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Really liked the Story and the Charakters so far, but I hesitate to continue without steady updates. Please continue to update and good luck with your health.
Writing Quality : I must say it was quite good on the first few chapters but no, grammar, spelling, it was all bad. Your way of writing is also very chaotic. You keep changing perspective per perspective, leave plots hanging, you leave to much information which sometimes becomes redundant. You need to bring this all together.Story Development : It was very good for you make Moku your mc with it based on your synopsis, but you made a bad move, you change thr main characters perspective to another. And also you cant't justify you word of making in as record of the orc civilization because halfway through the novel you change perspective to human development, history and all that, which give me irked. Its not even story anymore, its a book of description. The later chapters focus more on information dumps which Is very unlikable. Character Design : I dont't even know what to say, abandoning first main character perspective and just leaving it on the plot armour disgust me, I hate it. Authors like you are incompetent.Updating Stability : No CommentWorld Background : Clear and unclear at the same time. You give too much details but not description, you're writing is more of whats going on, not what it is or whatever it was.REMARKS: Anyway you probably fattened your chapters because money, idk what to say. But your writing needs more improvmement. If this is your first book then congrats, your grammar and english might not be much but atleast you bring a world for us readers not like those out-of-spite novels. I wish you good luck in your next book. And if you want to be a great writer, webnobel might not be for you, money shackles the mind Author. Thankyou.
such an incredible work and with such a huge universe to be explored in my opinion it would be a waste not to give 5 stars...[img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp]...
ok it's a greatd book and has a lot of potential, but every time i get Hooked. some npc character backstory i dont need the back story of 2 slave traders that are going to die in the next 2-3 chapters. and it's like 5-6 chapter backstory. i can understand a backstory about 1 chapter or less long just to get the general vibe.specially if they are going to die soon. it just stops the flow of the story. it's already switching POV like crazy don't need random background on random NPCS.
fast reviewThe biggest problems I have had were the grammar and Indonesia explanations. The grammar is really bad but a bit readable. I understand this is the authors first English novel. Still, it just isn't enjoyable to read powers that are translated in a different language. Making the powers not memorable and immersion breaking. It just doesn't feel right that an orc is getting powers from whatever religion you follow irl. Then, he goes on to explain these religious powers to other orcs, and they somehow understand. I think you have something decent. You just have to get better in english grammar. As well as not having so much of your cultural influence in the book. Cultural influence isn't bad, but when it's thrown so much in your face. Especially in a fantasy like story like this. It just kills all immersion for a reader like me.
the story is good i have nothing to say about that,but when he starts allialnce between orcs and goblins that where the story goes down,i mean why?why would a warlike race savage race blood thirsty race ally themselves with a bunch of cowards who can't even live normally in plain sight!!
I need more much more if you would. It’d be nice if there was a femboy in this story in any shape or form but I personally know how sluggish it feels writing about something you don’t care about so just keep it up!
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If your a pro war person then this is good for you. If your a sadistic person this will be good for you All of you who doesn't belong to those group better prepare your mind for frustrating point of view sometimes. Although some grammatical error or words and some unfamiliar words are also frustrating it would be a good novel if its edited properly Thats all what I have to say [img=gift]
Yg gua suka dari novel ini adalah world building nya keren super duper keren tapi yg gua ngk suka itu dari sistem lvlup power di ras MC kenpa harus dari kntl gituloh baru tiba2 ada garuda juga padahal sudah bereinkarnasi yg mana seharusnya semua yg berhubungan dengan dunia awal itu terputus kecuali kalo MC punya sistem mensumon tapi ini kan ngk ada. Harusnya sistem lvlup nya itu di ubah jadi menggunakan pernapasan naga untuk menyerap mana ato yg lain kah jangan malah dari kntl baru yg dibayar untuk tambah kuat adalah emosi nya sendiri hererere nt kadang-kadang nt kesel banget gua njer bacanya
mc is an orc and goes about breeding animals for research purposes... other than this well i'm out from there you can burn yourself if you want to find more...
