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- Qualidade de Escrita
- Estabilidade das atualizações
- Desenvolvimento de Histórias
- Design de Personagens
- Antecedentes do mundo
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I can see multiple problem on your story 1/the story is very rushed there are multiple times skip in one chapter which removes anytime that allows you to build the world, the character et cetera. 2/My second problem, the character building is non-existent even the romance is rushed . 3/There is no world building The world existence I want to go from a to b that's all. 4/very poor magic system Everyone has an element and you go from 0 to 9 cultivation style If you're add some of magical element from Harry Potter, the quality of the story improve a lot. 5/and finally there is no core concept in the story What is the reason behind his existence? What is his goal? from what I see the protagonist only want to become stronger For the sake of being strong, he neither had an ambition or goal that make him want to be stronger is for the sake of being strong that’s all. example for goals that you can put behind your protagonist wanting to know from where comes magic /wanted to discover and research magic/ Rolling the magical world /improving the magic world , et cetera and these are simple goals You can be creative. You can add an enemy From his past and don’t make the protagonist overpowered Because if he is overpowered the story will become boring with no struggle no excitement that’s all for me.
Revelar Spoiler
I have read all the reviews, but I'll wrote mine. Most have a point, but I'll say it was only just bland at the beginning as the writing was awful. But this gets better gradually, and the grammars really improved. Though, this book has a lot of cringy moment or statement, but it's actually good. The world building, well, is slowly built up. The same goes for the characters. The power system is simple and straight forward, easy to understand. And the same for the magic system, simple and easy to understand. In fact with its foundation, it's easy to formulate what the next rank could be like instead of having random nee tiers drop from no where. The book has a lot of potential, the only thing I'll say is that, though there is gradual improvement, but the writing skills needs some more upgrade. If the writing skills improve, this book will be a 4, and if possible full 5 star rating. Thanks
was starting to get to the point I would say good back story was growing and book was coming along then it just stopped updating no reason was given they just stopped sadly
i mess with this heavy i hope that the author still post more chapters........................ ...................................................................................................................
can't really tell from only 20 ch has potential but I don't feel like paying for it maybe if there's 100 I can read before i need to pay I could give a better review doubt it well happen tho so I'll have to pass on this book sadly wish the author the best of luck on the book it definitely has potential
The way the system works is bery interesting. And the MC isn't a coward wich is always a plus point for me.
the MC is simp trash,he is emotional,he generally cares about people rather then seem them as disposable tools.He just met someone and said he will protect her.athirs like them should not be allowed to use the word mage,sorcery,etc.The are unworthy
Uma história muito boa, existem alguns erros ou coisas ainda não explicadas .estou parando de ler por não poder pagar os capítulos, mas ainda recomendo para quem estiver com tempo para ler.
good story, it has potential, the only downside is that the author blocked the chapters behind the paywall too early
Whats the MC like? Is he cold, indifferent, evil or is he lame, boring and a simp? If its not the first half I’m out
iba todo bien hasta que lo puso con opcion de pago, sinceramente me gustaba como iba yendo la historia pero en el capitulo 23 puso opcion de pago muy temprano
was enjoying the novel until the forced romance between marya and the protagonist. too forced. nor natural really disappointed. and it seems she's going to be a mainstay as the mc gon be her protector or whatever bullshit.
I can see multiple problem on your story 1/the story is very rushed there are multiple times skip in one chapter which removes anytime that allows you to build the world, the character et cetera. 2/My second problem, the character building is non-existent even the romance is rushed . 3/There is no world building The world existence I want to go from a to b that's all. 4/very poor magic system Everyone has an element and you go from 0 to 9 cultivation style If you're add some of magical element from Harry Potter, the quality of the story improve a lot. 5/and finally there is no core concept in the story What is the reason behind his existence? What is his goal? from what I see the protagonist only want to become stronger For the sake of being strong, he neither had an ambition or goal that make him want to be stronger is for the sake of being strong that’s all. example for goals that you can put behind your protagonist wanting to know from where comes magic /wanted to discover and research magic/ Rolling the magical world /improving the magic world , et cetera and these are simple goals You can be creative. You can add an enemy From his past and don’t make the protagonist overpowered Because if he is overpowered the story will become boring with no struggle no excitement that’s all for me.
Revelar Spoiler I have read all the reviews, but I'll wrote mine. Most have a point, but I'll say it was only just bland at the beginning as the writing was awful. But this gets better gradually, and the grammars really improved. Though, this book has a lot of cringy moment or statement, but it's actually good. The world building, well, is slowly built up. The same goes for the characters. The power system is simple and straight forward, easy to understand. And the same for the magic system, simple and easy to understand. In fact with its foundation, it's easy to formulate what the next rank could be like instead of having random nee tiers drop from no where. The book has a lot of potential, the only thing I'll say is that, though there is gradual improvement, but the writing skills needs some more upgrade. If the writing skills improve, this book will be a 4, and if possible full 5 star rating. Thanks
was starting to get to the point I would say good back story was growing and book was coming along then it just stopped updating no reason was given they just stopped sadly
i mess with this heavy i hope that the author still post more chapters........................ ...................................................................................................................
can't really tell from only 20 ch has potential but I don't feel like paying for it maybe if there's 100 I can read before i need to pay I could give a better review doubt it well happen tho so I'll have to pass on this book sadly wish the author the best of luck on the book it definitely has potential
The way the system works is bery interesting. And the MC isn't a coward wich is always a plus point for me.
the MC is simp trash,he is emotional,he generally cares about people rather then seem them as disposable tools.He just met someone and said he will protect her.athirs like them should not be allowed to use the word mage,sorcery,etc.The are unworthy
Uma história muito boa, existem alguns erros ou coisas ainda não explicadas .estou parando de ler por não poder pagar os capítulos, mas ainda recomendo para quem estiver com tempo para ler.
good story, it has potential, the only downside is that the author blocked the chapters behind the paywall too early
Whats the MC like? Is he cold, indifferent, evil or is he lame, boring and a simp? If its not the first half I’m out
iba todo bien hasta que lo puso con opcion de pago, sinceramente me gustaba como iba yendo la historia pero en el capitulo 23 puso opcion de pago muy temprano
was enjoying the novel until the forced romance between marya and the protagonist. too forced. nor natural really disappointed. and it seems she's going to be a mainstay as the mc gon be her protector or whatever bullshit.