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This is amazing, I’m absolutely loving this and it’s quickly become one of my favorites. I have zero complaints except for grammar and I don’t even really care about that. Can’t wait to see where the story goes, excited for the next chapter!
read 40s chap , i like this kind of novel, in some area its become repetitive story thats whats the slow paced novel problem is, i like the mc act like a normal people , easy to read, im bored of those arogant novel, so this one is fresh novel for me , i will read some more-
I would rather stay away from a story that starts with a system calling its host a trash. What is the point of having a system that is going to disrespect its host. Why did the system even choose the host if he was trash to begin with. I really hate the idea of a system giving its host attitude.
author should do something about mage's casting time.... it takes 2 minutes -3 minutes just to cast some spells and In superhuman battels just 1 sec time intervals can change the direction of battle
I wanted to give this novel a try , but after five chapters , the grammar was unbearably bad. Even though it said that it was edited, it was still horrendous to read. And I can only imagine how bad it was before the edit. I skipped ahead to chapter 89. Which I think is the last free one? Just to see if the grammar got a better and I saw zero improvement. From what I did manage to trudge through it seemed like a really interesting novel but I cannot deal with the grammar so I had to stop reading it .Author you have a pretty good idea on your hands. I just hope that when you finish it You go back through and proof freed and edit the entire novel
To be honest, this novel is not bad, but it is not good either, it kinda average.. From Ch1 until Ch370, the MC grow is quite slow ( F-rank to D-rank).. Then, from Ch400 until Ch470, MC grow suddenly becomes soooo fast (C-rank to SSS-rank).. After that, MC grows become slow again.. MC is the only one have system, but everyone else can also grow their rank.. You might think SSS-rank is the highest, but it is not.. There Mortal grade (F-rank to D-rank), Special grade (C-rank to A-rank), Elite grade (S-rank to SSS-rank), Epic grade (SSS+-rank to SRR-rank), Planetary grade (RRR-rank to UR-rank), Legendary grade (EX-rank) and so on.. If you are someone like me who loves OP MC, you might be frustrated by the slowness of the MC grow.. Well, you need to wait until Ch.400 to see MC fast grow. I'm not sure if you are willing to read that far.. Well, even when MC is in lower rank/grade, he has higher skill rank (ex: when MC is E-rank, most his skill are C-rank or when MC is D-rank, his skill are B-rank).. But now, when MC rank got higher, his skill barely increase in rank (ex: when MC is S-rank, most his skill is STILL IN B-rank or when MC is in Planetary rank, most his skill is just A-rank).. MC skills barely grow as he gets stronger..
Story OK. To be fair the author did say its his first novel and he isn't a native English speaker. And it shows. Badly. I've dropped it. I rarely drop books just because of writing quality but I couldn't continue.This was as bad as mtl. The bad ones. BUT if you can handle mtl or are not a native speaker then this isn't really a problem. As this was also the authors first work, other problems such as story pacing, character progression, character interaction and behaviour all needs work. Theres a lot of telling and very little showing. This comes with practice, time and experience.My advise to the author as simply a fan of light novels is to read more well written English novels. Not translated, but actual English novels. You'll pick up a lot and it'll help you construct your novels better in tbe future.For anyone who read all this and want an actual review.. Transmigration story where male MC gets into modern world with monsters. System makes him cultivate stronger. For once the original body isn't some begger or poor son which is actually refreshing. It's why I think this author with some work and experience can actually write a good novel in the future.
The plot has potential but it's too hard to move throught the story with that dumb story. There's a few things that just doesn't make sense except dummy. First you learn about dungeon and monsters before getting inside a dungeon (if the author wishes to avoid info dump just say he did look into it and give us info throught the story when it gets relevant). Second.. It doesn't take more than one brain cell to know that upgrade points are easy to acquire at first but could later on get harder to get. So create a safety net for yourself (a real one and not one the author just add awkwardly). Lately, I don't get why he is so calm and composed when all this happens to him. He even accept total strangers as his parents (even more so when he took over their DEAD son's body)...Ps : different body structure, different body language and different way of acting.. Let's be honest if they don't find anything suspicious then don't paint them as great parents...