Definitely not recommend, this have a lot of unnecessary details that just are the joy of few and the annoy of the rest. the grammar is so-so with chaps that are just awful, the plot is medium good but with a enormous lack of realistic flow. Is fantasy yes, but the Author put real martial arts that lack reality instead of make a fake one that fix in the fantasy. Then the girls plot flow in the novel... pfft more cheap cr*p, tou in tou is a waste of time.
Loved the novel. I'm waiting for the novel to have over 200 chapters. For those who dropped out of the novel because worldbuilding is 40+ chapters, they just read only fanfiction. Such people are strongly discouraged from reading The Lord of Secrets. Okay, I'm writing and I realized that I'm too lazy to write a lot .. In a word, the virtues of the novel. -- World. --there were others, but I don't remember... I read this novel 2 months ago. Cons of the novel - infuriates the arch with the girls. -- Creation of the power of the world. There were others, but I forgot. Rating--3.9/5
Nothing new in world development or uniqueness to story and add that to bad English can't read without skipping [img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp]
Very good novel like most other orc novels like “I am a orc” or something it does the orcs justice I Love orcs
this is basically a chinese novel... 80% info, 20% story..... basically a book full of information and barely a story... it even cuts from the main character to an irrelivant npc.... best not to read this book as it sux at keeping the flow of the story and descends to giving info dumps to up the word count
I can not hate it as a novel but I hate the concept and the presentation ... Mr. Author is talented but then he is writing a story about a very superficial guy ... A guy who only want to fight and that is it, there is nothing deeper than that in the 100 chapters I read, he is not only a monster (which I barely accepted) but he is also a selfish one (and this the last nail in the coffin for me), I can not simply accept this anymore. Another thing that needs to be addressed is the way he "always" finds himself fighting someone stronger than him after every upgrade, this old cliche is already a dead concept. I hope to see better work from the author.
Story was good in the beginning then became a story about his girlfriend not my cup of tea smh it was such promising start that fight with goku fire though good luck with your story though.
this was a great book at the beginning, but seriously it delved into a troupe , human in monster skin, no true world building, as we barely know much about it. then lest not talk about Anna, it's her story apparently 🤷. but moku our "Supposed MC" isn't really likable, but you don't hate him he's just boring & closed minded. then you all these forms with different ideologies & background that truly isn't necessary to explain them in such detail; too much trying to promote his culture with the naming sense (Author him/herself). levels & ranks are too complicated , & too much emphasis on moku's power , not necessarily moku himself as growth in character. no is he allowing his other Main Orcs get Character Development. Orcs being in shambles (Crying) because his brother died is blasphemy , they are Raging creatures where killing is second nature death of those near is nothing new , they knew this before moku even came to their world. these aren't Orcs , Not Monsters , but just Green Humans smh 🤦 & please for the love of the readers who probably still read this , stop saying "Moku this Moku that each sentence. here's an example Moku looked up at his assailant, gauging the distance from which he could strike. Then he took a stance and activated his "Such & Such" form.
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I like it so far, the world building is detailed, and interaction of the characters although sometime goofy but still enjoyable for me. The plot on the other hand is realy slow with very little development on each chapter, and the Malay cultural reference might be confusing for someone who are not familiar with, you should've added an Glossary/Trivia at the end of chapter.
An elf can be a king or queen among the Elfin. All it takes is absolute devotion to our people. —Wisdom of the Eldar........................
as a read more and more is not a story about some mma orc its about Anna the humen swordwomen thats turn to she orc and her 4 girlfriend big disappointment
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World building is good. Kind of hard to understand different words and culture at times. Also there is romance but dont think of good, caring romance. Its more of hoping the women will breed his children and thats it. MC isnt some hero. I would call him a Villan actually. He uses everyone around him to accomplish his goals. He has no Rremorse for other orcs or anyone that im aware of. Still a solid read so far just pretty slow at times but still interesting.
