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I like it currently, I find it good. I am way too lazy to give a real review. I also ain't no dang bot review! The only thing I didn't enjoy is the yappers in the comments giving crazy-ass ideas.
my only problem with this work so far was the speed with which the protagonist changed, he was just thrown in a prison (he wasn't tortured or anything like that, just a little despised) and he had an absurd determination to be strong, he was beaten and get up without any problem, like a warrior who participated in several battles, being just an otaku with a weak body/will, that was what bothered me most about this work, if the change had been more gradual, with him suffering and changing Because of that it would be much better.
mc too weak pace too slow dropped sorry author but weak mc still d level after 200 chapters big yikes
I’m not sure how I rate this truly so middle ground it is. Their are good ideas, their are some not so good ideas. The Mc has potential but then becomes a doormat for others. The Danmachi stuff should of been the focus for awhile I think. The forced corruption plot and all that in other worlds I’m not so sure about. Scathach was done dirty in the story and some characters are very out of character. I guess I’m just kinda lost in this middle ground of it can be good but then one event occurs makes me think of dropping the story as a whole The kabenari world was the closest I every came to dropping something after reading 2 chapters. It made the Mc look incompetent and completely different character as a whole not to mention butcher Jeanne character. The mc decided “Hey that Ayame isn’t my kid just this bodies kid might as well just forget about her.” After he spent most of the time in that world keeping her safe and Jeanne butchered character doesn’t even mention Ayame even though it was showed early she took care of her for a bit. It’s only to make a plot where Ayame is evil for being “betrayed” he also made Anastasia possibly turn evil just because he turned her away from going into a fight. Yeah that is crazy… basically in the span of one world created three or four overarching villains somehow.
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I normally don't write reviews but this story make me write one. just read it yourself I highly recommend it
Even with the changed protagonist name. This novel reeks of CN fanfic from miles, and with that comes all the bad things about CN fanfics. The MC was written as a naive and useless modern man, then in the span of a few chapters with bad decisions, transformed into a typical psychopathic CN MCs that, despite all his psychopathic tendencies, let WOMEN walk all over him like a doormat. Yes, women, because he won't take any bs from men but if it's a woman, he'll suddenly grow conscience for them even if they treated him like shit. Then he went from hating Scáthach for betraying him to suddenly glazing her, to the point of worshipping the very ground she stands on. So he's not just a doormat but also bipolar, an absolute beta. I don't know, but this is just too much wrongs and disgusting things in the span of a few chapters and the future is not looking good. As always, if an author managed to disgust you with their writing once, they can absolutely and will absolutely do it again. Man.. The only thing that gets this novel's rating to 2 star is the full score in update stability.
Honestly man it had a great start, especially the gladiator training arc, then the downwards spiral started when you introduced the mask that hides his identity. From then on he started to devolve as a character, you portrayed him as a character hardened from his time as a gladiator, then turn around and create scenes like the first time he went Into the host of fertility, completely ruining his image. Dont get me started on the secret identity. He takes on the identity of “Gudao” for absolutely no reason. Since Mama Mia can literally see through the mask as stated since she’s a level 5-6. You did great introducing underrated characters like Aphrodite and Ocs like Amaterasu but it’s like after chapter 1-2 you forgot that he’s in the Danmachi world. Then for some inane reason I don’t stick around to find out about you make him introduce Bell to Freya???? I admittedly dropped right there so I have no reason why. But even if there was a reason why, I seriously doubt that it’s a good reason. His character is completely inconsistent and honestly NOT fun to read about at all. You shouldn’t waste your time on this fic. It’s a waste if potential.
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Es una buena historia el desarrollo del mc puede parecer algo deficiente al principio pero conforme avanza la historia la personalidad tiene un avance significativo y las cosas que ha hecho en el mundo de danmachi crea un giro interesante
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writing quality is pretty good with a few mistakes here and there. story is the generic bs where everything the female lead (waifu) is doing is the most righteous thing to do, however brain-dead it seems. the start was pretty good but it went downhill very fast. female characters are atleast true to their nature. male characters have 2 brain cells with one brain cell watching Pokemon. world background is not bad.
