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An interesting concept with some pretty good mixing of various power sets. The writing needs to be edited for it has many points of misspelling and grammar errors. The author also seems to have more than occasional bad luck and extremely busy schedule which impacts his writing. Here's hoping his luck improves and his schedule becomes a more positive environment. An ok read thank you.
This book is amazing, keep going! Can't stop reading. Can't wait to see more. Do you have any social media that I can follow so I can know when you gonna update?
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this story is very good and I'm looking forward for more chapters and how the story will continue onwards. so please keep up the good work .
Very boring story. Author just give powers act like a kid gives more powers. (Basically adds all the powers he like) Tired of this at chapter 6. He should start story sooner, and make him grow. Not interesting anymore.
yeah i really tried to read this one but i couldn't read two phrases without groaning because of the cringe that makes me feel the author is just mashing together what he thinks is cool and when I reached the first conversation I just couldn't read anymore for anyone trying to read this don't it's worse and cringer than all xanxia novels in this site together
I haven’t really read the book yet, but I hate harems. Kekene Rkrkrn Rkktornfkrm Fmktrkfnnfrkrorkjfnf Rjrnfkfnktjrjtnt Rjrkfnrkfnkrnfkrjr[img=recommend]
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Been reading it for a long time and think it's a great fanfic...............................................................................................................................................................................
i like the new chapter its really cool nice story to...........................................................................................................
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The story itself is good but there are some plotholes, but what can ya do even some of the best fiction on this site has some of the same problems.
I will change this to a five if you get rid of the scythe. I’m on chapter 3 if he at has droped it tell me now. Goku and Jin Mori more or less don’t use wepons and when they do it ain’t cringe.
I love it but could you shorten the statis list to only the things that change and if there is a realy important update ..............................................................................................................................................................................................hshshshshshshshshshshshshshshshshshshshshshshshshshshshshshshshshshshhshshshshshshshshshshsjsjshshshshsj
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So is this a harem or a solo romance just asking I love the story tho and the character design the Tats was a nice touch that’s all I was going to ask cause it has girlfriend in the status in brackets like there could be more added
great story flips between acton and romance so you get what you want every other chapter has a good plot and it explains the lore or other life of the mc
good!......................................................................................................................................................................................
Im not trying to inturde i just want to know where exactly you Got the cover photo from. This isnt a reveiw i dont know try out the book its on u
this whole thing is wish fulfilment trash. the MC is a typical edgelord. the author is obsessed with bloodlines. being a Saiyan in RWBY is instant win on its own, adding anything else isn't even overkill, it's yet excessive. the author doesn't know how to use commas, the story so far is following the cannon cos the author doesn't wanna out any actual work in except for glorifying his wish fulfilment character. I'm legitimately surprised that every female he meets doesn't start blushing and getting wet, at least we're soared that garbage. do yourself a favour and don't waste your time reading this. don't make the sacrifice of my IQ be in vain.
Hurm, I have read till chapter "Blue dragon Kick" part and I think that I'm disappoint by it's content? It's character is all over the place, with author didn't know what to do in first few chapter of training montage. And when he got stuff, a few very good stuff, he didn't use it like the taekwondo or the will of gods that only come out in first few time after he got it... There's also a few of complain which I wouldnt mention because it may cause some people to not trying it first. Anyway, this is my personal opinion so if you all who didn't read this first, you can read it. At least it got an average grammar, meaning you can read it without holding back from punching the screen..
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There's barely any change in dialog, it feels like you just copy & pasted the RWBY transcripts and the stats, after that you barely did any real editing and added your two cents every once in a while.
не должно существовать..............................................................................................................................................................
I could only get through the first chapter so i gave more stars than i believe it should earn. Truly all i can say is that the wishes ensure that the character has no conflicts that wouldn’t be able to be solved in an extremely easy manner meaning there can never be a true struggle. On top of that, and this was the clincher, he willingly gave his AI for the system that is the basis for his strength a yandere personality.
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A Little Bit to much plotholes you havent writen how he meet Weis and Black am start ect but i like the story much but you cant Jump over the events to much and pls no byakugan white eays looks Creapy you can take powers from one piece armament haki ect or blood lines from Tokyo ghoul
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I really don't like doing reviews like this but this story was really bad the MC is super annoying with barely any personality this story embodies the worst traits of Gamer Fics
An interesting concept with some pretty good mixing of various power sets. The writing needs to be edited for it has many points of misspelling and grammar errors. The author also seems to have more than occasional bad luck and extremely busy schedule which impacts his writing. Here's hoping his luck improves and his schedule becomes a more positive environment. An ok read thank you.
This book is amazing, keep going! Can't stop reading. Can't wait to see more. Do you have any social media that I can follow so I can know when you gonna update?