the story is entertaining and you can see the effort of the author, plus you can also see that he wants to promote his culture, but in my opinion, doing this practically shot himself in the foot, greatly reducing the audience, since there are many words that are practically the movement of his martial art and weapons, ranks, that the author puts them with names that as readers we are not used to, since practically when reading several novels, one forgets what that name and movement represented (did I understand myself here?) , and it's annoying. Also, the "MC" wasn't an MMA fighter? Because he practically only uses the martial art of his hometown? Can't he use others as well or try to combine them all like some manga characters do, becoming stronger like that? like garou from one punch man, some characters from kengan asura, and baki from baki. Also, the cultivation system of the mc and possibly the orc race is interesting, but I think it just unnecessarily complicates things when they can easily have a simpler cultivation system like most cultivation novels or Japanese magic novels, and As far as it goes, there is not much development of the mc's story, the creation of the world is good, but very, very slow. I will leave the novel here, it is good, but it bothers too much the names that the author of his culture uses, since one forgets their meanings, and I think that happens to most readers, and they end up abandoning it and only a few read it. read, or maybe it's just me, and that's why I think the author practically shot himself in the foot, although that part could be fixed with editing, using more general names that are understood by most, and in parentheses the author puts as he calls him originally, I think that with that he could have more readers, and the orc farming system, although interesting, is very complicated in my opinion, and could be simpler. martial arts were born out of the need of the weak to defend themselves from the strong, in itself the martial arts are to protect you. Thank you for your attention.
Harem? Just wondering Is there going to be any romance and a good harem in the story? Also while I'm asking questions. How much of the story will be focused on the kingdom building?
Story is okay but ima drop it and remove from libary. MC Reincarnated as an orc with all his memories. does some exploration and stuff. Was okay, the hardcore simping for the females is a major No No for me.
By God this is an amazing novel, might just be the first book I waste my 1 useless power stone on.
Really liked the Story and the Charakters so far, but I hesitate to continue without steady updates. Please continue to update and good luck with your health.
Writing Quality : I must say it was quite good on the first few chapters but no, grammar, spelling, it was all bad. Your way of writing is also very chaotic. You keep changing perspective per perspective, leave plots hanging, you leave to much information which sometimes becomes redundant. You need to bring this all together.Story Development : It was very good for you make Moku your mc with it based on your synopsis, but you made a bad move, you change thr main characters perspective to another. And also you cant't justify you word of making in as record of the orc civilization because halfway through the novel you change perspective to human development, history and all that, which give me irked. Its not even story anymore, its a book of description. The later chapters focus more on information dumps which Is very unlikable. Character Design : I dont't even know what to say, abandoning first main character perspective and just leaving it on the plot armour disgust me, I hate it. Authors like you are incompetent.Updating Stability : No CommentWorld Background : Clear and unclear at the same time. You give too much details but not description, you're writing is more of whats going on, not what it is or whatever it was.REMARKS: Anyway you probably fattened your chapters because money, idk what to say. But your writing needs more improvmement. If this is your first book then congrats, your grammar and english might not be much but atleast you bring a world for us readers not like those out-of-spite novels. I wish you good luck in your next book. And if you want to be a great writer, webnobel might not be for you, money shackles the mind Author. Thankyou.
such an incredible work and with such a huge universe to be explored in my opinion it would be a waste not to give 5 stars...[img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp]...
ok it's a greatd book and has a lot of potential, but every time i get Hooked. some npc character backstory i dont need the back story of 2 slave traders that are going to die in the next 2-3 chapters. and it's like 5-6 chapter backstory. i can understand a backstory about 1 chapter or less long just to get the general vibe.specially if they are going to die soon. it just stops the flow of the story. it's already switching POV like crazy don't need random background on random NPCS.
