Reviews of Spirit Orbs : Chronicles of Ra'as by R_F_T_S - Webnovel

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4.55

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Dante_Luca

In all honesty I didn't read enough chapters to give this kind of score. But I've got to say this novel has a lot of potential, there are a few grammar mistakes here and there but at the same time every novel that you will read will have these small grammar mistakes so it's alright. the author makes sure to update this novel frequently giving us a lot of chapters. as a said before I didn't read enough chapters yet, so I don't know if the story development is good or not, but at the first couple of chapters the story does progress in a nice and easy way helping the reader understand a bit about the history of the characters but not revealing too much. the character Design is very good as all of main characters in the beginning are described well and are talked about in an interesting manner. the world background is also very good at the first chapters from ancient times to current time. I'm going to continue reading this and give a better review with better details - I believe that if you have free time you should read this, the story is already very interesting in the first chapters. author-nim please keep up with the good work!

3yr
Ver 2 Respostas
Jozan
LV 2 Badge

OMG! 😭😭😭 THIS AMAZING! The crime fighting romantic duo, dead parents avenger metal dude, corrupt politicians and police force, nice power scaling and PERFECT transitions of scene as well as the EUPHORIC description of (fight and flirt) scenes. My two fav scenes were the fight club battle (SO GOOD! 😭🙌) and the when llara teased lover boy into making him go back on his promise about no *** (I started blushing) Llara is best girl without a doubt!!🙄💅🥵💕 Author-sama congrats on 100k viewers keep up the AMAZINGLY GREAT work (I'm on chap 13 btw🤪 I'm loving so much) To anyone who is reading this review.... PLEASE!! Give this a read or at least at it to collections. 🙏🙏🙏 If it helps. you can use this app's audio feature to listen to the story while you do something else and still enjoy how great this novel is 😃👍🥰🥰🤩

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3yr
Ver 3 Respostas
Zuxian
LV 11 Badge

Are you willing to have a great experience of the super powers and extreme fantasy? Why don't you pick an interest in this book. I bet, you would love it .

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3yr
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pen_inker

This book is. Hmm...Breathtaking. It is the action for me. the author is well versed at active storytelling. He successfully glue the reader to the stories. I'm more than impressed with the character development. keep up the good work. also I love the rate of update.

3yr
Ver 1 Respostas
Samcrowned00

@R_F_T_S Going through your book, I remembered I have once reviewed it before. But it wouldn't hurt to review again. You have used a technique which is beautiful especially when you are describing the fighting scenes. What can I say, I admire your bold step in writting a book even out of your own culture. This Signaled to me that you have really done a lot of research to come up with this great work.

3yr
Ver 1 Respostas
MITCHIEWilliams

This is a very interesting book. The plot is interesting. The characters are also well developed. The author did a good work with the discription, it draws readers in. I really enjoyed reading this book

3yr
Ver 1 Respostas
Gnaipafe

There's a lot of intrigue specially in politics in this story, and totally action overload that definitely was described well. The action mixed with love story makes it really great.

4yr
Ver 1 Respostas
RiniStella

Very intriguing. The arc of the story is very well written and the stability of the characters is also steady. Looking forward to reading more!

4yr
Ver 1 Respostas
The_Procrastinator

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Ver 4 Respostas
Diamond_Air

Naisu! Naisu! Naisu! I'd say these three words only buh this is a review sooo I wuv this novel! Everything's great! Characters, plot and all. Heck, those fight scenes keep me tied to it. 👀 Who knows, I may borrow your writing style. Welll, novel's great and I'm sticking with it! Keep up the good work author XD

4yr
Ver 3 Respostas
Fluffy_Fluffle

Action scenes are quite good and well written, character interactions are good too and the plot is quite mysterious. Those not used to anime style will find it a little difficult to adapt but I'm glad I ain't a part of them lol. Overall a good work and recommended read.

4yr
Ver 3 Respostas
notsosure

The character build up is awesome. The characters are very realistic and I like the pace of the book. I'm looking forward to more chapters.👍👍👍👍

4yr
Ver 2 Respostas
R_F_T_S

Shameless author review here, this is my first novel and I see great things coming out of it. So read and leave a review. I'm open to constructive criticism so lay it on me coz I know that my work ain't perfect in the slightest 😅

4yr
Ver 2 Respostas
Uzochukwu_John

this book is noice, but there is no major romantic conflict between the three main characters, a love triangle to clarify,[img=update] romantic conflict

4yr
Ver 2 Respostas
Half_Boiled_Man

This a lightning fast, engaging action piece of a novel. While the writing is at times clumsy. With its grammar misha** and far too wordy lines. It's fun to read regardless. Characters are interesting despite how fast the story around them moves. Which in turn leads to not losing anytime with the storytelling. Props to the author writing this, will keep reading for sure.

