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Escreva uma avaliaçãoI want to know one thing only is the author alive and if is he dropping .............................................................................. ........
The Harry Potter aspect was great but I would've like if we could've see him grow more, it always feels ready weird ready a story where a 10-year-old child is doing adult stuff but I digress the ben 10 chapter, that's where u lost me like who here still remember the cartoon totally didn't enjoy that...could gone stright to the mcu or some other popular franchies.
This was so disappointing. There was no reason for you to even mention Hitman a your MC. if you replace him with anyone else, it will still work. Then all this speed writing with logic thrown out of window. This is seriously stupid even for me.
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This fanfic started out fairly well but then began to disappoint. It was a decent story, fairly cliche at some points, but that isn't completely bad. But then it came to the end of the first world. The author simply began summarizing character's life. This itself wasn't bad, it's the fact that this summary style continued after he had moved onto the next world. The chapters, with a few exceptions just became summaries, little to no interaction or conversation. Each paragraph just became "And then he went there and did that and got this" and then it moves on to the next thing. I would rate it 4 star for the first world, 3 star after that.
I came here thinking it would be Agent 47 in everything but I got disappointed when he started licking up to this reality's parents and then he started doing stupid pranks, letting everyone know what he can do and everything except he was a transcendant. That is why I gave character design a two stars.
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Please come back There is always haters, and you shouldn't care about them, they are just that, petty haters. But for the mojority of us, your book is a godsent, you're one of the only people with such frequent chapter updates and a perfect english. Please come back soon 🥺
Una historia de hitman pero con un protagonista bipolar y un autor idiota que se olvida del nombre del protagonista la historia de por si no es sólida tiene muchos problemas de consistencia y capítulos muy cortos que no explican nada aunque hitman siempre fue del tipo frío el autor trata de mezclar al prota entre dos personalidades y no sabe como hacerlo lo que más molesta es que el prota se comporta como un niño pero recuerden que es un adulto en el cuerpo de un niño y con una supuesta personalidad de hitman bueno yo ya la deje de leer salu2
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My head hurts Reading this the story is inconsistent it changes almost every chapter can you pls fix it and why is mc complaining about being weak and can't he just change the timeline before the cannon??
very good FF thoughtfull character progression not that op from our prespective and he do not just go and destroy things on the blue he thinks and plans about his future actions. We are in the ben 10 verse do not know why it is harry potter world in the volume some kind of foreshadowing?
This Now This is a fanfiction, Not those h**ny lemon harem garbage that's everywhere, not only is the wish idea very well but it's not too overly op. Also for once the mc is pretty smart, although this will make it harder in the long run; at least it isn't cleshay. He uses the knowledge wisely and the writing isn't that bad grammatically, it is easy and fun to read, keep up the good work author.
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I am starting to like this fic. ............................................................................................................
Writing quality is really good but there are still some mistakes. Update I don’t know so 4* Story development. Started really good and interesting but then it all went to shit. Author jumps all over the place and contradicts himself. In one chapter the person is dead or moving on just to be included in the conversation few chapters later. Story becomes boring as hell as probably even the author didn’t know what to write about. All the good, funny and interesting aspects of the story were cut out (like family relationships) and just disregarded after killing Valdy. World background is nothing new. Chapter design. Was really good at the beginning but then just gotcut out and forgotten.
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I was reading the chapters 68 and 69 when the MC was getting old and people around him were dieing that just awakened a fear of death in me I mean I get it he needs to die to go to other worlds but its sad seeing someone you care about die and life for a long time after you lose someone.
A nice concept with good grammar and flow. Unfortunately for me I dropped it at chapter 10 for a lack of interest, found it slightly boring. But I will still recommend to give it a try and see if you like it.
I want to know one thing only is the author alive and if is he dropping .............................................................................. ........
The Harry Potter aspect was great but I would've like if we could've see him grow more, it always feels ready weird ready a story where a 10-year-old child is doing adult stuff but I digress the ben 10 chapter, that's where u lost me like who here still remember the cartoon totally didn't enjoy that...could gone stright to the mcu or some other popular franchies.