Deleted my original review as I owed it to the author to give a better review. The idea is actually a good one. The story starts off slow and the premise was promising until half the chapters are just a copy paste of the mc status. Author could describe fights better, and not describe how the MC eats, sleeps and trains, repeat, rinse, repeat, new content, rinse, repeat. I had to stop after 43 chapters when there was more repeat filler than story. I had high hopes and hope the author was able to correct the issues later on. I respect anyone who puts their content out there for others to judge. Kudos author for putting out a new idea, and I liked the idea.
It's a nice story, but because of the repeated things like <i>Going to fresh up</i> or <i>Going to eat</i> it feels like we are not reading a story but his daily schedule and telling everything like he's doing now this or that won't do any good to progress of the story line. We already know that he fresh up and eats after every training but you don't have to write it again and again. Story's plot is good so please keep updating.
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Needs to be edited and English needs to be fixed. Each line is so difficult to read
This novel is kind like mtl novel, is not that bad but don't expect too much. If you want to refresh your brain with some brain dead novel you can try this
In all honesty, I want to like this novel a lot more than I do, I love the concept where there's a tangible way for people to become stronger and it's reasonably fair. Writing Quality 1/5: As the author mentioned before, it's not great, I'm going to leave it there. I'm not out to hurt people's feelings. For the sake of this being a review, I'll say it needs work, and the author has stated he's working on it. Story Development 3/5: For my taste, there's a lot of work count padding through repetitive paragraphs, which doesn't help the general story, a lot of contradictions within paragraphs, and just general long-winded texts, using 100 words to say something as simple as, he shot 10 guys with his arrows and the 2 strongest dodged. None of these things are a big deal. There's just a lot of it, and sometimes a lot of it, very close together. Character Design 3/5: I like the characters in the story for the most part. Although none of the characters seem to really get fleshed out very well, I'm currently 230 chapters in, and we know of about 25 people in the story in total. That's MC his 3 immediate relatives and his teacher and classmates and general big names in their world, that's it. Updating Stability 5/5: I recently started reading this novel, and I haven't made it to the end of current chapters. I don't know, so therefore, full marks. World Background 3/5: Like the characters, it hasn't really been fleshed out so far, or at all honestly, we know of 5 cities, iirc, and that's about it.
I'll be completely honest here, I want to like this novel a lot more than I currently do. Writing quality: honestly leaves a lot to be desired, grammar is at times terrible. This wouldn't matter as much if it wasn't for the rampant inconsistency of information given out throughout the story. Story development: is very, very slow, again not a big deal, but the constant changing of basic information given out makes it very hard to follow and quite frankly quite tedious to read at times. Character design: I think the concept is good, and I really appreciate that the mc has for lack of a better word "normal" family life. But there's little to no interaction with others so far(50 chapters in, and we can count the people he's spoken to enough to warrant actual conversation text on 1 hand). Updating stability: I've given this full marks since I'm only 50 chapters in, and I don't know. World Background: Again I love the concept, I really do. I always appreciate a good system and the fact that there's a system for everyone not just mc (albeit not as extensive as the MCs but skills and rating exist for all as well as stones to absorb etc.)
The concept behind the story itself is good. But the mc is shown practically as machine whose only job is to eat, sleep, train and dungeon run.. and close to no human interaction. Writing quality is average to say the least as many grammatical mistakes and wrong usage to words can be seen. well, for story development there is nothing of a story only a sort summary of his background and what is now then he just goes around training and dungeon running with no human or world interaction... Character design. . . well, at least the characters that author had given importance to are well described and designed but later in story i got the feeling that the story is all about mc dungeon running with no outside interaction. update stability.. .i don't know about this... World background well, it is well described but as we progress only mc's home, motel and dungeon becomes readers world because nothing is told or happens with mc in relation to that. So in short if you want to read a novel where mc just focuses on getting stronger with nothing else in mind then go ahead. (well, after many chapters some world opening happens with mc but still it can be considered negligible interaction with outer world)
it's a good book but the repetitive information is annoying. I. almost every chapter you see his status information which takes up a large chunk of the reading and writing and you have his abilities explained again. some explanation helps move the story along but it makes it boring when it'd the same info over and over again. also I appreciate it's being translated but the translation is very rough.
