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EXP but here is a song! There is my sweetheart down in the orchard, Oh how I wish I were there myself, There is the house and there is the barn; There is the door of the cow house open. There is the gallant, branching oak, A vision, lovingly crowned. I will wait in her shade7 Until my love comes to meet me. There is the harp, there are her strings; What better am I, without anyone to play her for? There’s the delicate fair one, exquisite and full of life; What nearer am I, without having her attention?
I'm sorry, but I can't anymore with the unnecessary monologue of mc, and the filler words of the statutes of the characters__________________________&&_________________
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review at ch 25 (end of first arc) Initially I thought the ff would be a cringe story because I really found the mc as annoying. .. he always giggles and makes some cringe dialogues But later on before ch15 this has gone down and become bearable and during the climax of the first arc I really started liking the character and his interactions (especially his match with shikaku nara) Ah yes I also love the author drawings Man you're really good love them🥰 Now the story is going at a good pace and I'm really interested in it Will be binge reading to catch upto the updates Overall I love it Definitely recommend all to try it out 💯💯💯
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amazing story with packing artwork to help you visualize the plot and the dynamics between the mc and the characters is just :chefs_kiss: 10/10 since author just came back too!
Best Naruto ff imo Character Development: 5/5 World Building: 5/5 Jokes: 10/5 Grammar: 5/5 ................................................
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its a good story.bro thank you from making this story i laughed very much in three years thanks🤣🤣🤣🤣🤣🤣🤣😃😃🙂🙂😀😄😀😄😄😁😁😁😀🙂🙂🙂🙂
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author plzz update its been seven days already aghhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhh kd in s skdndjdjdnbdjdiddndjjdd
dude i love this novel you did good not it it makes me want to read more of it i hope you will keep up the work good for you man love your work
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Mitsu is an unique person that has a charismatic personality that pulls you into the story. Much better than those bland protaganits that have no feeling when killing an innocent being.
Some may like this novel and its style of writing but it is not for me and I was expecting better given a 4.8 rating(chapter 60). The writing and grammar is above average for this site, but the pacing of the novel and the excessive amount of internal narration have caused me to loose interest. Internal narration is not uncommon in novels and can even dominate the story depending on the style/genre. But here it is excessive to the point that every chapter is filled with the mc's internal reasonings, justifications, and excessive number of complaints. Even sections that should be primarily dialogue are constantly interrupted by internal narration. The most recent chapter had the mc + his subordiantes/allies run into several villain's including Orochimaru and nothing happens.. Nothing except the entire chapter the mc is complaining about his plans being ruined and thinking about what to do through internal narration. This is an important moment where characters exchange dialogue, argue, fight with each other, etc. but none of that happens. It ruins the flow of the story, making short events take forever to read and leading to conversations only containing a few lines of dialogue. I find myself skipping through the mc's whining and childish thought processes to get to something actually important happening and find that the chapter is already finished. Which brings me to the childish mc. He is super childish even as a reincarnated adult individual and it seems to be getting worse in recent chapters. This is more of a personal preference but I cringe when reading the large number of sound effects added to the internal narration sections and the current mc feels like he is regressing. Overall, its above average for a fanfic on this site. The grammar is fairly well done with very few errors and the story is unique (which is not easy in the naruto fanfic genre). However, it is dragged down by the dialogue being small and interrupted by every characters internal thoughts, combined with a childish/whiny mc. Try is and you may like it, but don't get your hopes up seeing a 4.8 rating.
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hey author , great work . I m really impressed by the way you express the things in a comical way it is really fun to read . Trust me i have read a lot of novels in which the authors try to make the novel a little bit of comedy but it does not seem natural . But your work does Here r some suggestions ; 1 . i think u should give him a summon of a lion , i mean it will really match his eyes and ruling ways . 2. i think u should name his job class , THE KING , i mean it would look very appropriate with his powers and status . These r just some suggestion i think would be best , i u like it than please use it and if u do not like it than please do not mind me i m just giving some imaginative suggestions . And great novel , one of the best . real respect for u AUTHOR - SAMA
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Just read it and you will love it. The mc has a huge character development so don't judge too early. ,.................................................... ........................ .......... ....... . . .. ......................
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EXP but here is a song! There is my sweetheart down in the orchard, Oh how I wish I were there myself, There is the house and there is the barn; There is the door of the cow house open. There is the gallant, branching oak, A vision, lovingly crowned. I will wait in her shade7 Until my love comes to meet me. There is the harp, there are her strings; What better am I, without anyone to play her for? There’s the delicate fair one, exquisite and full of life; What nearer am I, without having her attention?
