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The grammar is bad readable and understandable but bad. He/She, She/He. The main character seems to has a bipolar disorder, one moment he is good next he is extremely cruel and crazed somewhat. He hates interaction and some of those are unrealistic. I still read it because it has a good premise. There is a lot of things i like in this but story development is still early to say more.
Harry Potter and DXD as main with extra cossovers gives this novel a lot of potential in how to develop the story. so far 20 chaps with the gammer that could be improved. other that this keep it up author :)
Good story but grammar needs work. I was thinking about Urie’s recent “issues” beginning to unfold, so I went back to look at Kaneki’s transformation. Basically I’m looking at what injuries probably occurred when Rize stabbed through Kaneki’s abdomen and possibly why he had stronger ghoul “symptoms” (like not being able to eat human food) when his RC cell counts were still under that of certain Quinx. If you have been reading Tokyo Ghoul for a while you might already know but there were some strange (or at least unexplained) things about Kaneki’s descent into “ghouldom” First of all while we are told that high RC levels are the major factor in half-ghoul’s being about to eat human food or not however while in the hospital when he was already having issues with human food. This was despite the fact that Kaneki’s RC cell level while in the hospital was only 911, which was below “ghoul levels” of 1000+ and below Shirazu’s RC cell level of 920 and we all saw multiple examples of Shirazu eating happily and boisterously throughout Tokyo Ghoul :RE. Possibility #1: Biology This could possibly be because of Kaneki’s base RC-cell levels. While we don’t know what the base number for the quinx were we do know Kaneki’s RC cell counts were a full 30 points below healthy human low limits. (almost triple the twins which were only 9 and 11 points lower than normal. Kaneki’s low RC cell levels could have been a sign of ill health for some unknown reason (maybe Kaneki’s mother didn’t actually die of exhaustion maybe there was some non violent reason Kaneki’s dad died when he was so young). But possibly they could just mean there was some twist of Kaneki’s biology. Making the “normal” range lower and thus the higher range lower as well. (So if 170 was “normal” and equivalent to 200 there is a possibility that Kaneki’s 911 was more like 941, which is still below “ghoul” levels, but higher than any Quinx). OR may be the low RC count was just a sign of some deeper biological difference that made him more susceptible to becoming a ghoul. Something ghoulish maybe? Because it’s theorized full ghoul’s might not produce RC cells and only absorb them from what they eat. (semi-realistic organ images and rambling under the cut) Possibility #2: Trauma & Healing Looking at Kaneki’s initial wounds it’s clear there was some serious damage to his abdomen when Rize stabbed him. Rize’s kagune seeming ly went straight through him either through and through on the left side or diagonally entering on the right side and exiting on the left. Plus he was picked up by his injury and slammed into a wall. Either way there would have probably been massive injuries to organs that didn’t slip out of the way. I wouldn’t be surprise if one of Kaneki’s kidney’s actually were obliterated. In fact while Kaneki was (lied to) told that he received a kidney from Rize there is a possiblity that Kaneki actually did receive a kidney and possibly other organs from Rize besides a Kakuhou seeing as it seems during and after the surgery that Kaneki received organs plural from Rize. So maybe it was reported he received one organ when he actually received multiple ones. Because maybe the press were told he had some other organ transplanted besides a kidney because I think Kaneki could figure out losing a kidney wasn’t immediately life or death. (Or would losing a kidney be life or death? I know people can live with only one working kidney, or go without functioning kidneys for a little while if they have dialysis if Kaneki for some unknown reason only had one working kidney {maybe something to do with that is the reason he had unhealthy low levels of RC cells}, because unless both kidneys were destroyed why did he need a new one? Is it a bleeding thing? They had to re-attach they large about of arteries around the kidney to something? I don’t know.I’m not a doctor) In any case my point is there was probably a large amount of damage that had to be healed with organs directly involved with digestion. Anything could have been damaged from the stomach, to the large and small intestines and pancreas. Would Kaneki have even survived without a kakuhou to heal the damage? Knowing how RC pathways spread with injury, and how Kaneki’s stomach became ghoul like un-damageable before other parts of his body. Is it possible that as Kaneki’s guts healed they became more and more ghoul like? Looking at his injuries it’s possible his stomach was injured seeing as he started coughing up blood after being stabbed (though that could have been for manga effect) and Rize did say she was “Scratching around your stomach” so it could be implied. We do know for a fact that Kaneki’s intestines were part of the injuries as noted by the doctors. (Shifted can also be used to describe the dangerous twisting of intestines from what I’ve read, and that can lead to cell death of the twisted portions). Then of Course most interesting to me at least I wonder if his pancreas was involved in the injury. because honestly where it is it could be. Here’s why. In a normal healthy person the pancreas produces the enzyme insulin which turns the carbohydrates in your body into usable sugars for energy and such forth (if your body doesn’t produce insulin