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Revelar Spoilerall your brothers and sisters are like children. mc is like that too. I don't understand how this is the case when this novel should be a better version of a novel. I think the first novel was even worse.
Grammar could be better, a lot of the mistakes are spelling mistakes that even some free online grammar check would find. (Like repeatedly writing blastor instead of blaster) Personally I don't like the current development (Chapter 13), it's completely overused by fanfics recently. Everything else so far is good, I quite liked the idea and implementation of the system.
I have high hopes for this. [img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp]
Mc slave. [img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap]
Lost time ,...........,.................................................mmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmm mmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmm mmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmm mmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmm
Revelar Spoilerall your brothers and sisters are like children. mc is like that too. I don't understand how this is the case when this novel should be a better version of a novel. I think the first novel was even worse.
Grammar could be better, a lot of the mistakes are spelling mistakes that even some free online grammar check would find. (Like repeatedly writing blastor instead of blaster) Personally I don't like the current development (Chapter 13), it's completely overused by fanfics recently. Everything else so far is good, I quite liked the idea and implementation of the system.
I have high hopes for this. [img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp]
Mc slave. [img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap]