My Shameless Wife

Writing could use a polish. Quite a few grammatical errors and some questionable word choices at times. I feel like this novel could also benefit from showing instead of telling us about key events. The writing is very fast paced and to the point, so if that's something you enjoy then that will be a positive for you. Personally, I rather experience things along with the MC as it helps me become immersed and care about the characters. Also, if you like ridiculously OP MCs then this story has you covered! Personally, she feels a bit too OP to me. It would feel more balanced if we had experienced some of her struggles beforehand. But we really only have the end result who can basically do anything, which means there's nothing to actually oppose or challenge her; no real danger. Another thing that could use a polish is the dialogue as it can feel unnatural and not how people would normally speak. To the point of giving narrative exposition or even repeating narrative exposition, which feels robotic.

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Hey guys author here , just as my main character I am shameless but love writing hope for some support also give me ideas to write just a title is fine . I can get ideas on what to write just by title . thank you for the support[img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend]

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