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Ini fanfic yang bagus dan sangat menarik.. saya suka alur cerita dan pengembangan karakternya.. Saya harap ceritanya akan semakin menarik dan cepat updated ya author
So a story where the mc has all spirit abilities from Date a live and he is in the MHA world trying to be a hero.So basicly your average MHA story
Nice Fanfic. It's not everytime you could see a Date a Live themed fanfic out there. I'm just gonna ask here btw.... is this dropped? I hope not...
Definitely a fanfic that i enjoy reading. Date a live isn't quite a popular theme to write so seeing it here filled me with immense joy. The harem is also an added factor coupled with the fact that the pairing contains eri which in my opinion is an interesting combination. My only complain is the long update time but a long as the story continue then i am happy.
yea I got addicted and this MF author is teasing me with only one chapter bruh I mean full bruh moment for me and also is there is really multiverse hmmmmmm
Oh my gahd, why didn't I see this! Noice👌 ...............................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................
Working on two Fanfictions I really respect you Author. I'm reading both, though I'm liking "Reincarnation on anime world" more than this Fanfic. But, I'm supporting both Fanfictions. And, I want to see ending of these both Fanfics. Keep it up. We are supporting you.....🤗
This story is very fun to read and its nostalgic for me too since its been a long time since i saw Date A Live. I like how everything is building up so far so i hope the authors keeps updating nice chapters for us!
the story is good and I like how everything is but you give him all these awesome powers but he only use the time one(I don't know how to spell it) the only time the other ones are in the story is when you talk about them other than that they aren't really in the story. I am not complaining about the time power it's just that you said that he has all these powers but he never used them if you can't tell I don't know how to write reviews but I wanted to get this of my chest.
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........................................................................................Keep up the good.................... work.........................Here for you just....... Dance..............
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like the novel keep up the good work author, I always been looking this kind of novel!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!😁😁😀😀😆😆😄!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍
I love this book and hope for more updates soon. I hope you have a good rest of your day man. The character development is missing a little bit but other than that the story is pretty solid.
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For those who like date a live here are some links to read some fan-fics that I find interesting: https://archiveofourown.org/works/24982576/chapters/60482917 https://archiveofourown.org/works/17061125/chapters/40116746 (lemon chapter from the fan-fic link above) https://archiveofourown.org/works/20236486/chapters/47959873 https://archiveofourown.org/works/18725896/chapters/44416288 https://archiveofourown.org/works/16978599/chapters/39906261 https://***.webnovel.com/book/elohim-the-spirit_18220992306898705
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Idk why this novel haven't entered the top rating but its definitely underrated and I like the author is meticulous to detail like giving yoshinon different forms while the characters feels like a characters not an AI yes man. Still reading to catch up with the latest update so I might edit this later.
I see you asking why your novel doesn't get a lot of attention. As someone who has read a lot of fanfics, both popular and unpopular, perhaps I can tell you why. The first turn off is the main character. He's pretty.. one-dimensional. I just don't feel any depth. Happy go lucky, amnesia, misses the "warmth" of a family, etc etc. If you want to write this type of character, try OC-drama, not fanfiction. He's pretty morally grey I'd say, but all of the "evil" things you say he does such as murdering and slaughtering gangs are talked about solely in past tense, we're only told he does these things and not shown him doing these things. To me, at this point in the story at least, he just seems like a plot device instead of a character. I don't particularly know why you've decided to shift the focus of this story onto other characters, but the results show, even you yourself admitted it was a bad move making him a teacher. In my opinion, you shouldn't have made him OP. A more ideal scenario is him knowing a little about his powers, but him having to train in order to unlock them. That could have been interesting as we could actually see him struggle and grow, but if you really think about these past 70 or so chapters, nothing really happened. I mean, there was a dream (flashback?) of some sort and he became a bit more mature and silent but nothing else really happened towards him. He's just incredibly bland. I get it already. He isn't a hero, he's just doing it for "fun". No need to say it 30 times. If you hate the prospect of him being a hero so much, just make him a villain. Another thing is the.. err. romance? It was very quick and forced. I think there could have been a more dramatic encounter, and I feel as if Eri opened up to soon. It should have taken along time for them to trust each other, but I honestly cannot be bothered to stick around to see their relationship anymore. You already said you wouldn't be writing any R-18 because you're not 18 (so do you not watch or read hentai because you aren't 18? there's a lot of things you aren't supposed to do until your 18 but you probably do them so I see no problem with writing fictional lemon but you do you I guess). Eri has pretty much been reduced to a background character who the MC goes shopping with sometimes or something. Should have focused more on them instead of the main cast of BNHA. Furthermore, I'm really not a fan of child protagonists. You keep hyping up his "mysterious" identity, but it's getting tedious at this point. It just felt like nothing really happened at all in the entirety of the story. It just feels forced, bland, and congested. I think you should try writing OC instead of fanfiction, you have a very hard time developing the main characters of your own story and instead opt to develop the mcs of the anime your mc is in. Not my thing.
