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Escreva uma avaliaçãoI love Harry Potter, so when I saw this book, I had to read it, and it did not disappoint. I love the plot and the character development. [img=recommend]
5 stars because I really enjoyed it, there were concepts that I didn't like too much like the "HP multiverse" but it was handled well and it wasn't very important, the There was only one well-developed romantic interest so that's also a plus in my opinion and considering the endless amount of Harry Potter fanfics, I won't find too many bad things to say. I enjoyed this one, it's a good story to entertain you and I think that should be the main thing. Thank you very much author for this and I hope you continue writing.
This is so wow. Like wow wow. And I cant believe it ended. I've come across this story maybe 6 months back or so and since then I've been keeping up with the story. And this is the first story I came across that gave regular updates. 2 chapters a day without fail. And sometimes I felt it was slow or boring but then the next chapter suddenly becomes one of the interesting things. It is so unique from any other time travel or parallel world story I ever read(And believe me I read loads of them). The whole plotline is so unique and wonderful. So grateful that I stumbled upon this story. I love it and would give a 10 star rating if I could.
Disclaimer: Read 29 chapters. Spoilers about AU Neville, house choice, and semi-OC. So, this fic has a pretty cool concept—Harry starting it all over again, but the canon is with ACTUAL changes. The beginning? Loved it. Harry’s interactions with his new family? Nice touch. But around chapter 29, I kind of hit a wall and stopped reading. Not because it’s bad, but because a few things just weren’t clicking for me. I know it might seem weird to talk about the beginning when you already have over 400 chapters, but hear me out. First off, the AU elements feel a bit undercooked. You set up a world where Neville is the Chosen One, which is cool, but he’s still the same old Neville. Like, wouldn’t that kind of upbringing make him a bit more confident? Maybe he’s a beast at Quidditch now? Or just, I don’t know, prepared for the whole Dark Lord situation? But nope, he’s still just canon Neville, and that felt like a missed opportunity. The second thing is about house choice. Just to be clear—I don’t mind Gryffindor. I’m not complaining. It’s your damn fic—do whatever you like. Personally, I don’t like Slytherin at all, so I was glad about house choice, but you said “I like Griffindor because I like the idea of Harry being this 'embodiment' or ideal of that house, whether he likes it or not, so the sorting hat would immediately feel this and put him in that house without giving him any choice on the matter.” So, here’s my break down about what you did with house choice in your fic: Harry contradicts himself. He’s in Gryffindor, but he acts way more like a Slytherin. His irritation with Hermione feels weird—he thinks she’s too young, but instead of treating her like a little sister (like he does with Holly), he mostly just tolerates her. Same with Neville. He decides he wants to protect him, but doesn’t really, you know, TALK to him. I think Gryffindor is more for social connections, and maybe you should show how it actually benefits him in ways Slytherin wouldn’t. Where’s that reckless bravery and nobility? Harry is slick, calculating, and straight-up OP. That scene—dude goes full John Wick, brutally wipes out four masked assassins, then pretends that Batman saved him—felt straight out of an anime with antihero. I get why he hid that he did that, but the main point is—he didn't try to save his mom right away, first he made her unconscious and only then started to act. And all this thing, Harry hiding his strength, feels kinda forced. The whole “if they find out, they’ll come for me” reasoning doesn’t really hold up. I mean, Hermione was a genius in canon, and nobody tried to take her out right away, right? And if he’s so worried about standing out, why isn’t he warning Hermione to chill a little? Now, let’s talk about Daphne. Look, I get it. That cold, calculating, tempting “ice princess”? It’s fun—the first time. But after seeing it in a million fics, it starts feeling very copy-paste. I am not saying that I am against her. I am saying, that right now, her appearances in the plot feel unnatural, like she’s just showing up with a sign saying, “Hello, the author sent me here to help you.” And that hint how Harry doesn't really mind her company, because she acts more mature than Hermione (strike in my heart). If Gryffindor is meant to give him social connections, then let’s actually see how it benefits him—right now, his key relationships seems to be outside of it. A few side notes: The disclaimer at the start of every chapter is brutal if you’re listening via text-to-speech. Maybe throw it in the fic description instead? Thoughts in single quotes don’t really add much. Just weave them into the text. Like: "What if this is all my fault?" Harry thought. A shiver ran through him. → What if this was all his fault? A shiver ran through him. The whole aristocracy + Great Houses thing is kinda overdone, but hey, that’s just personal taste. Dropping it here so people know what they’re signing up for. P.S. This isn’t me saying “quit writing.” Actually, I respect anyone who keeps going because I, personally, flame out after a few chapters and never publish. A finished fic, even with flaws, is better than one that never gets done. So if you’re still in it for the long haul, good luck!
