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I'm disappointed in the mc's arrogant attitude and in the author who made the jedi idiots and child abductors - perhaps the author is unaware of the history of the jedi or simply hates them. please tag mc villain, since he is not on the side of good.
i have one problem with this story there are wery litle names what are force guards you could say the name of the ship and personel she has i would give it a 4,5 if nof for this
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🤔 let see hmm well some may say writing is awful but lets question it first 1. is the material has a cost ? , its free btw 2. should it be appreciated , i guess it should be for me that is ( effort and ideas of the writer)3. it isn't a racist or it includes racism in IRL so it still a good material for entertainment plus its free so i give it a 5 star ¯\_(ツ)_/¯ when you pay a book ofc you should criticize but since you didn't don't be silly and harshly criticize
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I read the first chapter and got to the second chapter, until the goddess mentioned that he would get a system and give him anything he wants. Really thought it would be a decent Star wars ff, but sadly not, sigh......
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I didn’t read a ton so this review won’t be too informative, but I’m dropping it so might as well. The story itself isn’t too bad, it’s mostly how bizarrely OP the mc is that irks me (along with some problems with the writing / grammar but not as bad since it’s edited now). After 2-3 chapters the MC already has the ability to use any force ability (with training for some), a completly loyal servant as strong as Yoda, and 9-10 completly loyal servants as strong as Mace Windu, and 20 normal soldiers. That’s only after a few chapters too (I think you’re underestimating Windus strength with having like 10 people on his lvl) But if you like over the top OP mc’s that likley wont struggle (or at least shouldn’t with all the MC has with his system and subordinates) then it could be worth a read for sure
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The guy gets a system, I don't think anything else needs to be said TBH... But I'll go on anyway, the system gives him gear (including a lightsaber) and access to ALL force abilities from the start. So there is no initial struggle for anything making it boring from the start. The system can summon what are essentially slaves for him that are loyal etc... So the MC doesn't have to be written with good social skills and doesn't need to have good qualities as his people will follow him anyway which will take any tension at all out of his future choices. If he wants something he just buys it from the system since it can sell him anything so the MC always gets what they need when they need it (another thing making it boring). There are other things but I don't think it's really necessary to mention them.
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Es una de las historias peor escritas que he leído, llevo más de 10 años leyendo fanfics así que es decir bastante Es obvio que el autor no sabe nada de Star Wars, los diálogos son una porquería y las reflexiones mentales son peores.
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The story has potential, but the writing quality really hampers the ability to enjoy it. The lack of commas, periods, and the size of the paragraphs can make it difficult to follow along.
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it could be a good story if you stop tring to follow the orinal plo. it is ok to have your MC change things up more.
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This is a decent outline for a story. There is very little characterization and what little there is, is contradictory. Dialogue is stiff, impersonal, and scarce. There is little conflict beyond those scenes meant to demonstrate the MC's power and success. There is very little description of settings and imagery is non-existent. tldr; It's a story outline for a power fantasy set in StarWars.
No se puede decir mucho ya que en lo personal me encara la historia aun que mi pregunta que paso con ashoka y cuales miembro de la anterior consejo están vivos y una amenaza que podrías integrar al mundo podría ser el flood.
Love star wars story. I need more chapters)) good luck)) 5 stars for very good novel. More more more more more more more more more more more chapters
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I'm disappointed in the mc's arrogant attitude and in the author who made the jedi idiots and child abductors - perhaps the author is unaware of the history of the jedi or simply hates them. please tag mc villain, since he is not on the side of good.
i have one problem with this story there are wery litle names what are force guards you could say the name of the ship and personel she has i would give it a 4,5 if nof for this
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🤔 let see hmm well some may say writing is awful but lets question it first 1. is the material has a cost ? , its free btw 2. should it be appreciated , i guess it should be for me that is ( effort and ideas of the writer)3. it isn't a racist or it includes racism in IRL so it still a good material for entertainment plus its free so i give it a 5 star ¯\_(ツ)_/¯ when you pay a book ofc you should criticize but since you didn't don't be silly and harshly criticize
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I read the first chapter and got to the second chapter, until the goddess mentioned that he would get a system and give him anything he wants. Really thought it would be a decent Star wars ff, but sadly not, sigh......
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I didn’t read a ton so this review won’t be too informative, but I’m dropping it so might as well. The story itself isn’t too bad, it’s mostly how bizarrely OP the mc is that irks me (along with some problems with the writing / grammar but not as bad since it’s edited now). After 2-3 chapters the MC already has the ability to use any force ability (with training for some), a completly loyal servant as strong as Yoda, and 9-10 completly loyal servants as strong as Mace Windu, and 20 normal soldiers. That’s only after a few chapters too (I think you’re underestimating Windus strength with having like 10 people on his lvl) But if you like over the top OP mc’s that likley wont struggle (or at least shouldn’t with all the MC has with his system and subordinates) then it could be worth a read for sure
Revelar Spoiler ✨really good novel with good story and good writing quality.i hope the author will continue this story.Overall it's a very good story with good qualities.The star wars fan will like it more.✨
The guy gets a system, I don't think anything else needs to be said TBH... But I'll go on anyway, the system gives him gear (including a lightsaber) and access to ALL force abilities from the start. So there is no initial struggle for anything making it boring from the start. The system can summon what are essentially slaves for him that are loyal etc... So the MC doesn't have to be written with good social skills and doesn't need to have good qualities as his people will follow him anyway which will take any tension at all out of his future choices. If he wants something he just buys it from the system since it can sell him anything so the MC always gets what they need when they need it (another thing making it boring). There are other things but I don't think it's really necessary to mention them.
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Es una de las historias peor escritas que he leído, llevo más de 10 años leyendo fanfics así que es decir bastante Es obvio que el autor no sabe nada de Star Wars, los diálogos son una porquería y las reflexiones mentales son peores.
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The story has potential, but the writing quality really hampers the ability to enjoy it. The lack of commas, periods, and the size of the paragraphs can make it difficult to follow along.
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it could be a good story if you stop tring to follow the orinal plo. it is ok to have your MC change things up more.
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This is a decent outline for a story. There is very little characterization and what little there is, is contradictory. Dialogue is stiff, impersonal, and scarce. There is little conflict beyond those scenes meant to demonstrate the MC's power and success. There is very little description of settings and imagery is non-existent. tldr; It's a story outline for a power fantasy set in StarWars.
No se puede decir mucho ya que en lo personal me encara la historia aun que mi pregunta que paso con ashoka y cuales miembro de la anterior consejo están vivos y una amenaza que podrías integrar al mundo podría ser el flood.
Love star wars story. I need more chapters)) good luck)) 5 stars for very good novel. More more more more more more more more more more more chapters
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