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I like the story but why the MC is too good , I mean when she was treated like trash for over 5-6 years . She still had the idea of protecting the Leaf deep down due to influence of Naruto's path and the future . Seeing her like that, I can already guess that , she'll forgive the village in the later episodes and will spare them .
Really looking forward to this. The story has such potential for an evil mc and I hope this is continued. I want her to come back and fight against the main cast.
(my English is not very good, because I'm from Russia.) This work makes me very happy with its unusual beginning. I hope further everything does not turn into another: "I am afraid of the future, so I will help Naruto for the sake of a cannon plot" or something like that. Just hope this is not another fan-fic where everything is done for Naruto or cannon preservation. In general, we are waiting for the ORIGINAL storyline, go for it and I'm sure this work will become very popular ;-)
So I love this whole a*s concept in general and if you ever drop this I would probably continue a story similar this and since when I am writing this there is only 1 chapter I cant see any flaws yet but I do have things you could use in the future (maybe) #1 I'm pretty sure the author was already going to do this but make it so she is going to be a semi-villain and what I mean is semi-villain is that she will not go off the deep end and become a full psychotic murderer but will be a person that will do what she wants and fulfill .what she wants to do with her life but she will kill if she has to do that..#2 Character interactions are a large part of any fanfiction so I think what would be good for this fanfiction is that the MC will be a person that at first try's to make it so it that they would stick to what they did in Naruto but after she realizes the changes in this universe she will not care anymore #3 this is not a suggestion but more a guess of where you are going to do in the future of the story and I think what you are going to do is that instead of Danzo being the bad guy and Hiruzen being the good guy it would be the opposite...To describe what is good about the story in the present would 100% be the Author's grammar how he is doing things with character development and how you surround this mystery over what are the changes in this AU that changed the timeline so much....So overall I Would say this would be a must read and is a entirely unique style and if I have one last thing to say-I would say that the Author should not degrade the MC into surviving or furthering the plot from entirely lucky encounters like most Author's that try to do this type of story....(Long A*s Review)
not the best start of the story, It can even be said that it is quite strange because suddenly the MCs are directly children and are hit by reality, No encounter with god or ROB and No Cheat so far. But what so far can still be read even though it leaves a feeling of wanting to berate the author.
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I really love how her backstory is tragic and really different to other fanfics. the story is different and we can actually predict what will happen ! this has great potential [img=recommend]
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This has a great start and an even better plot concept. I wish to see more in the future. Best of luck!!! ......................................................................
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I have cultivated the Dao of shamelessness and subsequently ascended to a new level. fear me, mortals, for I gave FIVE STARS! In other words
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I like the story but why the MC is too good , I mean when she was treated like trash for over 5-6 years . She still had the idea of protecting the Leaf deep down due to influence of Naruto's path and the future . Seeing her like that, I can already guess that , she'll forgive the village in the later episodes and will spare them .
Really looking forward to this. The story has such potential for an evil mc and I hope this is continued. I want her to come back and fight against the main cast.
(my English is not very good, because I'm from Russia.) This work makes me very happy with its unusual beginning. I hope further everything does not turn into another: "I am afraid of the future, so I will help Naruto for the sake of a cannon plot" or something like that. Just hope this is not another fan-fic where everything is done for Naruto or cannon preservation. In general, we are waiting for the ORIGINAL storyline, go for it and I'm sure this work will become very popular ;-)
So I love this whole a*s concept in general and if you ever drop this I would probably continue a story similar this and since when I am writing this there is only 1 chapter I cant see any flaws yet but I do have things you could use in the future (maybe) #1 I'm pretty sure the author was already going to do this but make it so she is going to be a semi-villain and what I mean is semi-villain is that she will not go off the deep end and become a full psychotic murderer but will be a person that will do what she wants and fulfill .what she wants to do with her life but she will kill if she has to do that..#2 Character interactions are a large part of any fanfiction so I think what would be good for this fanfiction is that the MC will be a person that at first try's to make it so it that they would stick to what they did in Naruto but after she realizes the changes in this universe she will not care anymore #3 this is not a suggestion but more a guess of where you are going to do in the future of the story and I think what you are going to do is that instead of Danzo being the bad guy and Hiruzen being the good guy it would be the opposite...To describe what is good about the story in the present would 100% be the Author's grammar how he is doing things with character development and how you surround this mystery over what are the changes in this AU that changed the timeline so much....So overall I Would say this would be a must read and is a entirely unique style and if I have one last thing to say-I would say that the Author should not degrade the MC into surviving or furthering the plot from entirely lucky encounters like most Author's that try to do this type of story....(Long A*s Review)
not the best start of the story, It can even be said that it is quite strange because suddenly the MCs are directly children and are hit by reality, No encounter with god or ROB and No Cheat so far. But what so far can still be read even though it leaves a feeling of wanting to berate the author.
Revelar Spoiler I really love how her backstory is tragic and really different to other fanfics. the story is different and we can actually predict what will happen ! this has great potential [img=recommend]
More More More More More More More More More More More More More More More More More More More More More More More More More More More More More More
This has a great start and an even better plot concept. I wish to see more in the future. Best of luck!!! ......................................................................
more more more ..................................................................................................................
I have cultivated the Dao of shamelessness and subsequently ascended to a new level. fear me, mortals, for I gave FIVE STARS! In other words