Into the Zombie World

LV 14

Neil_Ads

Caution! I've made a mistake and there is a lot of info dump in the early chapters. Although I cannot guarantee it, I am doing my best not to repeat this in the future. This story revolves on the Main Character Nile who transmigrated in the world full of zombie. I will focus on him and his development. As a newbie author, I know I will make a lot mistakes during this journey. I apologize in advance for that. I am open for critics(no harsh words please), that way I know where I am lacking and what should I improve more. If you have any suggestions and tips to improve my writing, please do tell me about it.

LV 14

Neil_Ads

Please Guys. Don't review this novel without reading at all. Saying something like, I love your novel blah blah. You have a good plot blah blah blah. And then posting your novel's link at the end of the review asking for a review as well. That's not a review at all. That's promoting. Please, guys, there is a forum to promote your novel. My novel is not the forum. I know I'm not a good author, but I just don't want to shoo away potential readers just because of your false and flowery review. Again, it's bad for my novel. And I don't think you would love something like that to happen to you, as well. I would immediately delete review like that so don't bother at all, you'll just waste your time. Thanks.

LV 15

Baulpen

I actually bypassed this before as I thought it will be a book where people simply try to survive a zombie apocalypse. Having had the chance to read it now made me realize that this actually is a gem. I was surprised when the author used terms from our local dialect. It is refreshing! I can also relate to the humor the author used as these are common in our country (sabihin mo salamat shafefe 😂). Will look forward to more chapters and fantastic ideas. Great job! Keep it up!

Into the Zombie World is a book of fiction written by Neil_Ads. The story revolves around a man named Nile who sought to survive a zombie apocalypse after his untimely death by being bumped by a truck. The author uses present-tense. Well, it is a good story. Personally, what I love about the book is Nile's intelligence and the way he reacts to certain things. He thinks logically, making the right choice except for the store as he could've looted the first three houses instead of choosing the store. I love his plans and schemes to get rid off or defeat zombies. I think there is a mixture of futuristic technology since there is this so called system that displays certain things. I'm not used to reading these kind of novel mixtures. Anyway, the grammar and punctuation is definitely one thing the author must improve. Yes, it uses present-tense but because of this, it seems more like a guy telling actions rather than a describing and story-telling. He is walking, He is going, he is banging, things like that should be changed. Because of this, it lacks emotions and some elements of a horror novel. You could describe the zombies more rather than using Big, small, fat, or sharp teeth. I didn't feel any suspense except for the parts in which the dialogues weren't aplenty. I would like to suggest that you describe things like this: Example: His leg were trembling. Try going to the next level: His legs were noodles. Or to add more suspense and frightening elements, I would suggest: Example: The silence shrouded his mind. (Lacks emotions) "Once the quietness arrived, it stayed and spread in Estha. It reached out of his head and enfolded him in its swampy arms…sent its stealthy, suckered tentacles inching along the insides of his skull, hoovering the knolls and dells of his memory, dislodging old sentences, whisking them off the tip of his tongue." Something like that. Well, I hope this honest criticism helped out!

LV 6

SaxonViolence

This story was rather rickety to begin with. It is random and filled with ham-handed Information Dumps. The Protagonist is an Idiot. I tried hard to hang in there despite the roughness of the story, because at the end of the day, I just like Zombie Stories. It was kinda weird when the protagonist got orgasmic feelings from probing Zombie brains with his finger…EE…The breaking point was when the Protagonist DIDN'T WANT to look muscular and buff. I get more tired of this Fetish against manly physiques in these stories EVERY TIME I ENCOUNTER IT. Damned Nation! You can't argue that someone like Bolo Yeung is slow and awkward—or grotesque. I guess having a manly physique ruins one's cross-dressing.

LV 14

Jasonenrick

Well, I just wrote a super ass long review and I am not ready or willing to write another one, sorry author, maybe next time! Short, it isn't good but also not that bad. I dropped it already, so there's that. It is interesting but far too babysitter kind for me. For me, a good Zombie Novel is a badass solo dude who maybe finds a badass sexy companion who together with the Mc slays monster and zombies and maybe discover the reason behind the Zombie Apocalypse. This Story is a beta version for me and a Story for Simps, sorry again to the author. Not the type of story I would read but every person has a different taste, so my simp friends, go get it.

LV 3

Hua_Li_An

Fellow Pinoy here! Anyway, I've only read a few chapters, but here's my review on it. Things to improve: First off, there is an obvious approach to action and since it's a zombie novel, it is a must to have action-filled chapters. However, although the author does try to execute this, it can fall flat. Maybe it's because there's not much the readers know about Nile himself, or what even drives him. If it is simply for survival, then the narratives and descriptive words should be improved on more to elicit the right emotions. Good points: The author knows where the story is supposed to go, and Nile's actions are logical. It's also interesting to know there are "interesting zombies", which might be a turning point for the story. To conclude, it's a good story with an easy-to-read format. It can be a good zombie novel and holds potential.

LV 13

ParagonBonemancer

this got high ratings so i tried it. pretty good concept, but why do you have info dumps in every chapter? first 12 chapters and what do we got? yes you keep saying that you're a beginner writer BUT you could've learned from your predecessors right? chapters are short. At the end of some chapters you said they're a long one, but that's just because of the info dumps. dang there's even a chapter where he only change clothes and inform us his favorite color which is red and black . and don't you try delete this review . already skimmed those chapters up to 60+ but still, can't really bring myself to read this one. anyways, nice try and learn more.

LV 14

Neil_Ads

As the author I am not confident on this novel, so if you ever like it just say so on the chapter comments or you can give a review. As long as there are readers, I will do my best to update daily. And of course I will rate my own work 5 stars. Thank you!

