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Chapters are too short, put some more effort into maybe adding some extra details. Please check grammar mistakes also, I see this so many times. Maybe add a chapter where Mc surprises the executives and maybe meeting new people. Add a bit of character development for him by making him doing some good deeds such as helping poor people. Anyway, you have a good start off, just be more careful. It’s saddening to see all these great story plots, only to be let down with poor writing and lack of emotion in the story. Using poor words to describe certain scenarios, making characters have a very obvious pattern at which how they talk/act. Having complex characters are awesome.
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Chapters are too short, put some more effort into maybe adding some extra details. Please check grammar mistakes also, I see this so many times. Maybe add a chapter where Mc surprises the executives and maybe meeting new people. Add a bit of character development for him by making him doing some good deeds such as helping poor people. Anyway, you have a good start off, just be more careful. It’s saddening to see all these great story plots, only to be let down with poor writing and lack of emotion in the story. Using poor words to describe certain scenarios, making characters have a very obvious pattern at which how they talk/act. Having complex characters are awesome.