Like the novel just can’t get past the grammatical errors. It really messes with the flow of the novel
So far the story is good. The only problem I have is that I can almost memorize the status panel. I have no problem with grammar it is ok for me but every chapter the author put the status and the skill description everysingle time. This is a good novel if you can bear it.
i am not sure whether its the translation or what, but there are inconsistencies in the beginning (i couldn't get pass the beginning). for example, the mc suddenly stop going to school with no repercussions, he giving his name just after donning the mask to be low key...
As a fan of many authors, and with the respect I have for those who work hard to make their novels readable, I say now that this novel is very unreadable, the author hasn’t bothered to understand how to use the English language properly when writing. Errors everywhere. For those of you who keep up with this l.n. Props to you, you’re seriously a different breed. But for the author I say, read English literature, don’t stick to reading light novels all the time, because in the long run you won’t improve your English writing if you don’t have a solid grasp on the writing technique. Also read English dictionaries. And do free English lessons using an app or the internet. I can tell you’re young so you have a lot of potential. This novel is truly just your start and I hope your writing technique on your next ones will be so good they can’t even be compared to this one. Alright that’s all I wanted to say. And as a brother this novel is trash get better at writing in English bro.🤙
I like the background, how the world is build. The characters are a bit bland, but I have read worst. The writing is really bad, but like you said English is not your first language ( me neither) and I understand that. I hope you can continue to improve yourself. But I can’t accept one thing, you put a paywall with this writing quality ? …
like jisoo meme: it is good but not that good.. for me everythinh good but what i dont like is, this story kind of fast but to slow too.. what make it slow is it was like we reading mc journal.. what time he wake up, how long he's training, how many times he taking a bath.. for grammar, well sometime i have a headache reading this.. but i dont care because my english isnt good too.. lol
It's a good novel, it obviously has grammar errors but if you follow the dao of poison this is nothing so read it and support this cool author
Overall a decent novel but a lot of stuff repeats and the author has fairly bad grammar though I’ve seen worse. The story gets repetitive and the small upgrade system seems like it is anything but small.
I love the story but it desperatly needs a rewrite. All the flaws makes it a tough reading experience. Still I find the story enganging and to my taste. Thank you! (please rewrite!)
could be much better I'm on chapter 41 and so far I can say half of it was meta data you can literally fill in 7 chapters with nothing but how much the mc eats the same could be said about his training and sadly can't be skipped because important bits are mixed in with the boring bits you could have gotten the same info just by putting he dose his usual routine every morning or skipping days in general
Giving this five-star review, so that Author didn't get demotivated. I hope he will Edit all the chapters. Still, the story of this novel is good, it just needed some editing.
First of all props for putting your story out there takes hard work to do that. now saying that , the story feels like it needs some major editing and proof reading. some of the sentences just dont make sense so wilr i say cheers for your work and story ideas, ima bow out on reading more of this. salute
interesting concept but falls a bit short. I ended up just skimming the chapters at some point since there are a lot of repetetive "he freshend up, ate, and went to sleep. woke up and trained.." repeating. and it is to slow paced for my taste. dropped when I felt it had been aged since he progressed in any meaningful way and I looked ahead seeing there were still like 30 chapters until his next breakthrough.
if the grammar is fixed then the stars i give go way up. it's a basic premise but it's still not a bad read. the only realt put-off is the grammar.
Hi, the author here. It's my first novel guys. I am pretty inexperienced about but I will try to become better at this. I hope you will enjoy this novel.
