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Great Work. But have you stopped writing. please update......,..................................................,............ please update
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The author doesn't know how to write in proper English sentences, making it hard to understand what the author is trying to get across. What's really annoying is how the author adds in words they didn't have to in a sentence. also it feels like the story was just randomly putting plot points together in beginning
bro is he gonna end up with your random civilian oc just because tsunades his cousin which doesnt matter since hes reincarnated and didnt grow up with her? plus hes seven so why force fate energy to magically make him like people. everything else is good tho
1.senju tobirama trying kill 4yo MC because mc improve old version kenjutsu... 2. and MC forgive him and said "its not your faults" 3. and guess what, mc is tobirama grandson, and he knew it..... temporary 4/5, .........................................................
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Yah ini sangat bagus tapi menurut saya hanako sgt menggangu kehidupan dan juga energi takdir terlalu mengada ngada tidak relevan terhadap ceritanya jadi ceritanya sedikit kacau
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The story is good but nothing to write home about. He suffers from the syndrome that the MC is a super genius but behaves like someone average throughout the novel. It often happens a lot because very few people can make a genius correctly because the authors are totally average people, in intelligence at least. For the rest, the plot is entertaining but that the improvement of the mc depends so much on the AI is a bit annoying. Otherwise it is fine. Keep up the fanfic.
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if you love 1. Cold MC 2. Researcher MC 3. Chip System 4. OP MC Then this novel is for you ....................................................
.................... ........................................................................................................................ the best
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Fanfic Very promising, I hope it doesn't fall............................................. . Do not fall......................do not fall............................. ................................
The development of the story is good if you ignore some minor things. The only missing in the story is the 'emotion', it feels rathe empty like reading a monologue with robotic intonation. But i am pretty sure that this is fixable. -kudos
llllllllllllllllllllllllllIllllllIlllllllllllllI this Novel gives me holy joker vibes you know ? llllllllllllllllllllllIllllllllllllllIllllI
Honestly, I slightly doubted it at the begining but I like the way its going with him taking a science route similar to the one naruto fanfic which had 92 chapters as of making this. Liking the interactions between characters as well as his bloodline. System is helpful tool for research and improvement but he’s not too relaint on it! Overal I’m loving it and want more chapters :)
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It's a great naruto fanfic with a lot of potential since this era is rarely used, and you can even experiment with it a little bit. Now I have a recommendation for the Love Interest.Since he's a Senju and he is gonna be the Third Hokage, I recommend Tsunade so for "bloodline purity" and so they can keep the power of the Hokage to themselves(The Senju) since no one know he is a senju, and with that, the child could be the 4th or 5th Hokage without the people knowing it's another pure blooded senju. , An Uzumaki for tightening the alliance between Uzio and Konoha. It will definitely provide a strong heir whether be it chakra, kenjutsu, vitality, fuinjutsu, or ninjutsu. An Uchiha to strengthen the loyalty of the Uchiha to konoha, and providing a strong heir with senju vitality, uchiha sharingan, and kenjutsu. Last Option is a leading clan from other villages(least likely) for an alliance.
Hello! there Author here! , I am a senior highschool student average family but when I watch Naruto and anime it makes me feel happy. So I wrote a fanfic during my time in 2 day break hope you enjoy I would try to post at least a chapter a day. Peace out✌️
Well in my humble opinion, of course without offending anyone who thinks differently from my point of view, but also by looking at this matter in a different way and without fighting and by trying to make it clear, and by considering each and everyone's opinion, I honestly believe that I completely forgot what I was going to say.
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Great Work. But have you stopped writing. please update......,..................................................,............ please update
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The author doesn't know how to write in proper English sentences, making it hard to understand what the author is trying to get across. What's really annoying is how the author adds in words they didn't have to in a sentence. also it feels like the story was just randomly putting plot points together in beginning
bro is he gonna end up with your random civilian oc just because tsunades his cousin which doesnt matter since hes reincarnated and didnt grow up with her? plus hes seven so why force fate energy to magically make him like people. everything else is good tho
1.senju tobirama trying kill 4yo MC because mc improve old version kenjutsu... 2. and MC forgive him and said "its not your faults" 3. and guess what, mc is tobirama grandson, and he knew it..... temporary 4/5, .........................................................
Revelar Spoiler Yah ini sangat bagus tapi menurut saya hanako sgt menggangu kehidupan dan juga energi takdir terlalu mengada ngada tidak relevan terhadap ceritanya jadi ceritanya sedikit kacau
Прекрасно👌👌👌👌👌👌👌👌👌👌👌👌👌👌👌👌👌👌👌👌👌👌👌👌👌👌👌👌👌👌👌👌👌👌👌👌👌👌👌👌👌👌👌👌👌👌👌👌👌👌👌👌👌👌👌👌👌👌👌👌👌👌👌👌👌👌👌👌👌👌👌👌👌👌👌👌👌👌👌👌👌👌
The story is good but nothing to write home about. He suffers from the syndrome that the MC is a super genius but behaves like someone average throughout the novel. It often happens a lot because very few people can make a genius correctly because the authors are totally average people, in intelligence at least. For the rest, the plot is entertaining but that the improvement of the mc depends so much on the AI is a bit annoying. Otherwise it is fine. Keep up the fanfic.
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if you love 1. Cold MC 2. Researcher MC 3. Chip System 4. OP MC Then this novel is for you ....................................................
.................... ........................................................................................................................ the best
good one i love it Keep up the good work❤️❤️❤️gggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggg
Fanfic Very promising, I hope it doesn't fall............................................. . Do not fall......................do not fall............................. ................................
The development of the story is good if you ignore some minor things. The only missing in the story is the 'emotion', it feels rathe empty like reading a monologue with robotic intonation. But i am pretty sure that this is fixable. -kudos
llllllllllllllllllllllllllIllllllIlllllllllllllI this Novel gives me holy joker vibes you know ? llllllllllllllllllllllIllllllllllllllIllllI
Honestly, I slightly doubted it at the begining but I like the way its going with him taking a science route similar to the one naruto fanfic which had 92 chapters as of making this. Liking the interactions between characters as well as his bloodline. System is helpful tool for research and improvement but he’s not too relaint on it! Overal I’m loving it and want more chapters :)
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It's a great naruto fanfic with a lot of potential since this era is rarely used, and you can even experiment with it a little bit. Now I have a recommendation for the Love Interest.Since he's a Senju and he is gonna be the Third Hokage, I recommend Tsunade so for "bloodline purity" and so they can keep the power of the Hokage to themselves(The Senju) since no one know he is a senju, and with that, the child could be the 4th or 5th Hokage without the people knowing it's another pure blooded senju. , An Uzumaki for tightening the alliance between Uzio and Konoha. It will definitely provide a strong heir whether be it chakra, kenjutsu, vitality, fuinjutsu, or ninjutsu. An Uchiha to strengthen the loyalty of the Uchiha to konoha, and providing a strong heir with senju vitality, uchiha sharingan, and kenjutsu. Last Option is a leading clan from other villages(least likely) for an alliance.
Hello! there Author here! , I am a senior highschool student average family but when I watch Naruto and anime it makes me feel happy. So I wrote a fanfic during my time in 2 day break hope you enjoy I would try to post at least a chapter a day. Peace out✌️
Well in my humble opinion, of course without offending anyone who thinks differently from my point of view, but also by looking at this matter in a different way and without fighting and by trying to make it clear, and by considering each and everyone's opinion, I honestly believe that I completely forgot what I was going to say.
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