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Started of good but know they basically have become monster. slapping little girls and shit and I like the merchant angle but he is a man with the king's haki who hides? like wtf. And he cant change the main plot? Barto club was in the main plot. what if he got his devil fruit from a pirate you killed.. Just saying it's good but if your going to made him a coward who cannot change anything.
This fanfic is rated 3.9 right now. And it's quite low tbh. The quality of this fanfic is good. The plot is good. The 'wake up call' chapter and how the MC just lived casually/lazily without training himself are what people are having hard to digest. I don't blame them but their opinions are highly biased and baseless. I didn't find anything wrong with the story. My only concern is that I can't see a future path that the MC is going to take, which is making it a bit hard to anticipate a particular scenario for the futures. My suggestion for the Author would be to slightly increase the monologues or third-person speech to show what exactly MC is planning to do later on. The build up of the fanfic has been smooth and gradual; a bit too gradual, in fact. Right now, I've rated this as 4.2. I will come back and write a new review when I feel that this fanfic is not gonna be dropped anytime soon because from what I can see, it'll take hundreds chapters for this fanfic to be completed. P S: Try to be more detailed about known locations as well. It'll add to the beauty of this story. Your cake(story) is delicious, just icing on the cake(extra details to make the story more colourful) is required. Also, writing a good physical description of characters would also be a good idea. All this would easily add 1-2 more stars to anyone's review, including mine. SORRY FOR THE LONG REVIEW! THANKS! I have given you:- (4/5) for Writing Quality (4/5) for Story Development (4/5) for Character Design (5/5) for Updating Stability (4/5) for World Background. Overall : [4.2/5]
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The plot is good. But last chapter the MC was literally monologued about Ace's death which seemed unnecessary. Also in the beginning it seemed that MC didn't have much attachment to ONE PIECE character but now he cries after seeing Luffy,Ace and Sabo.
This novel is nice, although a bit slow paced but has some nice original ideas and plots with regular updates i would have love to read a chapter daily...
This novel got a rewrite after a long time in waiting, and the changes made the story more organic and less emotionless. Hope the author keep improving and Hope that the novel reach it's ending someday.
It's a great story.. I love this.. Not many story which make MC (Leo) have a system, but can't have a devil fruit.. So I can wait to see how the story will going 😁😁👍😍
one of the best one piece fanfics that I've seen in a while it's such a shame that they don't update chapters very often 😕. but yeah this novel is good you should really read it trust me you won't be disappointed.
the story is just boring i dropped in the 1st chapter the protagonist is just a clueless lazybones who really thinks he is in a world where with a word from a person you die and they exist +
Update fast. Update. Update. Update. Update. Update. Update. Update. Update. Update. Update. Update. Update. Update. Update. Update. Update. Update. Updaaaaaaaaaaaate.
I like the system, but I don't like the mc not being able to interfere with the plot a bit too restrictive and being able to return back to earth after the story makes it as though mc is on a trip to one piece where everything is just fantasy and all of the people he met are just characters in a comic. if someone is getting a new life he should die there if not it stops readers from being immersed in the story,it's just like having a harem or being able to eat unlimited devil fruits. it just takes away the pleasure of reading. I just mentioned it as the way you wrote felt like you didn't want the mc to simply get all the girls and stand on top of the world and become a young master who cuts buddha if he stands in his way and cuts devil in his way that kind of protagonist. It's a good read and don't drop.
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I liked it a lot, i'm still waiting for a new chapter :) 👍 I wanted to see how could the MC interact with the strawhats and specially with nami.
One of the best one piece fan fiction I have ever read Pls continue to update More More More More More More More More More More More More More More More More More More More More More
Thanks for your effort ! I'm a new reader.. and I think your story got better every chapter. I hope there aren't any future chapter for faint hearted people.. ( like myself Ó╭╮Ò). 2 is enough ᕙ(⇀‸↼‶)ᕗ
the reason people who are described in this type of situation usually train like crazy is simple and realistic, because they want to guarantee their SURVIVAL. crazy is to know that if you are in such a dangerous world and do nothing to try to have ways to react if something goes wrong, even more if you receive gifts as a body that has no growth limits, we as a highly adaptable race are capable you can believe in changing from the lazy to the fighters, the excuse is stupid that just because the training is difficult you give up, maybe that in a peaceful world or in a situation that is not in danger focuses on something reasonable, but in a world that can literally screw with you and those you like to simply continue a restful life would be idiotic.
useless mc useless mc he's already in one piece world and you made him such a useless mc who's scared to even train what a useless mc useless mc useless mc useless mc useless mc he's already in one piece world and you made him such a useless mc who's scared to even train what a useless mc useless mc useless mc
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muito bom,mc muito bem desenvolvido,por favor não ligue pra comentarios que só tem a intenção de ofender,muitos são apenas crianças molengas que não sabem apreciar a historia. continue com o bom trabalho...............