I'm sorry, but I can't anymore with the unnecessary monologue of mc, and the filler words of the statutes of the characters__________________________&&_________________
Revelar Spoiler review at ch 25 (end of first arc) Initially I thought the ff would be a cringe story because I really found the mc as annoying. .. he always giggles and makes some cringe dialogues But later on before ch15 this has gone down and become bearable and during the climax of the first arc I really started liking the character and his interactions (especially his match with shikaku nara) Ah yes I also love the author drawings Man you're really good love them🥰 Now the story is going at a good pace and I'm really interested in it Will be binge reading to catch upto the updates Overall I love it Definitely recommend all to try it out 💯💯💯
Masterpiece masterpiece masterpiece masterpiece masterpiece masterpiece masterpiece masterpiece masterpiece Masterpiece masterpiece masterpiece masterpiece masterpiece masterpiece masterpiece masterpiece masterpiece Masterpiece masterpiece masterpiece masterpiece masterpiece masterpiece masterpiece masterpiece masterpiece
amazing story with packing artwork to help you visualize the plot and the dynamics between the mc and the characters is just :chefs_kiss: 10/10 since author just came back too!
Best Naruto ff imo Character Development: 5/5 World Building: 5/5 Jokes: 10/5 Grammar: 5/5 ................................................
Look who is back. Glad your health is holding up. Take a hat off, and a 5 star review as a welcome back gift. Please next time let us know with an announcement or something, before you go MIA.
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its a good story.bro thank you from making this story i laughed very much in three years thanks🤣🤣🤣🤣🤣🤣🤣😃😃🙂🙂😀😄😀😄😄😁😁😁😀🙂🙂🙂🙂
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too bad this book is dropped 😍😂😂😏😍😂👏😍👏📯😊😃😏😊😂😊📯🙄👏😂2👏📯😊😃😏😏😊😁😊😁😏🙄😃📯🙄😃📯🙄😃2😃😏🙄😃😏3😃😏🙄😏😃3😁😏3😁😊😁😏3
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Revelar Spoiler author plzz update its been seven days already aghhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhh kd in s skdndjdjdnbdjdiddndjjdd
dude i love this novel you did good not it it makes me want to read more of it i hope you will keep up the work good for you man love your work
review,review,review,review,review,review,review,review,review,review,review,review,review,review,review,review,review,review,review,review,review,review,review,review,review,review,review,😃
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Mitsu is an unique person that has a charismatic personality that pulls you into the story. Much better than those bland protaganits that have no feeling when killing an innocent being.
Some may like this novel and its style of writing but it is not for me and I was expecting better given a 4.8 rating(chapter 60). The writing and grammar is above average for this site, but the pacing of the novel and the excessive amount of internal narration have caused me to loose interest. Internal narration is not uncommon in novels and can even dominate the story depending on the style/genre. But here it is excessive to the point that every chapter is filled with the mc's internal reasonings, justifications, and excessive number of complaints. Even sections that should be primarily dialogue are constantly interrupted by internal narration. The most recent chapter had the mc + his subordiantes/allies run into several villain's including Orochimaru and nothing happens.. Nothing except the entire chapter the mc is complaining about his plans being ruined and thinking about what to do through internal narration. This is an important moment where characters exchange dialogue, argue, fight with each other, etc. but none of that happens. It ruins the flow of the story, making short events take forever to read and leading to conversations only containing a few lines of dialogue. I find myself skipping through the mc's whining and childish thought processes to get to something actually important happening and find that the chapter is already finished. Which brings me to the childish mc. He is super childish even as a reincarnated adult individual and it seems to be getting worse in recent chapters. This is more of a personal preference but I cringe when reading the large number of sound effects added to the internal narration sections and the current mc feels like he is regressing. Overall, its above average for a fanfic on this site. The grammar is fairly well done with very few errors and the story is unique (which is not easy in the naruto fanfic genre). However, it is dragged down by the dialogue being small and interrupted by every characters internal thoughts, combined with a childish/whiny mc. Try is and you may like it, but don't get your hopes up seeing a 4.8 rating.
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hey author , great work . I m really impressed by the way you express the things in a comical way it is really fun to read . Trust me i have read a lot of novels in which the authors try to make the novel a little bit of comedy but it does not seem natural . But your work does Here r some suggestions ; 1 . i think u should give him a summon of a lion , i mean it will really match his eyes and ruling ways . 2. i think u should name his job class , THE KING , i mean it would look very appropriate with his powers and status . These r just some suggestion i think would be best , i u like it than please use it and if u do not like it than please do not mind me i m just giving some imaginative suggestions . And great novel , one of the best . real respect for u AUTHOR - SAMA
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Just read it and you will love it. The mc has a huge character development so don't judge too early. ,.................................................... ........................ .......... ....... . . .. ......................
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