4yr
Ver 0 Respostas
JdCreates

Book is great, has plenty of variety and overall has a good plot. Keep it up! I only have a few complaints, but they are minor and don't ruin the book.

4yr
Ver 1 Respostas
SomeoneBad

Overall, a fast-paced action story that unwinds rather quickly around the few key characters. The actions and combat are adequately portrayed, but the structure of paragraphs with intertwining dialogues and action could be a little more spaced out, giving each individual piece of content some room to breathe. The story transitions from scene to scene like a tv show, shifting in tone, story beats, atmosphere swiftly, though the exposition at times can be a little heavy. A story with a lot of potential, and with time, the rough edges could be trimmed off, revealing the true gem behind it.

4yr
Ver 1 Respostas
Zanyyy
LV 11 Badge

I haven't really gotten far in reading this book but from what I've read I can tell that the author put a lot of work on the characters. The action is really too notch and I can't wait to read more!💯

4yr
Ver 0 Respostas
GeorgeOfTheCity

Would love to read more. Good work with developing the characters. If you're new here and love books with a lot of action, this is the book for you.

4yr
Ver 0 Respostas
Raeven_Black

First of all, I like how you build your characters! They all have personalities that make them unique to each other. The fighting scenes are cool as well and written in a way that makes you imagine the whole thing. Kind of have an issue with the way the paragraphs are spliced but it's cool. It could be worked on. Anyway, great work!

4yr
Ver 1 Respostas
Alanala

The Prologue was a lil' bit of an info dump, but it's alright, probably. Grammar can improve, I already saw the author's comment on it- I won't fault :pensive: Otherwise, the story is so far- heating up, great setting, ez collection

4yr
Ver 1 Respostas
priya012

This book is fantastic, and I can't wait for the next chapters to come out. Excellent work, author. You should be proud of yourself and the work you put in.

4yr
Ver 1 Respostas
AJPaturde

I liked this book, cool setting, and storyline. I have reviewed this book I hope the author comes and does it to mine also, lol kidding.

4yr
Ver 0 Respostas
wild_imaginatorII

I ****en love the starting line of your book! Nice writing style, Unique story line, Not clichè, What more could I want in a book? This is a recommended read!!!!!!!

4yr
Ver 1 Respostas
Jimpaly

First of all, I’m going to point out that this story is around 70% action and 30% mystery. If you’re looking for action-packed scenes and descriptive fights, then this story’s for you. Other than that, I love the world-building you did in the beginning and as the story continues. The plot is eventful and interesting, but it feels like a lot of the mystery is already spoiled since it tells you who the bad guy is (but idk there might be more to the story that hadn’t been revealed yet). The supernatural abilities are placed well in the combat, though it might be nice to see them used outside of fights. The characters have nice interactions and there is a strong female lead, but you could give them clearer and more distinct personalities. The major issue is probably that you should work on your punctuation, sentencing, and paragraphing. Your word choice is great but there’s a lot you can improve. But overall, I love where the story’s going and I can’t wait for more!

4yr
Ver 3 Respostas
asdgvcxz

A very solid webnovel in it's current state. There are a few things that should be worked on such as punctuations and whatnot but the overall story is quite engaging, I like the world building and the characters aren't all that bad. The character design really doing it for but maybe that's cause I lack imagination. Overall has a great story and plot, looking forward to future chapters and what's to come.

4yr
Ver 1 Respostas
Jacket_Josh

The story and characters are really nice, and pretty well written, besides a small abundance of grammatical issues. It's excusable though, since I assume it is not a born English author writing this. The world building sometimes falls into the background, and I wish the story took some times to actually develop things and let the story slow down a bit, but if that was added into later chapters, this will be a really nice read!

4yr
Ver 1 Respostas
OrgasmsxanxBruises

I like that the author gave the readers background in the prologue and I love that it was so detailed. The imagery is great. I think the book needs some work with grammar and punctuation, but outside of that, I think it's great. This book can go really far! Good work Author.