enough, at all, or properly you’re a diabetic. And if your body creates no insulin in a lot of cases if you aren’t taking insulin you can either get sick from the built up sugars or eventually die from your body not getting energy and/or liver poisons building up from excess sugars). I wonder if the enzymes that make ghoul’s unable to process human food are at all similar, maybe whatever their bodies uses instead come from the pancreas (though possibly the kakuhou) and only allows them to process human and ghoul. Possibility #3: Purposeful Meddling The way Kanou talked about the stomach’s RC cell limit made it sound like it was something that had to be gradually increased over time. So maybe Kanou while Kaneki was still recovering was gradually introducing more and more RC cells into Kaneki’s diet before he was well and healed enough to begin eating solid food. (possibly using RC suppressants to further control the change). Because after that serious injury to the abdomen, there is no way a doctor would straight away let a patient eat solid food, and it’s not like a patient is going to question what’s in the weird liquid or slurried nutrients you would give them. (This could also mean Kaneki technically ate human a lot earlier than he thought and would explain why it took so long for him to suffer ghoul “hunger” after such a serious injury and ghoulification that would have taken a huge about of energy to recover from). Also it would explain what Kanou said about the Quinx, There was no need to regulation the increase of RC cells or guess how quickly to do it, and a lot less risk, because the Quinque steel box keeps the process gradual. Edit: Because someone felt the need to insult me when they didn’t understand something. Here’s the thing, as frames are released more RC cells escape same as what you’d need for successful ghoulification. The regulator processes that limit the kakuhou in the quinx would be an excellent way to slowing adjust kakuhou to a human body. Which is why knowing how the frame system works is important to Kanou.The point of the steel box is to limit contact between thte kakuhou and the human body, while in the quinx it’s used to yes suppress the kakuhou while still allowing enough interaction to raise RC levels enough to heal the body, and allow enough interaction to make the kagune usable. No ghoulification and the Quinx surgery are not that different at all, one is just a limited version of the other. Also while the quinx surgery is meant to keep the process from going to far clearly with what’s happening with Urie an could happen with other Quinx if used even without alteration a certain way, the frames can be used to gradually change a person into a ghoul.
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5 stars to cheer author.... obviously it isnt as good as it can be since it is an harem. Dont know why there are a romance tag and an harem tag toghether.... there cant be romance in harems
The grammar is bad readable and understandable but bad. He/She, She/He. The main character seems to has a bipolar disorder, one moment he is good next he is extremely cruel and crazed somewhat. He hates interaction and some of those are unrealistic. I still read it because it has a good premise. There is a lot of things i like in this but story development is still early to say more.
Harry Potter and DXD as main with extra cossovers gives this novel a lot of potential in how to develop the story. so far 20 chaps with the gammer that could be improved. other that this keep it up author :)
Good story but grammar needs work. I was thinking about Urie’s recent “issues” beginning to unfold, so I went back to look at Kaneki’s transformation. Basically I’m looking at what injuries probably occurred when Rize stabbed through Kaneki’s abdomen and possibly why he had stronger ghoul “symptoms” (like not being able to eat human food) when his RC cell counts were still under that of certain Quinx. If you have been reading Tokyo Ghoul for a while you might already know but there were some strange (or at least unexplained) things about Kaneki’s descent into “ghouldom” First of all while we are told that high RC levels are the major factor in half-ghoul’s being about to eat human food or not however while in the hospital when he was already having issues with human food. This was despite the fact that Kaneki’s RC cell level while in the hospital was only 911, which was below “ghoul levels” of 1000+ and below Shirazu’s RC cell level of 920 and we all saw multiple examples of Shirazu eating happily and boisterously throughout Tokyo Ghoul :RE. Possibility #1: Biology This could possibly be because of Kaneki’s base RC-cell levels. While we don’t know what the base number for the quinx were we do know Kaneki’s RC cell counts were a full 30 points below healthy human low limits. (almost triple the twins which were only 9 and 11 points lower than normal. Kaneki’s low RC cell levels could have been a sign of ill health for some unknown reason (maybe Kaneki’s mother didn’t actually die of exhaustion maybe there was some non violent reason Kaneki’s dad died when he was so young). But possibly they could just mean there was some twist of Kaneki’s biology. Making the “normal” range lower and thus the higher range lower as well. (So if 170 was “normal” and equivalent to 200 there is a possibility that Kaneki’s 911 was more like 941, which is still below “ghoul” levels, but higher than any Quinx). OR may be the low RC count was just a sign of some deeper biological difference that made him more susceptible to becoming a ghoul. Something ghoulish maybe? Because it’s theorized full ghoul’s might not produce RC cells and only absorb them from what they eat. (semi-realistic organ images and rambling under the cut) Possibility #2: Trauma & Healing Looking at Kaneki’s initial wounds it’s clear there