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This is a great novel however it’s been months since an update is this novel dropped ??
hey man the story is interesting but honestly the grammar and overall writing quality is bad. I noticed that you seem to be translating from Spanish to English but you should either just post it in Spanish so those that understand can read it or just take more to actually proofread the story. if I didn't know Spanish or wasn't used to mtl it would be pretty hard to understand the story
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you've wanted to give the characters a personality, but after that you didn't bother developing it later on. it was all fights and action with nothing being their actual reason ig.
(Read up to chapter 84 at time of review, and plan to continue...) It was a really well written story, but the quality really started to nosedive around chapter 40 with typos. Suddenly the text started misgendering characters, like a scene where a woman is being attacked by a male archer, saying, "suddenly his leg was struck by an arrow" then the next paragraph say "her leg." Or in a conversation where siblings are involved, if the younger sister is speaking, the text will erroneously use the OLDER sister's name instead. Over time it became a constant struggle to tell what was really happening. 9/10 before chapter 40, 5/10 after... (Also there quite a bit of AU content. Its not bad, just not what I hoped for. I mean, this starts months before Book 1 begins, but Ty Lee & Mai are already traveling with Azula?? Ty Lee joined the gang during Book 2 in canon, guess she never joined the circus here?)
Good synopsis or not I don’t really think there’s a problem with this story so far. I think the author did a good job of writing out Naruto’s character. Especially Azula, I like how she’s getting her character development. Waiting for the next chapter 👀
At first, I was really enjoying this Fanfic. I thought you were doing really good with the characters and everything but then I caught up to the newest chapters, at chapter 86 I had to stop because all of a sudden you bring firearms into the world of Avatar. Yeah, I ain’t doing that, thanks for the read for a while, but I’m dropping.
This is too 2-dimensional for me. It's like DC comics where Batman catches the joker, puts him in a cell, telling him he won't be able to escape. The joker escapes, killing a bunch of people, causing mayhem killing more people. Batman catches the joker and repeat. I mean, don't get me wrong, it's a good story where the mc is true to the og Naruto, but the way the author had the people of the avatar world embrace narutos ideology of forgive and forget is just lazy writing to me. You can't just forgive the people who raped/killed your spouse and children. Especially if said people also happen to be your slavers.
MC is naruto og, obviously he's a stubborn. second, I don't like pacifists. prefer realistic and pragmatic people, more reasonable. thirdly, the author seems to just stick to the avatar canon, because most of them are like that.
Full five star for this fanfic. Interesting story using naruto as main character. Absolutely recommended fanfic to read..............................
Well, this fanfic is great even though it's a TL; good work, translator. The Naruto in this ff is the same as canon. Everything is perfect about it except for the short chapters by the translator.
Pretty boring fic. The MC is OG Naruto so he's going about this war as his hippie self. Peace this and that. Then there's his stupidity thrown in when he spends most of his time trying to remake ramen and turning aang and the crew into even bigger hippies.
Naruto luego de su batalla contra Sasuke en valle del fin en un intento detenerlo para evitar que huya con Orochimaru, se ve en el problema de aparecer en un mundo extraño, ahora no solo tenia que encontrar la forma de volver, sino que también de sobrevivir. de una loca que lanza fuego azulado y sus dos extrañas amigas que lo perseguirían donde sea que fuera para atraparlo.
a great fanfic that "respects" the personality of the original characters and so far has a decent story, but the problem is the very short chapters.
This is a great novel however it’s been months since an update is this novel dropped ??
hey man the story is interesting but honestly the grammar and overall writing quality is bad. I noticed that you seem to be translating from Spanish to English but you should either just post it in Spanish so those that understand can read it or just take more to actually proofread the story. if I didn't know Spanish or wasn't used to mtl it would be pretty hard to understand the story
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you've wanted to give the characters a personality, but after that you didn't bother developing it later on. it was all fights and action with nothing being their actual reason ig.
(Read up to chapter 84 at time of review, and plan to continue...) It was a really well written story, but the quality really started to nosedive around chapter 40 with typos. Suddenly the text started misgendering characters, like a scene where a woman is being attacked by a male archer, saying, "suddenly his leg was struck by an arrow" then the next paragraph say "her leg." Or in a conversation where siblings are involved, if the younger sister is speaking, the text will erroneously use the OLDER sister's name instead. Over time it became a constant struggle to tell what was really happening. 9/10 before chapter 40, 5/10 after... (Also there quite a bit of AU content. Its not bad, just not what I hoped for. I mean, this starts months before Book 1 begins, but Ty Lee & Mai are already traveling with Azula?? Ty Lee joined the gang during Book 2 in canon, guess she never joined the circus here?)
Good synopsis or not I don’t really think there’s a problem with this story so far. I think the author did a good job of writing out Naruto’s character. Especially Azula, I like how she’s getting her character development. Waiting for the next chapter 👀
At first, I was really enjoying this Fanfic. I thought you were doing really good with the characters and everything but then I caught up to the newest chapters, at chapter 86 I had to stop because all of a sudden you bring firearms into the world of Avatar. Yeah, I ain’t doing that, thanks for the read for a while, but I’m dropping.
This is too 2-dimensional for me. It's like DC comics where Batman catches the joker, puts him in a cell, telling him he won't be able to escape. The joker escapes, killing a bunch of people, causing mayhem killing more people. Batman catches the joker and repeat. I mean, don't get me wrong, it's a good story where the mc is true to the og Naruto, but the way the author had the people of the avatar world embrace narutos ideology of forgive and forget is just lazy writing to me. You can't just forgive the people who raped/killed your spouse and children. Especially if said people also happen to be your slavers.
MC is naruto og, obviously he's a stubborn. second, I don't like pacifists. prefer realistic and pragmatic people, more reasonable. thirdly, the author seems to just stick to the avatar canon, because most of them are like that.
Full five star for this fanfic. Interesting story using naruto as main character. Absolutely recommended fanfic to read..............................
Well, this fanfic is great even though it's a TL; good work, translator. The Naruto in this ff is the same as canon. Everything is perfect about it except for the short chapters by the translator.
Pretty boring fic. The MC is OG Naruto so he's going about this war as his hippie self. Peace this and that. Then there's his stupidity thrown in when he spends most of his time trying to remake ramen and turning aang and the crew into even bigger hippies.
Naruto luego de su batalla contra Sasuke en valle del fin en un intento detenerlo para evitar que huya con Orochimaru, se ve en el problema de aparecer en un mundo extraño, ahora no solo tenia que encontrar la forma de volver, sino que también de sobrevivir. de una loca que lanza fuego azulado y sus dos extrañas amigas que lo perseguirían donde sea que fuera para atraparlo.
a great fanfic that "respects" the personality of the original characters and so far has a decent story, but the problem is the very short chapters.