4yr
Ver 1 Respostas
Caleb_Egberibo

I think it's going good for a start.. Keep up the work and I can't wait to see the animation progress. I think the write up is going somewhere

4yr
Ver 1 Respostas
Dante_Luca

In all honesty I didn't read enough chapters to give this kind of score. But I've got to say this novel has a lot of potential, there are a few grammar mistakes here and there but at the same time every novel that you will read will have these small grammar mistakes so it's alright. the author makes sure to update this novel frequently giving us a lot of chapters. as a said before I didn't read enough chapters yet, so I don't know if the story development is good or not, but at the first couple of chapters the story does progress in a nice and easy way helping the reader understand a bit about the history of the characters but not revealing too much. the character Design is very good as all of main characters in the beginning are described well and are talked about in an interesting manner. the world background is also very good at the first chapters from ancient times to current time. I'm going to continue reading this and give a better review with better details - I believe that if you have free time you should read this, the story is already very interesting in the first chapters. author-nim please keep up with the good work!

3yr
Ver 2 Respostas
Jozan
LV 2 Badge

OMG! 😭😭😭 THIS AMAZING! The crime fighting romantic duo, dead parents avenger metal dude, corrupt politicians and police force, nice power scaling and PERFECT transitions of scene as well as the EUPHORIC description of (fight and flirt) scenes. My two fav scenes were the fight club battle (SO GOOD! 😭🙌) and the when llara teased lover boy into making him go back on his promise about no *** (I started blushing) Llara is best girl without a doubt!!🙄💅🥵💕 Author-sama congrats on 100k viewers keep up the AMAZINGLY GREAT work (I'm on chap 13 btw🤪 I'm loving so much) To anyone who is reading this review.... PLEASE!! Give this a read or at least at it to collections. 🙏🙏🙏 If it helps. you can use this app's audio feature to listen to the story while you do something else and still enjoy how great this novel is 😃👍🥰🥰🤩

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3yr
Ver 3 Respostas
Zuxian
LV 11 Badge

Are you willing to have a great experience of the super powers and extreme fantasy? Why don't you pick an interest in this book. I bet, you would love it .

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3yr
Ver 1 Respostas
pen_inker

This book is. Hmm...Breathtaking. It is the action for me. the author is well versed at active storytelling. He successfully glue the reader to the stories. I'm more than impressed with the character development. keep up the good work. also I love the rate of update.

3yr
Ver 1 Respostas
Samcrowned00

@R_F_T_S Going through your book, I remembered I have once reviewed it before. But it wouldn't hurt to review again. You have used a technique which is beautiful especially when you are describing the fighting scenes. What can I say, I admire your bold step in writting a book even out of your own culture. This Signaled to me that you have really done a lot of research to come up with this great work.

3yr
Ver 1 Respostas
MITCHIEWilliams

This is a very interesting book. The plot is interesting. The characters are also well developed. The author did a good work with the discription, it draws readers in. I really enjoyed reading this book

3yr
Ver 1 Respostas
Gnaipafe

There's a lot of intrigue specially in politics in this story, and totally action overload that definitely was described well. The action mixed with love story makes it really great.

4yr
Ver 1 Respostas
RiniStella

Very intriguing. The arc of the story is very well written and the stability of the characters is also steady. Looking forward to reading more!

4yr
Ver 1 Respostas
The_Procrastinator

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4yr
Ver 4 Respostas
Diamond_Air

Naisu! Naisu! Naisu! I'd say these three words only buh this is a review sooo I wuv this novel! Everything's great! Characters, plot and all. Heck, those fight scenes keep me tied to it. 👀 Who knows, I may borrow your writing style. Welll, novel's great and I'm sticking with it! Keep up the good work author XD

4yr
Ver 3 Respostas
Fluffy_Fluffle

Action scenes are quite good and well written, character interactions are good too and the plot is quite mysterious. Those not used to anime style will find it a little difficult to adapt but I'm glad I ain't a part of them lol. Overall a good work and recommended read.

4yr
Ver 3 Respostas
notsosure

The character build up is awesome. The characters are very realistic and I like the pace of the book. I'm looking forward to more chapters.👍👍👍👍

4yr
Ver 2 Respostas
R_F_T_S

Shameless author review here, this is my first novel and I see great things coming out of it. So read and leave a review. I'm open to constructive criticism so lay it on me coz I know that my work ain't perfect in the slightest 😅

4yr
Ver 2 Respostas
Uzochukwu_John

this book is noice, but there is no major romantic conflict between the three main characters, a love triangle to clarify,[img=update] romantic conflict

4yr
Ver 2 Respostas
Half_Boiled_Man

This a lightning fast, engaging action piece of a novel. While the writing is at times clumsy. With its grammar misha** and far too wordy lines. It's fun to read regardless. Characters are interesting despite how fast the story around them moves. Which in turn leads to not losing anytime with the storytelling. Props to the author writing this, will keep reading for sure.