Is this a huge harem? Is this a huge harem? Is this a huge harem? Is this a huge Is this a huge harem? harem? Is this a huge harem? Is this a huge harem?
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Well, the start was great and such but I will list at least the things I do not like and why I dropped it. 1. He is younger than the main cast 2. the love interest is Eri (he moved up the age to 7 for her mc is 8-9 or something like that) and that's it only those 2 things made me drop it, I just did not like those developments.
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Why harem?😓.................................... ,.......................................................... ................................
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This stuff is unique in every way because he wasn’t the same age the protagonist and he had Eri as a love interest also his powers are cool. Also I like MHA stuff jn general do 5 stars
It's good, I like the mystery about his powers and how he doesn't know about them, worldbuilding is well it's a fanfic, you actually hear something about how the characters think which is nice, story is going smootly, writing quality is good, few mistakes here and there but you read over it pretty easiliy
so far a really great story I am loving it but I just have to ask has it been dropped because it has been a year already for this story and 8 months for another story of yours that I read.
Ini fanfic yang bagus dan sangat menarik.. saya suka alur cerita dan pengembangan karakternya.. Saya harap ceritanya akan semakin menarik dan cepat updated ya author
So a story where the mc has all spirit abilities from Date a live and he is in the MHA world trying to be a hero.So basicly your average MHA story
Nice Fanfic. It's not everytime you could see a Date a Live themed fanfic out there. I'm just gonna ask here btw.... is this dropped? I hope not...
Definitely a fanfic that i enjoy reading. Date a live isn't quite a popular theme to write so seeing it here filled me with immense joy. The harem is also an added factor coupled with the fact that the pairing contains eri which in my opinion is an interesting combination. My only complain is the long update time but a long as the story continue then i am happy.
yea I got addicted and this MF author is teasing me with only one chapter bruh I mean full bruh moment for me and also is there is really multiverse hmmmmmm
Oh my gahd, why didn't I see this! Noice👌 ...............................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................
Working on two Fanfictions I really respect you Author. I'm reading both, though I'm liking "Reincarnation on anime world" more than this Fanfic. But, I'm supporting both Fanfictions. And, I want to see ending of these both Fanfics. Keep it up. We are supporting you.....🤗
This story is very fun to read and its nostalgic for me too since its been a long time since i saw Date A Live. I like how everything is building up so far so i hope the authors keeps updating nice chapters for us!
the story is good and I like how everything is but you give him all these awesome powers but he only use the time one(I don't know how to spell it) the only time the other ones are in the story is when you talk about them other than that they aren't really in the story. I am not complaining about the time power it's just that you said that he has all these powers but he never used them if you can't tell I don't know how to write reviews but I wanted to get this of my chest.
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........................................................................................Keep up the good.................... work.........................Here for you just....... Dance..............
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like the novel keep up the good work author, I always been looking this kind of novel!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!😁😁😀😀😆😆😄!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍
I love this book and hope for more updates soon. I hope you have a good rest of your day man. The character development is missing a little bit but other than that the story is pretty solid.