This is amazing, I’m absolutely loving this and it’s quickly become one of my favorites. I have zero complaints except for grammar and I don’t even really care about that. Can’t wait to see where the story goes, excited for the next chapter!
read 40s chap , i like this kind of novel, in some area its become repetitive story thats whats the slow paced novel problem is, i like the mc act like a normal people , easy to read, im bored of those arogant novel, so this one is fresh novel for me , i will read some more-
I would rather stay away from a story that starts with a system calling its host a trash. What is the point of having a system that is going to disrespect its host. Why did the system even choose the host if he was trash to begin with. I really hate the idea of a system giving its host attitude.
author should do something about mage's casting time.... it takes 2 minutes -3 minutes just to cast some spells and In superhuman battels just 1 sec time intervals can change the direction of battle
I wanted to give this novel a try , but after five chapters , the grammar was unbearably bad. Even though it said that it was edited, it was still horrendous to read. And I can only imagine how bad it was before the edit. I skipped ahead to chapter 89. Which I think is the last free one? Just to see if the grammar got a better and I saw zero improvement. From what I did manage to trudge through it seemed like a really interesting novel but I cannot deal with the grammar so I had to stop reading it .Author you have a pretty good idea on your hands. I just hope that when you finish it You go back through and proof freed and edit the entire novel
To be honest, this novel is not bad, but it is not good either, it kinda average.. From Ch1 until Ch370, the MC grow is quite slow ( F-rank to D-rank).. Then, from Ch400 until Ch470, MC grow suddenly becomes soooo fast (C-rank to SSS-rank).. After that, MC grows become slow again.. MC is the only one have system, but everyone else can also grow their rank.. You might think SSS-rank is the highest, but it is not.. There Mortal grade (F-rank to D-rank), Special grade (C-rank to A-rank), Elite grade (S-rank to SSS-rank), Epic grade (SSS+-rank to SRR-rank), Planetary grade (RRR-rank to UR-rank), Legendary grade (EX-rank) and so on.. If you are someone like me who loves OP MC, you might be frustrated by the slowness of the MC grow.. Well, you need to wait until Ch.400 to see MC fast grow. I'm not sure if you are willing to read that far.. Well, even when MC is in lower rank/grade, he has higher skill rank (ex: when MC is E-rank, most his skill are C-rank or when MC is D-rank, his skill are B-rank).. But now, when MC rank got higher, his skill barely increase in rank (ex: when MC is S-rank, most his skill is STILL IN B-rank or when MC is in Planetary rank, most his skill is just A-rank).. MC skills barely grow as he gets stronger..
Story OK. To be fair the author did say its his first novel and he isn't a native English speaker. And it shows. Badly. I've dropped it. I rarely drop books just because of writing quality but I couldn't continue.This was as bad as mtl. The bad ones. BUT if you can handle mtl or are not a native speaker then this isn't really a problem. As this was also the authors first work, other problems such as story pacing, character progression, character interaction and behaviour all needs work. Theres a lot of telling and very little showing. This comes with practice, time and experience.My advise to the author as simply a fan of light novels is to read more well written English novels. Not translated, but actual English novels. You'll pick up a lot and it'll help you construct your novels better in tbe future.For anyone who read all this and want an actual review.. Transmigration story where male MC gets into modern world with monsters. System makes him cultivate stronger. For once the original body isn't some begger or poor son which is actually refreshing. It's why I think this author with some work and experience can actually write a good novel in the future.
The plot has potential but it's too hard to move throught the story with that dumb story. There's a few things that just doesn't make sense except dummy. First you learn about dungeon and monsters before getting inside a dungeon (if the author wishes to avoid info dump just say he did look into it and give us info throught the story when it gets relevant). Second.. It doesn't take more than one brain cell to know that upgrade points are easy to acquire at first but could later on get harder to get. So create a safety net for yourself (a real one and not one the author just add awkwardly). Lately, I don't get why he is so calm and composed when all this happens to him. He even accept total strangers as his parents (even more so when he took over their DEAD son's body)...Ps : different body structure, different body language and different way of acting.. Let's be honest if they don't find anything suspicious then don't paint them as great parents...