MC fanboying is too annoying and ruined the story. also being an excessive pushover is waaaayyy too ridiculous and idiotic. I don't know what the author's intention, but your character development is trash and needs improvement.
Best reading experience ever! You are a good writer.I approve. I really like your work please keep up the good work and moar chapter. Most of the fanfics I've read are bs but yours is quite different and more realistic and makes sense.
Yea so there is one problem with this book, the main character. I normally wouldn't complain about the mc since i already see them often called cucks, cowards and many other exaggerated descriptions. But this is the first book i've read where the mc is WORTHLESS, in theory he reincarnated from being 25 but he actually acts like a child. Scared of pirates, to scared to train himself with simulated combat and too lazy to train himself with weights. And then IN THE WORLD OF ONE PIECE he is surprised when things go wrong and he cant do anything. I wouldn't even complain about the mc being a coward or lazy because that is the writer's choice to have that kind of mc. But I will not read a book where the main character who is supposedly 25 and know's one piece is scared when pirates show up and has to be soothed by his mother and who cant even think up a good plan for them to escape. Basically i gave it a 1 in all category simple because the main character is worthless in every way imaginable.
I like the story how mc and his friend go all in for killing pirates ty for this work author well i see many ppl saying bad stuff about the start... but i dont think ppl understand how it is completely normal to just let your life play itself a 2nd time instead of start training directly. he knew it was one piece world but he just didnt train becuz we are humans and its normal to not be perfect simple...
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Nice and realistic story, I like how the MC needs a wake up call as I always considered idiotic how all the Reincarnators decide to train relentlessly and become strong the moment they wake up, it's stupid, none of us first world people would start an harsh training regiment without having similar experiences before reincarnation or a concrete and urgent need for it, come on we all think that martial arts are cool as ****, but how many do actually start practicing them without abandoning after few moths at most?
Started of good but know they basically have become monster. slapping little girls and shit and I like the merchant angle but he is a man with the king's haki who hides? like wtf. And he cant change the main plot? Barto club was in the main plot. what if he got his devil fruit from a pirate you killed.. Just saying it's good but if your going to made him a coward who cannot change anything.
This fanfic is rated 3.9 right now. And it's quite low tbh. The quality of this fanfic is good. The plot is good. The 'wake up call' chapter and how the MC just lived casually/lazily without training himself are what people are having hard to digest. I don't blame them but their opinions are highly biased and baseless. I didn't find anything wrong with the story. My only concern is that I can't see a future path that the MC is going to take, which is making it a bit hard to anticipate a particular scenario for the futures. My suggestion for the Author would be to slightly increase the monologues or third-person speech to show what exactly MC is planning to do later on. The build up of the fanfic has been smooth and gradual; a bit too gradual, in fact. Right now, I've rated this as 4.2. I will come back and write a new review when I feel that this fanfic is not gonna be dropped anytime soon because from what I can see, it'll take hundreds chapters for this fanfic to be completed. P S: Try to be more detailed about known locations as well. It'll add to the beauty of this story. Your cake(story) is delicious, just icing on the cake(extra details to make the story more colourful) is required. Also, writing a good physical description of characters would also be a good idea. All this would easily add 1-2 more stars to anyone's review, including mine. SORRY FOR THE LONG REVIEW! THANKS! I have given you:- (4/5) for Writing Quality (4/5) for Story Development (4/5) for Character Design (5/5) for Updating Stability (4/5) for World Background. Overall : [4.2/5]
Revelar Spoiler The plot is good. But last chapter the MC was literally monologued about Ace's death which seemed unnecessary. Also in the beginning it seemed that MC didn't have much attachment to ONE PIECE character but now he cries after seeing Luffy,Ace and Sabo.
This novel is nice, although a bit slow paced but has some nice original ideas and plots with regular updates i would have love to read a chapter daily...
This novel got a rewrite after a long time in waiting, and the changes made the story more organic and less emotionless. Hope the author keep improving and Hope that the novel reach it's ending someday.
It's a great story.. I love this.. Not many story which make MC (Leo) have a system, but can't have a devil fruit.. So I can wait to see how the story will going 😁😁👍😍
one of the best one piece fanfics that I've seen in a while it's such a shame that they don't update chapters very often 😕. but yeah this novel is good you should really read it trust me you won't be disappointed.
the story is just boring i dropped in the 1st chapter the protagonist is just a clueless lazybones who really thinks he is in a world where with a word from a person you die and they exist +
Update fast. Update. Update. Update. Update. Update. Update. Update. Update. Update. Update. Update. Update. Update. Update. Update. Update. Update. Updaaaaaaaaaaaate.