fast reviewThe biggest problems I have had were the grammar and Indonesia explanations. The grammar is really bad but a bit readable. I understand this is the authors first English novel. Still, it just isn't enjoyable to read powers that are translated in a different language. Making the powers not memorable and immersion breaking. It just doesn't feel right that an orc is getting powers from whatever religion you follow irl. Then, he goes on to explain these religious powers to other orcs, and they somehow understand. I think you have something decent. You just have to get better in english grammar. As well as not having so much of your cultural influence in the book. Cultural influence isn't bad, but when it's thrown so much in your face. Especially in a fantasy like story like this. It just kills all immersion for a reader like me.
the story is good i have nothing to say about that,but when he starts allialnce between orcs and goblins that where the story goes down,i mean why?why would a warlike race savage race blood thirsty race ally themselves with a bunch of cowards who can't even live normally in plain sight!!
I need more much more if you would. It’d be nice if there was a femboy in this story in any shape or form but I personally know how sluggish it feels writing about something you don’t care about so just keep it up!
mantap lanjutkan.. Good job Your novel i like it Good job Your novel i like it Good job Your novel i like it Good job Your novel i like it Good job Your novel i like it Good job Your novel i like it Good job Your novel i like it
If your a pro war person then this is good for you. If your a sadistic person this will be good for you All of you who doesn't belong to those group better prepare your mind for frustrating point of view sometimes. Although some grammatical error or words and some unfamiliar words are also frustrating it would be a good novel if its edited properly Thats all what I have to say [img=gift]
Yg gua suka dari novel ini adalah world building nya keren super duper keren tapi yg gua ngk suka itu dari sistem lvlup power di ras MC kenpa harus dari kntl gituloh baru tiba2 ada garuda juga padahal sudah bereinkarnasi yg mana seharusnya semua yg berhubungan dengan dunia awal itu terputus kecuali kalo MC punya sistem mensumon tapi ini kan ngk ada. Harusnya sistem lvlup nya itu di ubah jadi menggunakan pernapasan naga untuk menyerap mana ato yg lain kah jangan malah dari kntl baru yg dibayar untuk tambah kuat adalah emosi nya sendiri hererere nt kadang-kadang nt kesel banget gua njer bacanya
mc is an orc and goes about breeding animals for research purposes... other than this well i'm out from there you can burn yourself if you want to find more...
Definitely not recommend, this have a lot of unnecessary details that just are the joy of few and the annoy of the rest. the grammar is so-so with chaps that are just awful, the plot is medium good but with a enormous lack of realistic flow. Is fantasy yes, but the Author put real martial arts that lack reality instead of make a fake one that fix in the fantasy. Then the girls plot flow in the novel... pfft more cheap cr*p, tou in tou is a waste of time.
Loved the novel. I'm waiting for the novel to have over 200 chapters. For those who dropped out of the novel because worldbuilding is 40+ chapters, they just read only fanfiction. Such people are strongly discouraged from reading The Lord of Secrets. Okay, I'm writing and I realized that I'm too lazy to write a lot .. In a word, the virtues of the novel. -- World. --there were others, but I don't remember... I read this novel 2 months ago. Cons of the novel - infuriates the arch with the girls. -- Creation of the power of the world. There were others, but I forgot. Rating--3.9/5
Nothing new in world development or uniqueness to story and add that to bad English can't read without skipping [img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp]
Very good novel like most other orc novels like “I am a orc” or something it does the orcs justice I Love orcs
this is basically a chinese novel... 80% info, 20% story..... basically a book full of information and barely a story... it even cuts from the main character to an irrelivant npc.... best not to read this book as it sux at keeping the flow of the story and descends to giving info dumps to up the word count
I can not hate it as a novel but I hate the concept and the presentation ... Mr. Author is talented but then he is writing a story about a very superficial guy ... A guy who only want to fight and that is it, there is nothing deeper than that in the 100 chapters I read, he is not only a monster (which I barely accepted) but he is also a selfish one (and this the last nail in the coffin for me), I can not simply accept this anymore. Another thing that needs to be addressed is the way he "always" finds himself fighting someone stronger than him after every upgrade, this old cliche is already a dead concept. I hope to see better work from the author.
