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La verdad es buena historia si estas aburrido y tiene limones 2 hasta ahora A todo esto aveces se va el contesto y se le agregan personajes de otras historia que no tiene que ver con dxd
Gracias por la novela Más que nada para ser tu primera novela yo en lo personal lo encuentro atractivo aunque es posible mejorar en la escritura y como narrar mejor ciertas partes de la novela pero todo tiene un comienzo y una mejora gracias
Hey Arthur I just start reading this book it's pretty good can't wait to see what happens next So when is next chapter coming out I want to know what happens next we all want to know
Clickbait AF, read the story thinking the focus would be around Yasaka and the youkai faction but no, author just wants to bone DOA girl and Akeno... Yume is just dumb af, just dumb af
Book is almost an exact copy of the book on FFN under the name Highschool DxD: It’s A Wonderful World by Umbra580
Revelar Spoiler
OK so lets start on this one. 1. The title doesn't Match the opening scene in the slightest and that's kind of necessary in some regard and the complete lack of a synopsis isn't helping. 2. All we got is the usual go school in high school DxD. This is overused by this point and is killing DxD fic's 3. The writting quality is good at least very readable. Overall The author desperately needs some original ideas but has the writing part down.
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L'auteur ajoute trop de truc . Des flash-back inutiles Des trait de caractère inutiles du mc Des ajouts hors canon Et pour finir il essaye de dramatiser le MC du moins sa façon d'agir : pk il veut pas de harem. Mais c débile puisque il a coucher àvec kasumi et yasaka donc soit c un enfoirés soit il a pas de couilles [img=faceslap][img=faceslap]
I normally don't write these but I kinda want 2 for this one. Just ignore the idiots who don't like it and keep going. This might not be for everyone, but you shouldn't be trying to ever make everyone happy. It's a good work that I enjoy reading so please keep it up
Another story with an idiotic MC driven by emotions in a stupid way that is just ridiculous and causes even more problems, apart from the lack of objectives, it's not so bad in the beginning but the fact that he is led by the other characters is unbearable, sometimes even not wanting anymore not having enough decision to just do what he wants, sad and disgusting character.
The story is fast paced and isn’t very well built Mc isn’t very smart and so is are the other characters Mc is very emotional In my opinion it it’s a good story but it’s ok I mean it’s skipping a lot and the stuff they add in isn’t very clever so it’s a no brainier story mostly ment for not thinking about the small things
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It’s just a moody loser that doesn’t do anything with out being pushed into it great concept bad mc for it
The story is good, but the title is kinda misleading lol. You might wanna change it to something like “double gear” or “Florida man moves to Japan!” (JK on the second one lol) and I don’t know if you added a dead or alive tag but you might wanna just to show that this is a au dxd.
so how's he the husband og yasaka? ,........................................................?????????????????????
Otro FanFiction de un gordo perdedor virgen que vive en casa de sus papás 😔 Tenía fe al principio, pero después se vuelve una porquería genérica como todos los inútiles escritores de este sitio.
seems boring and bland i also don't quite understand the use of his sacred gear. angel/devil he can turn into an angel or devil for a limited time(5min). in a world of only humans and maybe yokai, that might be an interesting concept but in dxd it just seems so utterly useless, i just don't see the point, there are ways to become a devil or an angel already, so why?
It's a great story. Do you have a link to the previous story? Or his name or where it was published, I have an interest in seeing the difference between the two stories
This story is really good and the character s are interesting. The story is still is in it’s early stages and is being mass released so can’t say anything about the update stability. The characters and world building are quite good since so far they are constant with the source material. Only criticism I can give is please change the name of the fanfic. Although the name is thought provoking it gives off Chinese MTL fanfic vibes, this will push away a lot of readers who will not even give a chance to the fanfic and will automatically assume that it is trash. Except that so far the story has been well written and I hope it continues on like this.