LV 4

Daoist_Red_Reads

Keep in mind that I just gave up at around chapter 40. I will try to explain my ratings I am ok with the different buildings as long as there is a comparison. And I am sure alot are alright with it. I usually just dismiss those as fantasy buildings when the info dumps comes in and finally, since I am a filipino, am alright once there are no info dumps. The reason as to why I rated it 4 is the over explaining things. Like memory and even a katana; the katana was even described with different words, 5 of them in fact. The info dumps are too much. It is nice to have info dumps but there is just too many. In the whole 40 chapters, it felt like more than half of those chapters are info dumps, unnecessary infodumps even. The main character is fine up until his attitude turned 180. The character is good and is not provoked easily, later on he saved a group of people then after that he found another group of people. Those guys just warned him not to go there, there was no reason for conflict but then the main character fights the group cause he didn't like what he said 😒. He is pretty generic to me so I wanted it at 4 but that attitude change reminded me of the other powerfantasy novels with horrible plot like space martial god. Which really just soured my experience so this review might be a little lower than like a -0.1 in ratings than the one I had in mind. The world is explained in an annoying way. Could have kept some mystery but decided to just push many of it's secret out. Other than that not that bad so 3. I could have made it 4 or 5 but those info dumps destroyed the atmostsphere of the world for me. Overall rating is 3.7 for me but due to my biased judgement. -0.1 which makes it 3.6. Maybe it gets better but I just don't have the patience to read novels like these anymore.

LV 2

uniqueanime2

Usual apocalyptic stories are really hard to explain, but you explain it very well😭😭. _my favorite line is "Nike is using his jaywalking skills to the maxium" hilariously funny. _characters well presented😇 _the 2 chapter at the beginning have me naruto vibes😂😂 As for suggestions there's none really but keep your story understandable when it comes to action parts.

LV 5

Dares

Do not take it into your heart so much. I hope it will help you to progress. Thb its boring, so much useless info something about villages, virus+virus, zombie 1-4 and four system chaps.. I think you should focus more on story dev to graduate it and these chaps point it in 2-4 sentences. Tons of system in novels. Your like trial version, provided info and bye.. nothing playfull, funny.. Its like system how are u? Yes. "o__o". I believe you can do better because i voted for this novel. Add some missions, rewards etc be more creative.

LV 3

Chinnu_002

Hi guys,I really appreciate the fantasy world the author has created...you really refine the finer details about the world you are talking about and it's pretty easily picturised in my mind...hope you keep us posted with more chapters...it's a good book to chill with..💚

LV 14

Mr_Ryu

Ganda niti pre hanip. Recommend ko to sa mga hindi pa naka basa nito. Sa filipino makaka relate kato agad hahaha. Add niyo to sa library ninyo at maaaliw kaayo sa pag basa. Yun lang salamat

LV 4

xhdjhsjsjsjs

i found the concept of the story interesting. it isnt like those cliche Apocalypse novel where mc returns back to past and eats the crystal found inside the head of a zombie( which people are totally fine to eat something that is inside the brain of a rotting, gross zombie. no hesitation at all for cannibalism) to get stronger. the one major problem for this novel is grammar. along with several gramatical errors, the author used many words without even knowing the meaning of it which makes the whole sentence sound totally weird. i'd say just use simple words to write your story. correct and simple sentences are worth far more than sentences with fancy words that doesnt make any sense. and i would like to suggest that you edit your starting chapters. if your starting is bad then many people wont bother reading your novel and search for another one. i suggest using grammarly for solving gramatical errors. overall id say the story is interesting but bad grammar puts it off. dropping it now( as of ch 6) but maybe will pick it up in future if the author polishes the starting chapters

It was an okay read. But its kinda below average for a zombie novel. There is no sense of tension or fear when reading this and instead of putting up a frightening scene or atmosphere, the author decided to push some info dumps in your throat. It was okay if the info dumps was original but the it was the big baddie government and the failed experiment virus. When setting up a zombie novel the author should have put some tension like show the victims its impact to the world and stuff. They were only mentioned but it relied on just telling aspect which was kinda underwhelming in my opinion.

LV 4

Demon_Noah07

It's a pretty good story and a proper though out the MC has a good system but doesn't make him OP in an instant only gives him a multitude of options to choose from, The MC doesn't get everything served in a platter but has to work for it, The plot is properly thought out and we'll developed with even proper world development and character design, the only problem being the update as I personally requested the author to write it on discord but he still didn't I wish he did but I guess he lost interest in the story, I will be honest it was the only good apocalypse novel I read after reading multiple of trash or Chinese xenophobic or stereotypical novels and I read it till the latest chapters, the story was well throughout and explored which made me interested in the story but sadly the author lost interest, I personally wouldn't mind being spoiled if the author in future plans to drop it, I will be more than grateful if you tell me the future development and plot and everything you were planning 'incase' you are going to drop it, That's all I wanted to say thank you

LV 13

Blazing

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LV 14

Fideis

Typical reincarnation system novel except with zombies and evolutions instead of cultivation. Overall, the writing has tons of mistakes even 70 chapters in and constantly distracts you from the story. Next, Im assuming the author isnt a native english speaker so they use different terms for cities, towns, etc. and gets very confusing. The author also repeats a lot of info and sometimes incorrectly which can lead to confusion also. So if you like it, read it if you want but i put my piece here.

LV 14

Jkesse

please get an editor, while i didnt see any spelling errors which makes me happy, the sentence structure is awful. also please check to make sure that you arent trying to make a wors that doesnt have a plural form into a plural word. preys should just be prey, i didnt see it but please dont use equipments just equipment, etc