was some serious damage to his abdomen when Rize stabbed him. Rize’s kagune seeming ly went straight through him either through and through on the left side or diagonally entering on the right side and exiting on the left. Plus he was picked up by his injury and slammed into a wall. Either way there would have probably been massive injuries to organs that didn’t slip out of the way. I wouldn’t be surprise if one of Kaneki’s kidney’s actually were obliterated. In fact while Kaneki was (lied to) told that he received a kidney from Rize there is a possiblity that Kaneki actually did receive a kidney and possibly other organs from Rize besides a Kakuhou seeing as it seems during and after the surgery that Kaneki received organs plural from Rize. So maybe it was reported he received one organ when he actually received multiple ones. Because maybe the press were told he had some other organ transplanted besides a kidney because I think Kaneki could figure out losing a kidney wasn’t immediately life or death. (Or would losing a kidney be life or death? I know people can live with only one working kidney, or go without functioning kidneys for a little while if they have dialysis if Kaneki for some unknown reason only had one working kidney {maybe something to do with that is the reason he had unhealthy low levels of RC cells}, because unless both kidneys were destroyed why did he need a new one? Is it a bleeding thing? They had to re-attach they large about of arteries around the kidney to something? I don’t know.I’m not a doctor) In any case my point is there was probably a large amount of damage that had to be healed with organs directly involved with digestion. Anything could have been damaged from the stomach, to the large and small intestines and pancreas. Would Kaneki have even survived without a kakuhou to heal the damage? Knowing how RC pathways spread with injury, and how Kaneki’s stomach became ghoul like un-damageable before other parts of his body. Is it possible that as Kaneki’s guts healed they became more and more ghoul like? Looking at his injuries it’s possible his stomach was injured seeing as he started coughing up blood after being stabbed (though that could have been for manga effect) and Rize did say she was “Scratching around your stomach” so it could be implied. We do know for a fact that Kaneki’s intestines were part of the injuries as noted by the doctors. (Shifted can also be used to describe the dangerous twisting of intestines from what I’ve read, and that can lead to cell death of the twisted portions). Then of Course most interesting to me at least I wonder if his pancreas was involved in the injury. because honestly where it is it could be. Here’s why. In a normal healthy person the pancreas produces the enzyme insulin which turns the carbohydrates in your body into usable sugars for energy and such forth (if your body doesn’t produce insulin enough, at all, or properly you’re a diabetic. And if your body creates no insulin in a lot of cases if you aren’t taking insulin you can either get sick from the built up sugars or eventually die from your body not getting energy and/or liver poisons building up from excess sugars). I wonder if the enzymes that make ghoul’s unable to process human food are at all similar, maybe whatever their bodies uses instead come from the pancreas (though possibly the kakuhou) and only allows them to process human and ghoul. Possibility #3: Purposeful Meddling The way Kanou talked about the stomach’s RC cell limit made it sound like it was something that had to be gradually increased over time. So maybe Kanou while Kaneki was still recovering was gradually introducing more and more RC cells into Kaneki’s diet before he was well and healed enough to begin eating solid food. (possibly using RC suppressants to further control the change). Because after that serious injury to the abdomen, there is no way a doctor would straight away let a patient eat solid food, and it’s not like a patient is going to question what’s in the weird liquid or slurried nutrients you would give them. (This could also mean Kaneki technically ate human a lot earlier than he thought and would explain why it took so long for him to suffer ghoul “hunger” after such a serious injury and ghoulification that would have taken a huge about of energy to recover from). Also it would explain what Kanou said about the Quinx, There was no need to regulation the increase of RC cells or guess how quickly to do it, and a lot less risk, because the Quinque steel box keeps the process gradual. Edit: Because someone felt the need to insult me when they didn’t understand something. Here’s the thing, as frames are released more RC cells escape same as what you’d need for successful ghoulification. The regulator processes that limit the kakuhou in the quinx would be an excellent way to slowing adjust kakuhou to a human body. Which is why knowing how the frame system works is important to Kanou.The point of the steel box is to limit contact between thte kakuhou and the human body, while in the quinx it’s used to yes suppress the kakuhou while still allowing enough interaction to raise RC levels enough to heal the body, and allow enough interaction to make the kagune usable. No ghoulification and the Quinx surgery are not that different at all, one is just a limited version of the other. Also while the quinx surgery is meant to keep the process from going to far clearly with what’s happening with Urie an could happen with other Quinx if used even without alteration a certain way, the frames can be used to gradually change a person into a ghoul.
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5 stars to cheer author.... obviously it isnt as good as it can be since it is an harem. Dont know why there are a romance tag and an harem tag toghether.... there cant be romance in harems