last but the least, This Scripture Has no NTR.