Deleted my original review as I owed it to the author to give a better review. The idea is actually a good one. The story starts off slow and the premise was promising until half the chapters are just a copy paste of the mc status. Author could describe fights better, and not describe how the MC eats, sleeps and trains, repeat, rinse, repeat, new content, rinse, repeat. I had to stop after 43 chapters when there was more repeat filler than story. I had high hopes and hope the author was able to correct the issues later on. I respect anyone who puts their content out there for others to judge. Kudos author for putting out a new idea, and I liked the idea.
It's a nice story, but because of the repeated things like <i>Going to fresh up</i> or <i>Going to eat</i> it feels like we are not reading a story but his daily schedule and telling everything like he's doing now this or that won't do any good to progress of the story line. We already know that he fresh up and eats after every training but you don't have to write it again and again. Story's plot is good so please keep updating.
Revelar Spoiler Needs to be edited and English needs to be fixed. Each line is so difficult to read
This novel is kind like mtl novel, is not that bad but don't expect too much. If you want to refresh your brain with some brain dead novel you can try this
In all honesty, I want to like this novel a lot more than I do, I love the concept where there's a tangible way for people to become stronger and it's reasonably fair. Writing Quality 1/5: As the author mentioned before, it's not great, I'm going to leave it there. I'm not out to hurt people's feelings. For the sake of this being a review, I'll say it needs work, and the author has stated he's working on it. Story Development 3/5: For my taste, there's a lot of work count padding through repetitive paragraphs, which doesn't help the general story, a lot of contradictions within paragraphs, and just general long-winded texts, using 100 words to say something as simple as, he shot 10 guys with his arrows and the 2 strongest dodged. None of these things are a big deal. There's just a lot of it, and sometimes a lot of it, very close together. Character Design 3/5: I like the characters in the story for the most part. Although none of the characters seem to really get fleshed out very well, I'm currently 230 chapters in, and we know of about 25 people in the story in total. That's MC his 3 immediate relatives and his teacher and classmates and general big names in their world, that's it. Updating Stability 5/5: I recently started reading this novel, and I haven't made it to the end of current chapters. I don't know, so therefore, full marks. World Background 3/5: Like the characters, it hasn't really been fleshed out so far, or at all honestly, we know of 5 cities, iirc, and that's about it.
I'll be completely honest here, I want to like this novel a lot more than I currently do. Writing quality: honestly leaves a lot to be desired, grammar is at times terrible. This wouldn't matter as much if it wasn't for the rampant inconsistency of information given out throughout the story. Story development: is very, very slow, again not a big deal, but the constant changing of basic information given out makes it very hard to follow and quite frankly quite tedious to read at times. Character design: I think the concept is good, and I really appreciate that the mc has for lack of a better word "normal" family life. But there's little to no interaction with others so far(50 chapters in, and we can count the people he's spoken to enough to warrant actual conversation text on 1 hand). Updating stability: I've given this full marks since I'm only 50 chapters in, and I don't know. World Background: Again I love the concept, I really do. I always appreciate a good system and the fact that there's a system for everyone not just mc (albeit not as extensive as the MCs but skills and rating exist for all as well as stones to absorb etc.)
The concept behind the story itself is good. But the mc is shown practically as machine whose only job is to eat, sleep, train and dungeon run.. and close to no human interaction. Writing quality is average to say the least as many grammatical mistakes and wrong usage to words can be seen. well, for story development there is nothing of a story only a sort summary of his background and what is now then he just goes around training and dungeon running with no human or world interaction... Character design. . . well, at least the characters that author had given importance to are well described and designed but later in story i got the feeling that the story is all about mc dungeon running with no outside interaction. update stability.. .i don't know about this... World background well, it is well described but as we progress only mc's home, motel and dungeon becomes readers world because nothing is told or happens with mc in relation to that. So in short if you want to read a novel where mc just focuses on getting stronger with nothing else in mind then go ahead. (well, after many chapters some world opening happens with mc but still it can be considered negligible interaction with outer world)
it's a good book but the repetitive information is annoying. I. almost every chapter you see his status information which takes up a large chunk of the reading and writing and you have his abilities explained again. some explanation helps move the story along but it makes it boring when it'd the same info over and over again. also I appreciate it's being translated but the translation is very rough.