That was a nice read. Thanks! The ending was properly wrapped up and it did not feel incomplete or rushed i think. Quite enjoyable................
La mejor historia que leí de harry potter hasta ahora, estoy ansiosa por los próximos proyectos relacionados con el universo de harry. Hiciste un excelente trabajo autor espero que nos encontremos pronto
Nice book though the updating speed was a bit slow now that it is finished it’s an amazing read
I really like this novel and I'm a little sad that it's finished but the ending was just beautifully done.
this is the first ff of Harry Potter that I have finished reading as it was written, the others either goes downwarda as the story progress, got into hiatus or got dropped. so I'm doing the 5 star review on this one to commemorate as well as to mark the author as one that I would be following the story of 🥰🤩[img=recommend]
Harry Potter is our main character, he is like a magic wand for everyone! The story is not interesting, wiping everyone's snot is very annoying. All other secondary characters are cardboard! The main character does not behave like an older person who has survived the WAR and has many losses of people close to him. He is more like a teenager of 15-17 years old without experience of real hard life before the crossing after death! It seems that even if theoretically the original Harry Potter died, and our main character did not arrive, this world will simply be destroyed by Voldemort.
Revelar SpoilerWhat. I thought the ritual will force harry to stay in this universe. I don't like bittersweet ending. So this is the last chapter I am reading. Thank you author for the story.
One of if the best Harry Potter fanfictions I have had the pleasure to read in my 13-14 years reading ff.
I'm at chapter 420. Read the fic twice whilst waiting, and we're clearly getting to the end. My opinion: Very good fic, I particularly appreciate the ton of plots going on. Maybe sometimes I felt I wished some plots had more development instead of introducing something new, but still, love this fic for this fact. Totally recommended, thanks op
some chapters are breaking suddenly, anyway this novels is good. some chapters are breaking suddenly, anyway this novels is good. some chapters are breaking suddenly, anyway this novels is good.
Not much of AU story if only 1 key detail is different and the rest pretty much follows the same trope as the OG story, the whole BWL thing was always coin flip removing an factor in that event should have made even greater changes than just alive voldy and potters. Also kinda hard see someone not having their “aura” and “values” change from years of fighting.
I’m be honest a villain but it’s a good redemption of what if Harry Potter had a family and was not the boy who lived
Leí hasta el capitulo 360. Como lector objetivo, puedo decir que la trama de esta historia es perfecta, los antecedentes mundiales están muy bien hechos, la personalidad y desarrollo del MC están bien implementadas, así como la relación con otros personajes y el desarrollo de estos personajes secundarios. El desarrollo de la historia también está bien construido. Me gustan las historias donde Dumbledore no es el típico villano manipulador. Ahora hablando personalmente, si no hubiera sabido desde la sinopsis que era NO HAREM, me habría ilusionado mucho mientras leía la historia, el MC estaba constantemente rodeado de chicas y seguía construyendo su relación con ellas solo para que se quedara con una al final, odio ver triángulos amorosos en un fanfic y este va encaminado a eso, si es así prefiero que sea harem. Si no pensabas hacer harem, deberías haber agregado algún otro hombre entre los amigos cercanos del MC. La historia tiene el desarrollo perfecto para que el MC se quede con al menos 3 chicas. Fuera de eso no encontré ningún defecto en la historia.
Revelar SpoilerThis is a nice HP story. Thanks, author for updating regularly. I hope you will finish this story. This is a nice HP story. Thanks, author for updating regularly.
Hasta el momento en el que voy, está bastante bien la historia, tienen buen desarrollo los personajes, el prota no esta mal.
a good flashback when harry was fighting in the alternative universe then neviel as fighter and seamus as megumin the explosion wizard then be creative on other characters combat styles. I would love to read that
Can I request a flashback scenes when harry was fighting strong demons in the previous alternate timeline from some chapters. also scenes of how his comrades dies and how the war goes even if not too detailed.
La calidad de traducción puede mejorar, aún hay algunos diálogos que confunden pero a pesar de ello el desarrollo dea historia y de los personajes es increíble, me encanta como la relación del protagonista cono los demas personas avanzan si ser forzado, aunque vuelvo a resaltar que la traducción hace que se un poco dificil entender los momentos en los que se relacionan. Igualmente me encanta❤️
Revelar SpoilerPersonally, I like it a lot and it is one of the best Harry Potter stories I have found. I only hope that it does have an ending and they don't leave it halfway like many I have seen.
