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This story confuses me somewhat as the reincarnatee has absolutely no memories so whats the point of reincarnation. I think it would be better to either keep tge memories or have an actual 7yo orphan from orario get the system. Its nice to see a less used familia but i dont like the charecter design but im quite biased since i dislike naive charecters. Grammar and general writing quality is very good so far.
well I really don't like it first it's because the Freya families look like a reverse harem and sometimes made me kind of gross to read the stories
white hair, check. red eyes, check. system with a separate lifeform (aka personality), check. ok bye no thank you delete this + ratio + who asked + this is getting old I should take another month long break from these cliche fanfics ..............................................................................................................................................................................
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Esta historia hasta el momento esta realmente interesante, lo único que pido es que si bien no baje la cabeza ante nadie al ser intimidado. Tampoco lo hagas un idiota arrogante. Estaré esperando próximos capítulos. Gracias por el trabajo
I'm sorry I couldn't read it to where it is, I don't like that the system in the episodes has a conscience, although this point is explained, it irritates me how it explains things being that it knows about the situation of the mc, the mc, and its attitude is quite silly and I do not like it.
Honestly, it's not bad but has a lot of problems... and many choices that can make readers dislike it or hate it, writing quality is a solid 3 few grammar mistakes but the character interactions feels like everything is robotic/feels unnatural , world background is unknown I mean it's in danmachi but what year or maybe I missed it.
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My opinion the MC is childish he glare at ottar(who could kill him easly) because he Don't speak 🤔 he not smart or cautios like a typical anime protagonist so i expected many of the mighty plot armor to save him i don't know if in the future he change it not problem for me hopely because he can learn from experience.and the last not least his system' is kinda stupid because a sytem who can talk back to his master is a flag a System must only do something if the the master ordered and do something if the MC is in danger and cannot command the system.oh and i hope he not a simp in the future(its Because he lost his mind when he see Freya it kinda a flag for me🤭😤) because if him a simp/naive/boy Scout who follow a girl order because she is preety and get wall over because she is sexy,let go someone who want to kill him because she is preety and not because something smart .🤮🤮. Its just my opinion don't be angry author 👌
finally a danmachi fic thats not with hestia or hepeastus familia and the most important thing is its not with bell or babysitting him finally a danmachi fic thats not with hestia or hepeastus familia and the most important thing is its not with bell or babysitting him
This story is honestly amazing i like how you make the system not all quest and he needs to train cuz I'm extremely bored with system that just controls the player and gives a ton of quest and it's a lot realistic cuz sometimes they make the items so cheap that it's laughable and you could make a inosuke template at season 1 max and then maybe after maxing it out you can make it that you need more points to upgrade it to like entertainment district arc inosuke this could also be used for other characters like Goku and it would start at kid Goku then teen Goku the Saiyan saga but it would be extremely from kid to teen etc
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author said they are taking a break cause they have a lot of homework for the winter but hasn't updated for 8 months which is kinda sad I liked this
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This story confuses me somewhat as the reincarnatee has absolutely no memories so whats the point of reincarnation. I think it would be better to either keep tge memories or have an actual 7yo orphan from orario get the system. Its nice to see a less used familia but i dont like the charecter design but im quite biased since i dislike naive charecters. Grammar and general writing quality is very good so far.
well I really don't like it first it's because the Freya families look like a reverse harem and sometimes made me kind of gross to read the stories
white hair, check. red eyes, check. system with a separate lifeform (aka personality), check. ok bye no thank you delete this + ratio + who asked + this is getting old I should take another month long break from these cliche fanfics ..............................................................................................................................................................................
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Esta historia hasta el momento esta realmente interesante, lo único que pido es que si bien no baje la cabeza ante nadie al ser intimidado. Tampoco lo hagas un idiota arrogante. Estaré esperando próximos capítulos. Gracias por el trabajo
I'm sorry I couldn't read it to where it is, I don't like that the system in the episodes has a conscience, although this point is explained, it irritates me how it explains things being that it knows about the situation of the mc, the mc, and its attitude is quite silly and I do not like it.
Honestly, it's not bad but has a lot of problems... and many choices that can make readers dislike it or hate it, writing quality is a solid 3 few grammar mistakes but the character interactions feels like everything is robotic/feels unnatural , world background is unknown I mean it's in danmachi but what year or maybe I missed it.
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#noharem PLEASE please....................................................................................................................................................
My opinion the MC is childish he glare at ottar(who could kill him easly) because he Don't speak 🤔 he not smart or cautios like a typical anime protagonist so i expected many of the mighty plot armor to save him i don't know if in the future he change it not problem for me hopely because he can learn from experience.and the last not least his system' is kinda stupid because a sytem who can talk back to his master is a flag a System must only do something if the the master ordered and do something if the MC is in danger and cannot command the system.oh and i hope he not a simp in the future(its Because he lost his mind when he see Freya it kinda a flag for me🤭😤) because if him a simp/naive/boy Scout who follow a girl order because she is preety and get wall over because she is sexy,let go someone who want to kill him because she is preety and not because something smart .🤮🤮. Its just my opinion don't be angry author 👌
finally a danmachi fic thats not with hestia or hepeastus familia and the most important thing is its not with bell or babysitting him finally a danmachi fic thats not with hestia or hepeastus familia and the most important thing is its not with bell or babysitting him
This story is honestly amazing i like how you make the system not all quest and he needs to train cuz I'm extremely bored with system that just controls the player and gives a ton of quest and it's a lot realistic cuz sometimes they make the items so cheap that it's laughable and you could make a inosuke template at season 1 max and then maybe after maxing it out you can make it that you need more points to upgrade it to like entertainment district arc inosuke this could also be used for other characters like Goku and it would start at kid Goku then teen Goku the Saiyan saga but it would be extremely from kid to teen etc
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author said they are taking a break cause they have a lot of homework for the winter but hasn't updated for 8 months which is kinda sad I liked this