for those who are interested in stories with puppet mc who are only manipulated by other people then this story is suitable for you (tl)
Okay, I have absolutely no idea why this fanfiction has such high ratings. The premise is indeed interesting, but the amount of brain cells I have lost due to reading this fanfiction are uncountable, which makes it not worth it. The MC is braindead, a simp, and just a plain idiot. There is indeed a little character development at the start, but it is just so insignificant. He makes a lot of stupid decisions, and the Author isn't any better. To be honest, Scathach shouldn't even have that kind of attitude. I won't talk about this matter much since another person complained about it, but her attitude, and the reasons for her so-called 'betrayal' are plain stupid and look forced af. Some canon characters aren't even portrayed accurately. Like, the Author literally portrayed Tiamat and Aphrodite(the one from Danmachi) as evil and malicious, which is pretty damn annoying as this is too much OOC. There is also the fact that the MC is incompetent in pretty much everything. The guy literally allows everyone to walk over him, and he doesn't even have the balls to stand up for himself at times. He is also useless at fighting as he fights with his damn fists when he literally has a skill that makes him skilled in any weapon. And he doesn't even use his system correctly because he only buys useless equipment, and no skills or abilities when he already has so many 'points' To be honest, this is the first time I am writing such a negative review, but I can't help it- it is really difficult to resist writing anything negative about this fanfic as it just frustrates me so much to read this. There are also not many negative paragraph comments to purify my soul, so I can't help it
the story is pretty good or at least decent until chapter 66, by then things will slowly start to suck 'im not kidding it really does', the transformation from your average work to complete garbage was unexpected because it had so much going for it, you will start to question why everything for some reason feels like a chinese cultivation novel. (athena for a goddess of war and wisdom is extremely stupid and arrogant) the mc is one of the worst ones among the problem so brace yourself {by the way the star rating is high because its how i judged it before chapter 66}
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just finished it, and I really hate betrayal... so regardless of what the author decides, Scathach will always be a traitor, for me atleast... pros, cons, gains, future, any reasons does not matter... a betrayal is always a betrayal, and first impression matters... as I said What Happens Once, can Happen Twice, and will always Happens Infinite Times... it would be great if MC also willingly dispose Scathach someday with indifference and for his personal greater good... Scathach did it for her personal ambition anyway p.s MC is a masochist
so uhh. is this translated from chinese or a truly written fanfic by you? if its translated can i have source.
Aahhhh i cant resist/stock chapters anymore, this novel has all my favorite works of fiction, i couldnt even stock for a month before i couldnt hold it in, haha if this also had Honkai impact im pretty sure i definitely would have given in at the first week or less. author im sorry if im giving you pressure but this just does it for me, im sorry to say this but if it messes up i would be very disappointed in you and chances are that i might make an unfriendly comment or two. ill apologize in advance now that im still chill in case i actually do go too far in the future (character design and world background are full 5 stars since theres a chance for him to go to other worlds not stated in the synopsis "honkai")
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Un buen fanfic. Es interesante, aunque desearía que aumentará el número de personajes de la serie Fate. Sería divertidísimo ver cómo reaccionaria los personajes de Dannachi si aparecieran y se encontrarán por ejemplo; Medusa (Fate) y Atenea (Dannachi) o Medea (Fate) y Afrodita (Dannachi).
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I like it currently, I find it good. I am way too lazy to give a real review. I also ain't no dang bot review! The only thing I didn't enjoy is the yappers in the comments giving crazy-ass ideas.
my only problem with this work so far was the speed with which the protagonist changed, he was just thrown in a prison (he wasn't tortured or anything like that, just a little despised) and he had an absurd determination to be strong, he was beaten and get up without any problem, like a warrior who participated in several battles, being just an otaku with a weak body/will, that was what bothered me most about this work, if the change had been more gradual, with him suffering and changing Because of that it would be much better.
mc too weak pace too slow dropped sorry author but weak mc still d level after 200 chapters big yikes
I’m not sure how I rate this truly so middle ground it is. Their are good ideas, their are some not so good ideas. The Mc has potential but then becomes a doormat for others. The Danmachi stuff should of been the focus for awhile I think. The forced corruption plot and all that in other worlds I’m not so sure about. Scathach was done dirty in the story and some characters are very out of character. I guess I’m just kinda lost in this middle ground of it can be good but then one event occurs makes me think of dropping the story as a whole The kabenari world was the closest I every came to dropping something after reading 2 chapters. It made the Mc look incompetent and completely different character as a whole not to mention butcher Jeanne character. The mc decided “Hey that Ayame isn’t my kid just this bodies kid might as well just forget about her.” After he spent most of the time in that world keeping her safe and Jeanne butchered character doesn’t even mention Ayame even though it was showed early she took care of her for a bit. It’s only to make a plot where Ayame is evil for being “betrayed” he also made Anastasia possibly turn evil just because he turned her away from going into a fight. Yeah that is crazy… basically in the span of one world created three or four overarching villains somehow.
Revelar Spoiler I normally don't write reviews but this story make me write one. just read it yourself I highly recommend it
Even with the changed protagonist name. This novel reeks of CN fanfic from miles, and with that comes all the bad things about CN fanfics. The MC was written as a naive and useless modern man, then in the span of a few chapters with bad decisions, transformed into a typical psychopathic CN MCs that, despite all his psychopathic tendencies, let WOMEN walk all over him like a doormat. Yes, women, because he won't take any bs from men but if it's a woman, he'll suddenly grow conscience for them even if they treated him like shit. Then he went from hating Scáthach for betraying him to suddenly glazing her, to the point of worshipping the very ground she stands on. So he's not just a doormat but also bipolar, an absolute beta. I don't know, but this is just too much wrongs and disgusting things in the span of a few chapters and the future is not looking good. As always, if an author managed to disgust you with their writing once, they can absolutely and will absolutely do it again. Man.. The only thing that gets this novel's rating to 2 star is the full score in update stability.