Story was good in the beginning then became a story about his girlfriend not my cup of tea smh it was such promising start that fight with goku fire though good luck with your story though.
this was a great book at the beginning, but seriously it delved into a troupe , human in monster skin, no true world building, as we barely know much about it. then lest not talk about Anna, it's her story apparently 🤷. but moku our "Supposed MC" isn't really likable, but you don't hate him he's just boring & closed minded. then you all these forms with different ideologies & background that truly isn't necessary to explain them in such detail; too much trying to promote his culture with the naming sense (Author him/herself). levels & ranks are too complicated , & too much emphasis on moku's power , not necessarily moku himself as growth in character. no is he allowing his other Main Orcs get Character Development. Orcs being in shambles (Crying) because his brother died is blasphemy , they are Raging creatures where killing is second nature death of those near is nothing new , they knew this before moku even came to their world. these aren't Orcs , Not Monsters , but just Green Humans smh 🤦 & please for the love of the readers who probably still read this , stop saying "Moku this Moku that each sentence. here's an example Moku looked up at his assailant, gauging the distance from which he could strike. Then he took a stance and activated his "Such & Such" form.
Revelar Spoiler I like it so far, the world building is detailed, and interaction of the characters although sometime goofy but still enjoyable for me. The plot on the other hand is realy slow with very little development on each chapter, and the Malay cultural reference might be confusing for someone who are not familiar with, you should've added an Glossary/Trivia at the end of chapter.
An elf can be a king or queen among the Elfin. All it takes is absolute devotion to our people. —Wisdom of the Eldar........................
as a read more and more is not a story about some mma orc its about Anna the humen swordwomen thats turn to she orc and her 4 girlfriend big disappointment
..................................................................... ......................................................................
World building is good. Kind of hard to understand different words and culture at times. Also there is romance but dont think of good, caring romance. Its more of hoping the women will breed his children and thats it. MC isnt some hero. I would call him a Villan actually. He uses everyone around him to accomplish his goals. He has no Rremorse for other orcs or anyone that im aware of. Still a solid read so far just pretty slow at times but still interesting.
the story is entertaining and you can see the effort of the author, plus you can also see that he wants to promote his culture, but in my opinion, doing this practically shot himself in the foot, greatly reducing the audience, since there are many words that are practically the movement of his martial art and weapons, ranks, that the author puts them with names that as readers we are not used to, since practically when reading several novels, one forgets what that name and movement represented (did I understand myself here?) , and it's annoying. Also, the "MC" wasn't an MMA fighter? Because he practically only uses the martial art of his hometown? Can't he use others as well or try to combine them all like some manga characters do, becoming stronger like that? like garou from one punch man, some characters from kengan asura, and baki from baki. Also, the cultivation system of the mc and possibly the orc race is interesting, but I think it just unnecessarily complicates things when they can easily have a simpler cultivation system like most cultivation novels or Japanese magic novels, and As far as it goes, there is not much development of the mc's story, the creation of the world is good, but very, very slow. I will leave the novel here, it is good, but it bothers too much the names that the author of his culture uses, since one forgets their meanings, and I think that happens to most readers, and they end up abandoning it and only a few read it. read, or maybe it's just me, and that's why I think the author practically shot himself in the foot, although that part could be fixed with editing, using more general names that are understood by most, and in parentheses the author puts as he calls him originally, I think that with that he could have more readers, and the orc farming system, although interesting, is very complicated in my opinion, and could be simpler. martial arts were born out of the need of the weak to defend themselves from the strong, in itself the martial arts are to protect you. Thank you for your attention.
Harem? Just wondering Is there going to be any romance and a good harem in the story? Also while I'm asking questions. How much of the story will be focused on the kingdom building?
Story is okay but ima drop it and remove from libary. MC Reincarnated as an orc with all his memories. does some exploration and stuff. Was okay, the hardcore simping for the females is a major No No for me.
By God this is an amazing novel, might just be the first book I waste my 1 useless power stone on.