I love Harry Potter, so when I saw this book, I had to read it, and it did not disappoint. I love the plot and the character development. [img=recommend]
5 stars because I really enjoyed it, there were concepts that I didn't like too much like the "HP multiverse" but it was handled well and it wasn't very important, the There was only one well-developed romantic interest so that's also a plus in my opinion and considering the endless amount of Harry Potter fanfics, I won't find too many bad things to say. I enjoyed this one, it's a good story to entertain you and I think that should be the main thing. Thank you very much author for this and I hope you continue writing.
This is so wow. Like wow wow. And I cant believe it ended. I've come across this story maybe 6 months back or so and since then I've been keeping up with the story. And this is the first story I came across that gave regular updates. 2 chapters a day without fail. And sometimes I felt it was slow or boring but then the next chapter suddenly becomes one of the interesting things. It is so unique from any other time travel or parallel world story I ever read(And believe me I read loads of them). The whole plotline is so unique and wonderful. So grateful that I stumbled upon this story. I love it and would give a 10 star rating if I could.
Disclaimer: Read 29 chapters. Spoilers about AU Neville, house choice, and semi-OC. So, this fic has a pretty cool concept—Harry starting it all over again, but the canon is with ACTUAL changes. The beginning? Loved it. Harry’s interactions with his new family? Nice touch. But around chapter 29, I kind of hit a wall and stopped reading. Not because it’s bad, but because a few things just weren’t clicking for me. I know it might seem weird to talk about the beginning when you already have over 400 chapters, but hear me out. First off, the AU elements feel a bit undercooked. You set up a world where Neville is the Chosen One, which is cool, but he’s still the same old Neville. Like, wouldn’t that kind of upbringing make him a bit more confident? Maybe he’s a beast at Quidditch now? Or just, I don’t know, prepared for the whole Dark Lord situation? But nope, he’s still just canon Neville, and that felt like a missed opportunity. The second thing is about house choice. Just to be clear—I don’t mind Gryffindor. I’m not complaining. It’s your damn fic—do whatever you like. Personally, I don’t like Slytherin at all, so I was glad about house choice, but you said “I like Griffindor because I like the idea of Harry being this 'embodiment' or ideal of that house, whether he likes it or not, so the sorting hat would immediately feel this and put him in that house without giving him any choice on the matter.” So, here’s my break down about what you did with house choice in your fic: Harry contradicts himself. He’s in Gryffindor, but he acts way more like a Slytherin. His irritation with Hermione feels weird—he thinks she’s too young, but instead of treating her like a little sister (like he does with Holly), he mostly just tolerates her. Same with Neville. He decides he wants to protect him, but doesn’t really, you know, TALK to him. I think Gryffindor is more for social connections, and maybe you should show how it actually benefits him in ways Slytherin wouldn’t. Where’s that reckless bravery and nobility? Harry is slick, calculating, and straight-up OP. That scene—dude goes full John Wick, brutally wipes out four masked assassins, then pretends that Batman saved him—felt straight out of an anime with antihero. I get why he hid that he did that, but the main point is—he didn't try to save his mom right away, first he made her unconscious and only then started to act. And all this thing, Harry hiding his strength, feels kinda forced. The whole “if they find out, they’ll come for me” reasoning doesn’t really hold up. I mean, Hermione was a genius in canon, and nobody tried to take her out right away, right? And if he’s so worried about standing out, why isn’t he warning Hermione to chill a little? Now, let’s talk about Daphne. Look, I get it. That cold, calculating, tempting “ice princess”? It’s fun—the first time. But after seeing it in a million fics, it starts feeling very copy-paste. I am not saying that I am against her. I am saying, that right now, her appearances in the plot feel unnatural, like she’s just showing up with a sign saying, “Hello, the author sent me here to help you.” And that hint how Harry doesn't really mind her company, because she acts more mature than Hermione (strike in my heart). If Gryffindor is meant to give him social connections, then let’s actually see how it benefits him—right now, his key relationships seems to be outside of it. A few side notes: The disclaimer at the start of every chapter is brutal if you’re listening via text-to-speech. Maybe throw it in the fic description instead? Thoughts in single quotes don’t really add much. Just weave them into the text. Like: "What if this is all my fault?" Harry thought. A shiver ran through him. → What if this was all his fault? A shiver ran through him. The whole aristocracy + Great Houses thing is kinda overdone, but hey, that’s just personal taste. Dropping it here so people know what they’re signing up for. P.S. This isn’t me saying “quit writing.” Actually, I respect anyone who keeps going because I, personally, flame out after a few chapters and never publish. A finished fic, even with flaws, is better than one that never gets done. So if you’re still in it for the long haul, good luck!
