Sasuke: in Comprehensive World

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ninja_0756

Good concept i like how u progress story. However the order of words in some areas seems abit unussual. Abit rough arouns the edges so to speak. But if u sort that out and continue with that u doing, it will be great.

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ADD

It's not a good story, after all, the whole collecting girls thing is a dirty topic. But it's interesting, and even if a girl joins the harem, it doesn't seem like she becomes loyal to the protagonist, the author still hasn't created artificial feelings to make things easier and Sasuke remains focused on his revenge. Apart from the boring beginning with a figure like the Sage of the Six Paths meddling to ruin the protagonist's plans, so far I feel like it's worth reading.

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ruhe

the whole concept of his system is stupid and only stupid chinese dogs come up with this shit

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Trollface

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Aedolf_Heathlore

author can you fix the wrong grammars, add commas"," to make reading more easier

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Lucas_Campeche

Gosto da história e de como ela não é previsível, os personagens independentes e o protagonista usando o sistema e não sendo usado por ele é algo que me deixa satisfeito, aguardo novas atualizações.

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sumur_murni

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DV_5559

so my honest thought as a author is first chapters are little out of place then there is a story control where I have to self consciously remove the 18 + content story had a journal direction which is the most basic go to different world get strong come back take revenge and start a new life go around finding girls sometimes I forget when writing he is not the original character but my own depression plus his own desire to take revenge create his personality which is much closer to the original which I plan to change but not in one or two chapters for it might not even be visible in starting chapters are around less than 500 which I had increase by 200 and I will keep trying to improve as long as you guys keep giving me suggestions which are revelant to the novel