Good i neeed next chapterrGood i neeed next chapterrGood i neeed next Good i neeed next chapterrGood i neeed next chapterrGood i neeed next chapterr
La verdad es buena historia si estas aburrido y tiene limones 2 hasta ahora A todo esto aveces se va el contesto y se le agregan personajes de otras historia que no tiene que ver con dxd
Gracias por la novela Más que nada para ser tu primera novela yo en lo personal lo encuentro atractivo aunque es posible mejorar en la escritura y como narrar mejor ciertas partes de la novela pero todo tiene un comienzo y una mejora gracias
Hey Arthur I just start reading this book it's pretty good can't wait to see what happens next So when is next chapter coming out I want to know what happens next we all want to know
Clickbait AF, read the story thinking the focus would be around Yasaka and the youkai faction but no, author just wants to bone DOA girl and Akeno... Yume is just dumb af, just dumb af
Book is almost an exact copy of the book on FFN under the name Highschool DxD: It’s A Wonderful World by Umbra580
Revelar Spoiler OK so lets start on this one. 1. The title doesn't Match the opening scene in the slightest and that's kind of necessary in some regard and the complete lack of a synopsis isn't helping. 2. All we got is the usual go school in high school DxD. This is overused by this point and is killing DxD fic's 3. The writting quality is good at least very readable. Overall The author desperately needs some original ideas but has the writing part down.
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L'auteur ajoute trop de truc . Des flash-back inutiles Des trait de caractère inutiles du mc Des ajouts hors canon Et pour finir il essaye de dramatiser le MC du moins sa façon d'agir : pk il veut pas de harem. Mais c débile puisque il a coucher àvec kasumi et yasaka donc soit c un enfoirés soit il a pas de couilles [img=faceslap][img=faceslap]
I normally don't write these but I kinda want 2 for this one. Just ignore the idiots who don't like it and keep going. This might not be for everyone, but you shouldn't be trying to ever make everyone happy. It's a good work that I enjoy reading so please keep it up
Another story with an idiotic MC driven by emotions in a stupid way that is just ridiculous and causes even more problems, apart from the lack of objectives, it's not so bad in the beginning but the fact that he is led by the other characters is unbearable, sometimes even not wanting anymore not having enough decision to just do what he wants, sad and disgusting character.
The story is fast paced and isn’t very well built Mc isn’t very smart and so is are the other characters Mc is very emotional In my opinion it it’s a good story but it’s ok I mean it’s skipping a lot and the stuff they add in isn’t very clever so it’s a no brainier story mostly ment for not thinking about the small things
nop [img=gifle][img=gifle][img=gifle][img=gifle][img=gifle][img=gifle][img=gifle][img=gifle][img=gifle][img=gifle][img=gifle][img=gifle][img=gifle]
It’s just a moody loser that doesn’t do anything with out being pushed into it great concept bad mc for it
The story is good, but the title is kinda misleading lol. You might wanna change it to something like “double gear” or “Florida man moves to Japan!” (JK on the second one lol) and I don’t know if you added a dead or alive tag but you might wanna just to show that this is a au dxd.
so how's he the husband og yasaka? ,........................................................?????????????????????
Otro FanFiction de un gordo perdedor virgen que vive en casa de sus papás 😔 Tenía fe al principio, pero después se vuelve una porquería genérica como todos los inútiles escritores de este sitio.
seems boring and bland i also don't quite understand the use of his sacred gear. angel/devil he can turn into an angel or devil for a limited time(5min). in a world of only humans and maybe yokai, that might be an interesting concept but in dxd it just seems so utterly useless, i just don't see the point, there are ways to become a devil or an angel already, so why?
It's a great story. Do you have a link to the previous story? Or his name or where it was published, I have an interest in seeing the difference between the two stories
This story is really good and the character s are interesting. The story is still is in it’s early stages and is being mass released so can’t say anything about the update stability. The characters and world building are quite good since so far they are constant with the source material. Only criticism I can give is please change the name of the fanfic. Although the name is thought provoking it gives off Chinese MTL fanfic vibes, this will push away a lot of readers who will not even give a chance to the fanfic and will automatically assume that it is trash. Except that so far the story has been well written and I hope it continues on like this.
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I enjoyed the story. The fact that it stopped is sad