Honestly man it had a great start, especially the gladiator training arc, then the downwards spiral started when you introduced the mask that hides his identity. From then on he started to devolve as a character, you portrayed him as a character hardened from his time as a gladiator, then turn around and create scenes like the first time he went Into the host of fertility, completely ruining his image. Dont get me started on the secret identity. He takes on the identity of “Gudao” for absolutely no reason. Since Mama Mia can literally see through the mask as stated since she’s a level 5-6. You did great introducing underrated characters like Aphrodite and Ocs like Amaterasu but it’s like after chapter 1-2 you forgot that he’s in the Danmachi world. Then for some inane reason I don’t stick around to find out about you make him introduce Bell to Freya???? I admittedly dropped right there so I have no reason why. But even if there was a reason why, I seriously doubt that it’s a good reason. His character is completely inconsistent and honestly NOT fun to read about at all. You shouldn’t waste your time on this fic. It’s a waste if potential.
Revelar Spoiler Es una buena historia el desarrollo del mc puede parecer algo deficiente al principio pero conforme avanza la historia la personalidad tiene un avance significativo y las cosas que ha hecho en el mundo de danmachi crea un giro interesante
Revelar Spoiler writing quality is pretty good with a few mistakes here and there. story is the generic bs where everything the female lead (waifu) is doing is the most righteous thing to do, however brain-dead it seems. the start was pretty good but it went downhill very fast. female characters are atleast true to their nature. male characters have 2 brain cells with one brain cell watching Pokemon. world background is not bad.
for those who are interested in stories with puppet mc who are only manipulated by other people then this story is suitable for you (tl)
Okay, I have absolutely no idea why this fanfiction has such high ratings. The premise is indeed interesting, but the amount of brain cells I have lost due to reading this fanfiction are uncountable, which makes it not worth it. The MC is braindead, a simp, and just a plain idiot. There is indeed a little character development at the start, but it is just so insignificant. He makes a lot of stupid decisions, and the Author isn't any better. To be honest, Scathach shouldn't even have that kind of attitude. I won't talk about this matter much since another person complained about it, but her attitude, and the reasons for her so-called 'betrayal' are plain stupid and look forced af. Some canon characters aren't even portrayed accurately. Like, the Author literally portrayed Tiamat and Aphrodite(the one from Danmachi) as evil and malicious, which is pretty damn annoying as this is too much OOC. There is also the fact that the MC is incompetent in pretty much everything. The guy literally allows everyone to walk over him, and he doesn't even have the balls to stand up for himself at times. He is also useless at fighting as he fights with his damn fists when he literally has a skill that makes him skilled in any weapon. And he doesn't even use his system correctly because he only buys useless equipment, and no skills or abilities when he already has so many 'points' To be honest, this is the first time I am writing such a negative review, but I can't help it- it is really difficult to resist writing anything negative about this fanfic as it just frustrates me so much to read this. There are also not many negative paragraph comments to purify my soul, so I can't help it
the story is pretty good or at least decent until chapter 66, by then things will slowly start to suck 'im not kidding it really does', the transformation from your average work to complete garbage was unexpected because it had so much going for it, you will start to question why everything for some reason feels like a chinese cultivation novel. (athena for a goddess of war and wisdom is extremely stupid and arrogant) the mc is one of the worst ones among the problem so brace yourself {by the way the star rating is high because its how i judged it before chapter 66}
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just finished it, and I really hate betrayal... so regardless of what the author decides, Scathach will always be a traitor, for me atleast... pros, cons, gains, future, any reasons does not matter... a betrayal is always a betrayal, and first impression matters... as I said What Happens Once, can Happen Twice, and will always Happens Infinite Times... it would be great if MC also willingly dispose Scathach someday with indifference and for his personal greater good... Scathach did it for her personal ambition anyway p.s MC is a masochist
so uhh. is this translated from chinese or a truly written fanfic by you? if its translated can i have source.
Aahhhh i cant resist/stock chapters anymore, this novel has all my favorite works of fiction, i couldnt even stock for a month before i couldnt hold it in, haha if this also had Honkai impact im pretty sure i definitely would have given in at the first week or less. author im sorry if im giving you pressure but this just does it for me, im sorry to say this but if it messes up i would be very disappointed in you and chances are that i might make an unfriendly comment or two. ill apologize in advance now that im still chill in case i actually do go too far in the future (character design and world background are full 5 stars since theres a chance for him to go to other worlds not stated in the synopsis "honkai")
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The system is poorly explained, no idea what the MC looks like it's just violently mid
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Un buen fanfic. Es interesante, aunque desearía que aumentará el número de personajes de la serie Fate. Sería divertidísimo ver cómo reaccionaria los personajes de Dannachi si aparecieran y se encontrarán por ejemplo; Medusa (Fate) y Atenea (Dannachi) o Medea (Fate) y Afrodita (Dannachi).
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