This was so disappointing. There was no reason for you to even mention Hitman a your MC. if you replace him with anyone else, it will still work. Then all this speed writing with logic thrown out of window. This is seriously stupid even for me.
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great work. you should ignore the haters and keep in mind the majority that support you, they just don't comment much.∆∆∆∆∆∆∆∆∆∆∆∆∆∆∆∆∆∆∆∆∆∆
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This fanfic started out fairly well but then began to disappoint. It was a decent story, fairly cliche at some points, but that isn't completely bad. But then it came to the end of the first world. The author simply began summarizing character's life. This itself wasn't bad, it's the fact that this summary style continued after he had moved onto the next world. The chapters, with a few exceptions just became summaries, little to no interaction or conversation. Each paragraph just became "And then he went there and did that and got this" and then it moves on to the next thing. I would rate it 4 star for the first world, 3 star after that.
I came here thinking it would be Agent 47 in everything but I got disappointed when he started licking up to this reality's parents and then he started doing stupid pranks, letting everyone know what he can do and everything except he was a transcendant. That is why I gave character design a two stars.
Revelar SpoilerDId he mention Were he Will move to Z D Zzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzfffffffffffffffffgggggggggggghhhhhhhhhhh Fdfffffffffffffffffffffggggffggfjfjdhfjfjdjfjfjfkfjffjfjfjggkgkglglgkhlhlyöyöylylylyltlttyoyoylylylpy
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Please come back There is always haters, and you shouldn't care about them, they are just that, petty haters. But for the mojority of us, your book is a godsent, you're one of the only people with such frequent chapter updates and a perfect english. Please come back soon 🥺
Una historia de hitman pero con un protagonista bipolar y un autor idiota que se olvida del nombre del protagonista la historia de por si no es sólida tiene muchos problemas de consistencia y capítulos muy cortos que no explican nada aunque hitman siempre fue del tipo frío el autor trata de mezclar al prota entre dos personalidades y no sabe como hacerlo lo que más molesta es que el prota se comporta como un niño pero recuerden que es un adulto en el cuerpo de un niño y con una supuesta personalidad de hitman bueno yo ya la deje de leer salu2
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My head hurts Reading this the story is inconsistent it changes almost every chapter can you pls fix it and why is mc complaining about being weak and can't he just change the timeline before the cannon??
very good FF thoughtfull character progression not that op from our prespective and he do not just go and destroy things on the blue he thinks and plans about his future actions. We are in the ben 10 verse do not know why it is harry potter world in the volume some kind of foreshadowing?
This Now This is a fanfiction, Not those h**ny lemon harem garbage that's everywhere, not only is the wish idea very well but it's not too overly op. Also for once the mc is pretty smart, although this will make it harder in the long run; at least it isn't cleshay. He uses the knowledge wisely and the writing isn't that bad grammatically, it is easy and fun to read, keep up the good work author.
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I am starting to like this fic. ............................................................................................................
Writing quality is really good but there are still some mistakes. Update I don’t know so 4* Story development. Started really good and interesting but then it all went to shit. Author jumps all over the place and contradicts himself. In one chapter the person is dead or moving on just to be included in the conversation few chapters later. Story becomes boring as hell as probably even the author didn’t know what to write about. All the good, funny and interesting aspects of the story were cut out (like family relationships) and just disregarded after killing Valdy. World background is nothing new. Chapter design. Was really good at the beginning but then just gotcut out and forgotten.
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I was reading the chapters 68 and 69 when the MC was getting old and people around him were dieing that just awakened a fear of death in me I mean I get it he needs to die to go to other worlds but its sad seeing someone you care about die and life for a long time after you lose someone.
A nice concept with good grammar and flow. Unfortunately for me I dropped it at chapter 10 for a lack of interest, found it slightly boring. But I will still recommend to give it a try and see if you like it.