-----------------------------NICE----------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------
this story is very good and I'm looking forward for more chapters and how the story will continue onwards. so please keep up the good work .
Very boring story. Author just give powers act like a kid gives more powers. (Basically adds all the powers he like) Tired of this at chapter 6. He should start story sooner, and make him grow. Not interesting anymore.
yeah i really tried to read this one but i couldn't read two phrases without groaning because of the cringe that makes me feel the author is just mashing together what he thinks is cool and when I reached the first conversation I just couldn't read anymore for anyone trying to read this don't it's worse and cringer than all xanxia novels in this site together
I haven’t really read the book yet, but I hate harems. Kekene Rkrkrn Rkktornfkrm Fmktrkfnnfrkrorkjfnf Rjrnfkfnktjrjtnt Rjrkfnrkfnkrnfkrjr[img=recommend]
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Been reading it for a long time and think it's a great fanfic...............................................................................................................................................................................
i like the new chapter its really cool nice story to...........................................................................................................
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The story itself is good but there are some plotholes, but what can ya do even some of the best fiction on this site has some of the same problems.
I will change this to a five if you get rid of the scythe. I’m on chapter 3 if he at has droped it tell me now. Goku and Jin Mori more or less don’t use wepons and when they do it ain’t cringe.
I love it but could you shorten the statis list to only the things that change and if there is a realy important update ..............................................................................................................................................................................................hshshshshshshshshshshshshshshshshshshshshshshshshshshshshshshshshshshhshshshshshshshshshshsjsjshshshshsj
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So is this a harem or a solo romance just asking I love the story tho and the character design the Tats was a nice touch that’s all I was going to ask cause it has girlfriend in the status in brackets like there could be more added
great story flips between acton and romance so you get what you want every other chapter has a good plot and it explains the lore or other life of the mc
good!......................................................................................................................................................................................
Im not trying to inturde i just want to know where exactly you Got the cover photo from. This isnt a reveiw i dont know try out the book its on u
this whole thing is wish fulfilment trash. the MC is a typical edgelord. the author is obsessed with bloodlines. being a Saiyan in RWBY is instant win on its own, adding anything else isn't even overkill, it's yet excessive. the author doesn't know how to use commas, the story so far is following the cannon cos the author doesn't wanna out any actual work in except for glorifying his wish fulfilment character. I'm legitimately surprised that every female he meets doesn't start blushing and getting wet, at least we're soared that garbage. do yourself a favour and don't waste your time reading this. don't make the sacrifice of my IQ be in vain.
Hurm, I have read till chapter "Blue dragon Kick" part and I think that I'm disappoint by it's content? It's character is all over the place, with author didn't know what to do in first few chapter of training montage. And when he got stuff, a few very good stuff, he didn't use it like the taekwondo or the will of gods that only come out in first few time after he got it... There's also a few of complain which I wouldnt mention because it may cause some people to not trying it first. Anyway, this is my personal opinion so if you all who didn't read this first, you can read it. At least it got an average grammar, meaning you can read it without holding back from punching the screen..
Revelar Spoiler There's barely any change in dialog, it feels like you just copy & pasted the RWBY transcripts and the stats, after that you barely did any real editing and added your two cents every once in a while.
не должно существовать..............................................................................................................................................................
I could only get through the first chapter so i gave more stars than i believe it should earn. Truly all i can say is that the wishes ensure that the character has no conflicts that wouldn’t be able to be solved in an extremely easy manner meaning there can never be a true struggle. On top of that, and this was the clincher, he willingly gave his AI for the system that is the basis for his strength a yandere personality.
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A Little Bit to much plotholes you havent writen how he meet Weis and Black am start ect but i like the story much but you cant Jump over the events to much and pls no byakugan white eays looks Creapy you can take powers from one piece armament haki ect or blood lines from Tokyo ghoul
Xp 😗😉😎🤔😉😀😃😅😀😎😅😂😙🤣😄😚🤣😎🤔😙😎😘😗😃😉😀😑😏😜😘😙😘👦👧😜😫😜😏😣😝😜😘😆🤣😂😆😎😂😅😉😎🤔😙😎😘😙😎😘😗😋😘😗😃😂😗😋😘😗🤣😄😚😍😎😚🤣😄😆😋😙😋🤔😆🤔😉😃😘🤣😙🤣😘😗🤣😘😗🤣😄😙😎😙🤣😘😆🤣😂😗😃😂😚😆😋😍😎😄😎😙😋😘😗😋😙😋😙😋😙😋😙
I really don't like doing reviews like this but this story was really bad the MC is super annoying with barely any personality this story embodies the worst traits of Gamer Fics