That was a nice read. Thanks! The ending was properly wrapped up and it did not feel incomplete or rushed i think. Quite enjoyable................
La mejor historia que leí de harry potter hasta ahora, estoy ansiosa por los próximos proyectos relacionados con el universo de harry. Hiciste un excelente trabajo autor espero que nos encontremos pronto
Nice book though the updating speed was a bit slow now that it is finished it’s an amazing read
I really like this novel and I'm a little sad that it's finished but the ending was just beautifully done.
this is the first ff of Harry Potter that I have finished reading as it was written, the others either goes downwarda as the story progress, got into hiatus or got dropped. so I'm doing the 5 star review on this one to commemorate as well as to mark the author as one that I would be following the story of 🥰🤩[img=recommend]
Harry Potter is our main character, he is like a magic wand for everyone! The story is not interesting, wiping everyone's snot is very annoying. All other secondary characters are cardboard! The main character does not behave like an older person who has survived the WAR and has many losses of people close to him. He is more like a teenager of 15-17 years old without experience of real hard life before the crossing after death! It seems that even if theoretically the original Harry Potter died, and our main character did not arrive, this world will simply be destroyed by Voldemort.
Revelar SpoilerWhat. I thought the ritual will force harry to stay in this universe. I don't like bittersweet ending. So this is the last chapter I am reading. Thank you author for the story.
One of if the best Harry Potter fanfictions I have had the pleasure to read in my 13-14 years reading ff.
I'm at chapter 420. Read the fic twice whilst waiting, and we're clearly getting to the end. My opinion: Very good fic, I particularly appreciate the ton of plots going on. Maybe sometimes I felt I wished some plots had more development instead of introducing something new, but still, love this fic for this fact. Totally recommended, thanks op
some chapters are breaking suddenly, anyway this novels is good. some chapters are breaking suddenly, anyway this novels is good. some chapters are breaking suddenly, anyway this novels is good.
Not much of AU story if only 1 key detail is different and the rest pretty much follows the same trope as the OG story, the whole BWL thing was always coin flip removing an factor in that event should have made even greater changes than just alive voldy and potters. Also kinda hard see someone not having their “aura” and “values” change from years of fighting.
I’m be honest a villain but it’s a good redemption of what if Harry Potter had a family and was not the boy who lived
Leí hasta el capitulo 360. Como lector objetivo, puedo decir que la trama de esta historia es perfecta, los antecedentes mundiales están muy bien hechos, la personalidad y desarrollo del MC están bien implementadas, así como la relación con otros personajes y el desarrollo de estos personajes secundarios. El desarrollo de la historia también está bien construido. Me gustan las historias donde Dumbledore no es el típico villano manipulador. Ahora hablando personalmente, si no hubiera sabido desde la sinopsis que era NO HAREM, me habría ilusionado mucho mientras leía la historia, el MC estaba constantemente rodeado de chicas y seguía construyendo su relación con ellas solo para que se quedara con una al final, odio ver triángulos amorosos en un fanfic y este va encaminado a eso, si es así prefiero que sea harem. Si no pensabas hacer harem, deberías haber agregado algún otro hombre entre los amigos cercanos del MC. La historia tiene el desarrollo perfecto para que el MC se quede con al menos 3 chicas. Fuera de eso no encontré ningún defecto en la historia.
Revelar SpoilerThis is a nice HP story. Thanks, author for updating regularly. I hope you will finish this story. This is a nice HP story. Thanks, author for updating regularly.
Hasta el momento en el que voy, está bastante bien la historia, tienen buen desarrollo los personajes, el prota no esta mal.
a good flashback when harry was fighting in the alternative universe then neviel as fighter and seamus as megumin the explosion wizard then be creative on other characters combat styles. I would love to read that
Can I request a flashback scenes when harry was fighting strong demons in the previous alternate timeline from some chapters. also scenes of how his comrades dies and how the war goes even if not too detailed.
La calidad de traducción puede mejorar, aún hay algunos diálogos que confunden pero a pesar de ello el desarrollo dea historia y de los personajes es increíble, me encanta como la relación del protagonista cono los demas personas avanzan si ser forzado, aunque vuelvo a resaltar que la traducción hace que se un poco dificil entender los momentos en los que se relacionan. Igualmente me encanta❤️
Revelar SpoilerPersonally, I like it a lot and it is one of the best Harry Potter stories I have found. I only hope that it does have an ending and they don't leave it halfway like many I have seen.
supper thanks this is the best Harry Potter continues story i have read... ♥️♥️♥️