Like the novel just can’t get past the grammatical errors. It really messes with the flow of the novel
So far the story is good. The only problem I have is that I can almost memorize the status panel. I have no problem with grammar it is ok for me but every chapter the author put the status and the skill description everysingle time. This is a good novel if you can bear it.
i am not sure whether its the translation or what, but there are inconsistencies in the beginning (i couldn't get pass the beginning). for example, the mc suddenly stop going to school with no repercussions, he giving his name just after donning the mask to be low key...
As a fan of many authors, and with the respect I have for those who work hard to make their novels readable, I say now that this novel is very unreadable, the author hasn’t bothered to understand how to use the English language properly when writing. Errors everywhere. For those of you who keep up with this l.n. Props to you, you’re seriously a different breed. But for the author I say, read English literature, don’t stick to reading light novels all the time, because in the long run you won’t improve your English writing if you don’t have a solid grasp on the writing technique. Also read English dictionaries. And do free English lessons using an app or the internet. I can tell you’re young so you have a lot of potential. This novel is truly just your start and I hope your writing technique on your next ones will be so good they can’t even be compared to this one. Alright that’s all I wanted to say. And as a brother this novel is trash get better at writing in English bro.🤙
I like the background, how the world is build. The characters are a bit bland, but I have read worst. The writing is really bad, but like you said English is not your first language ( me neither) and I understand that. I hope you can continue to improve yourself. But I can’t accept one thing, you put a paywall with this writing quality ? …
like jisoo meme: it is good but not that good.. for me everythinh good but what i dont like is, this story kind of fast but to slow too.. what make it slow is it was like we reading mc journal.. what time he wake up, how long he's training, how many times he taking a bath.. for grammar, well sometime i have a headache reading this.. but i dont care because my english isnt good too.. lol
It's a good novel, it obviously has grammar errors but if you follow the dao of poison this is nothing so read it and support this cool author
Overall a decent novel but a lot of stuff repeats and the author has fairly bad grammar though I’ve seen worse. The story gets repetitive and the small upgrade system seems like it is anything but small.
I love the story but it desperatly needs a rewrite. All the flaws makes it a tough reading experience. Still I find the story enganging and to my taste. Thank you! (please rewrite!)
could be much better I'm on chapter 41 and so far I can say half of it was meta data you can literally fill in 7 chapters with nothing but how much the mc eats the same could be said about his training and sadly can't be skipped because important bits are mixed in with the boring bits you could have gotten the same info just by putting he dose his usual routine every morning or skipping days in general
Giving this five-star review, so that Author didn't get demotivated. I hope he will Edit all the chapters. Still, the story of this novel is good, it just needed some editing.
First of all props for putting your story out there takes hard work to do that. now saying that , the story feels like it needs some major editing and proof reading. some of the sentences just dont make sense so wilr i say cheers for your work and story ideas, ima bow out on reading more of this. salute
interesting concept but falls a bit short. I ended up just skimming the chapters at some point since there are a lot of repetetive "he freshend up, ate, and went to sleep. woke up and trained.." repeating. and it is to slow paced for my taste. dropped when I felt it had been aged since he progressed in any meaningful way and I looked ahead seeing there were still like 30 chapters until his next breakthrough.
if the grammar is fixed then the stars i give go way up. it's a basic premise but it's still not a bad read. the only realt put-off is the grammar.
Hi, the author here. It's my first novel guys. I am pretty inexperienced about but I will try to become better at this. I hope you will enjoy this novel.