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For those who like date a live here are some links to read some fan-fics that I find interesting: https://archiveofourown.org/works/24982576/chapters/60482917 https://archiveofourown.org/works/17061125/chapters/40116746 (lemon chapter from the fan-fic link above) https://archiveofourown.org/works/20236486/chapters/47959873 https://archiveofourown.org/works/18725896/chapters/44416288 https://archiveofourown.org/works/16978599/chapters/39906261 https://***.webnovel.com/book/elohim-the-spirit_18220992306898705
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Idk why this novel haven't entered the top rating but its definitely underrated and I like the author is meticulous to detail like giving yoshinon different forms while the characters feels like a characters not an AI yes man. Still reading to catch up with the latest update so I might edit this later.
I see you asking why your novel doesn't get a lot of attention. As someone who has read a lot of fanfics, both popular and unpopular, perhaps I can tell you why. The first turn off is the main character. He's pretty.. one-dimensional. I just don't feel any depth. Happy go lucky, amnesia, misses the "warmth" of a family, etc etc. If you want to write this type of character, try OC-drama, not fanfiction. He's pretty morally grey I'd say, but all of the "evil" things you say he does such as murdering and slaughtering gangs are talked about solely in past tense, we're only told he does these things and not shown him doing these things. To me, at this point in the story at least, he just seems like a plot device instead of a character. I don't particularly know why you've decided to shift the focus of this story onto other characters, but the results show, even you yourself admitted it was a bad move making him a teacher. In my opinion, you shouldn't have made him OP. A more ideal scenario is him knowing a little about his powers, but him having to train in order to unlock them. That could have been interesting as we could actually see him struggle and grow, but if you really think about these past 70 or so chapters, nothing really happened. I mean, there was a dream (flashback?) of some sort and he became a bit more mature and silent but nothing else really happened towards him. He's just incredibly bland. I get it already. He isn't a hero, he's just doing it for "fun". No need to say it 30 times. If you hate the prospect of him being a hero so much, just make him a villain. Another thing is the.. err. romance? It was very quick and forced. I think there could have been a more dramatic encounter, and I feel as if Eri opened up to soon. It should have taken along time for them to trust each other, but I honestly cannot be bothered to stick around to see their relationship anymore. You already said you wouldn't be writing any R-18 because you're not 18 (so do you not watch or read hentai because you aren't 18? there's a lot of things you aren't supposed to do until your 18 but you probably do them so I see no problem with writing fictional lemon but you do you I guess). Eri has pretty much been reduced to a background character who the MC goes shopping with sometimes or something. Should have focused more on them instead of the main cast of BNHA. Furthermore, I'm really not a fan of child protagonists. You keep hyping up his "mysterious" identity, but it's getting tedious at this point. It just felt like nothing really happened at all in the entirety of the story. It just feels forced, bland, and congested. I think you should try writing OC instead of fanfiction, you have a very hard time developing the main characters of your own story and instead opt to develop the mcs of the anime your mc is in. Not my thing.
Is this a huge harem? Is this a huge harem? Is this a huge harem? Is this a huge Is this a huge harem? harem? Is this a huge harem? Is this a huge harem?
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Well, the start was great and such but I will list at least the things I do not like and why I dropped it. 1. He is younger than the main cast 2. the love interest is Eri (he moved up the age to 7 for her mc is 8-9 or something like that) and that's it only those 2 things made me drop it, I just did not like those developments.
Revelar Spoiler Why harem?😓.................................... ,.......................................................... ................................
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This stuff is unique in every way because he wasn’t the same age the protagonist and he had Eri as a love interest also his powers are cool. Also I like MHA stuff jn general do 5 stars
It's good, I like the mystery about his powers and how he doesn't know about them, worldbuilding is well it's a fanfic, you actually hear something about how the characters think which is nice, story is going smootly, writing quality is good, few mistakes here and there but you read over it pretty easiliy
so far a really great story I am loving it but I just have to ask has it been dropped because it has been a year already for this story and 8 months for another story of yours that I read.