4yr
Ver 0 Respostas
JdCreates

Book is great, has plenty of variety and overall has a good plot. Keep it up! I only have a few complaints, but they are minor and don't ruin the book.

4yr
Ver 1 Respostas
SomeoneBad

Overall, a fast-paced action story that unwinds rather quickly around the few key characters. The actions and combat are adequately portrayed, but the structure of paragraphs with intertwining dialogues and action could be a little more spaced out, giving each individual piece of content some room to breathe. The story transitions from scene to scene like a tv show, shifting in tone, story beats, atmosphere swiftly, though the exposition at times can be a little heavy. A story with a lot of potential, and with time, the rough edges could be trimmed off, revealing the true gem behind it.

4yr
Ver 1 Respostas
Zanyyy
LV 11 Badge

I haven't really gotten far in reading this book but from what I've read I can tell that the author put a lot of work on the characters. The action is really too notch and I can't wait to read more!💯

4yr
Ver 0 Respostas
GeorgeOfTheCity

Would love to read more. Good work with developing the characters. If you're new here and love books with a lot of action, this is the book for you.

4yr
Ver 0 Respostas
Raeven_Black

First of all, I like how you build your characters! They all have personalities that make them unique to each other. The fighting scenes are cool as well and written in a way that makes you imagine the whole thing. Kind of have an issue with the way the paragraphs are spliced but it's cool. It could be worked on. Anyway, great work!

4yr
Ver 1 Respostas
Alanala

The Prologue was a lil' bit of an info dump, but it's alright, probably. Grammar can improve, I already saw the author's comment on it- I won't fault :pensive: Otherwise, the story is so far- heating up, great setting, ez collection

4yr
Ver 1 Respostas
priya012

This book is fantastic, and I can't wait for the next chapters to come out. Excellent work, author. You should be proud of yourself and the work you put in.

4yr
Ver 1 Respostas
AJPaturde

I liked this book, cool setting, and storyline. I have reviewed this book I hope the author comes and does it to mine also, lol kidding.

4yr
Ver 0 Respostas
wild_imaginatorII

I ****en love the starting line of your book! Nice writing style, Unique story line, Not clichè, What more could I want in a book? This is a recommended read!!!!!!!

4yr
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Jimpaly

First of all, I’m going to point out that this story is around 70% action and 30% mystery. If you’re looking for action-packed scenes and descriptive fights, then this story’s for you. Other than that, I love the world-building you did in the beginning and as the story continues. The plot is eventful and interesting, but it feels like a lot of the mystery is already spoiled since it tells you who the bad guy is (but idk there might be more to the story that hadn’t been revealed yet). The supernatural abilities are placed well in the combat, though it might be nice to see them used outside of fights. The characters have nice interactions and there is a strong female lead, but you could give them clearer and more distinct personalities. The major issue is probably that you should work on your punctuation, sentencing, and paragraphing. Your word choice is great but there’s a lot you can improve. But overall, I love where the story’s going and I can’t wait for more!

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asdgvcxz

A very solid webnovel in it's current state. There are a few things that should be worked on such as punctuations and whatnot but the overall story is quite engaging, I like the world building and the characters aren't all that bad. The character design really doing it for but maybe that's cause I lack imagination. Overall has a great story and plot, looking forward to future chapters and what's to come.

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Jacket_Josh

The story and characters are really nice, and pretty well written, besides a small abundance of grammatical issues. It's excusable though, since I assume it is not a born English author writing this. The world building sometimes falls into the background, and I wish the story took some times to actually develop things and let the story slow down a bit, but if that was added into later chapters, this will be a really nice read!

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OrgasmsxanxBruises

I like that the author gave the readers background in the prologue and I love that it was so detailed. The imagery is great. I think the book needs some work with grammar and punctuation, but outside of that, I think it's great. This book can go really far! Good work Author.

4yr
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Caleb_Egberibo

I think it's going good for a start.. Keep up the work and I can't wait to see the animation progress. I think the write up is going somewhere

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