I like the system, but I don't like the mc not being able to interfere with the plot a bit too restrictive and being able to return back to earth after the story makes it as though mc is on a trip to one piece where everything is just fantasy and all of the people he met are just characters in a comic. if someone is getting a new life he should die there if not it stops readers from being immersed in the story,it's just like having a harem or being able to eat unlimited devil fruits. it just takes away the pleasure of reading. I just mentioned it as the way you wrote felt like you didn't want the mc to simply get all the girls and stand on top of the world and become a young master who cuts buddha if he stands in his way and cuts devil in his way that kind of protagonist. It's a good read and don't drop.
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I liked it a lot, i'm still waiting for a new chapter :) 👍 I wanted to see how could the MC interact with the strawhats and specially with nami.
One of the best one piece fan fiction I have ever read Pls continue to update More More More More More More More More More More More More More More More More More More More More More
Thanks for your effort ! I'm a new reader.. and I think your story got better every chapter. I hope there aren't any future chapter for faint hearted people.. ( like myself Ó╭╮Ò). 2 is enough ᕙ(⇀‸↼‶)ᕗ
the reason people who are described in this type of situation usually train like crazy is simple and realistic, because they want to guarantee their SURVIVAL. crazy is to know that if you are in such a dangerous world and do nothing to try to have ways to react if something goes wrong, even more if you receive gifts as a body that has no growth limits, we as a highly adaptable race are capable you can believe in changing from the lazy to the fighters, the excuse is stupid that just because the training is difficult you give up, maybe that in a peaceful world or in a situation that is not in danger focuses on something reasonable, but in a world that can literally screw with you and those you like to simply continue a restful life would be idiotic.
useless mc useless mc he's already in one piece world and you made him such a useless mc who's scared to even train what a useless mc useless mc useless mc useless mc useless mc he's already in one piece world and you made him such a useless mc who's scared to even train what a useless mc useless mc useless mc
mais mais mais mais mais mais mais mais mais mais mais mais mais mais mais mais mais mais mais mais mais mais mais mais mais mais mais mais mais mais mais mais mais mais mais mais
mais mais mais mais mais mais mais mais mais mais mais mais mais mais mais mais mais mais mais mais mais mais mais mais mais mais mais mais mais mais mais mais mais mais mais mais
muito bom,mc muito bem desenvolvido,por favor não ligue pra comentarios que só tem a intenção de ofender,muitos são apenas crianças molengas que não sabem apreciar a historia. continue com o bom trabalho...............
MC fanboying is too annoying and ruined the story. also being an excessive pushover is waaaayyy too ridiculous and idiotic. I don't know what the author's intention, but your character development is trash and needs improvement.
Best reading experience ever! You are a good writer.I approve. I really like your work please keep up the good work and moar chapter. Most of the fanfics I've read are bs but yours is quite different and more realistic and makes sense.
Yea so there is one problem with this book, the main character. I normally wouldn't complain about the mc since i already see them often called cucks, cowards and many other exaggerated descriptions. But this is the first book i've read where the mc is WORTHLESS, in theory he reincarnated from being 25 but he actually acts like a child. Scared of pirates, to scared to train himself with simulated combat and too lazy to train himself with weights. And then IN THE WORLD OF ONE PIECE he is surprised when things go wrong and he cant do anything. I wouldn't even complain about the mc being a coward or lazy because that is the writer's choice to have that kind of mc. But I will not read a book where the main character who is supposedly 25 and know's one piece is scared when pirates show up and has to be soothed by his mother and who cant even think up a good plan for them to escape. Basically i gave it a 1 in all category simple because the main character is worthless in every way imaginable.
I like the story how mc and his friend go all in for killing pirates ty for this work author well i see many ppl saying bad stuff about the start... but i dont think ppl understand how it is completely normal to just let your life play itself a 2nd time instead of start training directly. he knew it was one piece world but he just didnt train becuz we are humans and its normal to not be perfect simple...
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Nice and realistic story, I like how the MC needs a wake up call as I always considered idiotic how all the Reincarnators decide to train relentlessly and become strong the moment they wake up, it's stupid, none of us first world people would start an harsh training regiment without having similar experiences before reincarnation or a concrete and urgent need for it, come on we all think that martial arts are cool as ****, but how many do actually start practicing them without abandoning after few moths at most?