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disappointed big time. the writing quality got better at ch40+, then worsening at 60+. also the author stretched the story too much by making multiple pov about different people except the mc that will make you lose interest on this novel even though the mc's pov is almost in his climax, more than 10+ ch of cliffhanger before we see the mc again.
[img=coins][img=coins][img=coins][img=coins] hay! can you please add an option in the system "daily quest" with rare consumables as a reward [img=coins][img=coins][img=coins][img=coins][img=coins][img=coins][img=coins]
Is it just me or is the mc useless in this fanfic. .......................................................................................
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I think this Fan-fic had a Great Potential, but the grammar is bad and sometimes you can‘t understand what the **** is going on. one critical is that the story is jumping from one side story to another and i don’t know what the main storyline is after the 20th chapter.
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well it's not a bad story just very very very confusing and the mc is pushed all over the world (at first he didn't bother with anyone else he clings to people for nothing)
Wouldn't recommend. Although good start on book but towards the latter the author becomes undecided on the plot. Can't focus on mc building, can't do proper grammar continuously, all that's good was the plot......WAS.......until he destroyed it by focusing on a side character. Well it's to be expected to drop I mean he can't even focus on his MC how can he develop a story without developing the actual MC.
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You are writing a great story don't take the bad reviews to heart and use them to update the story in a better way. From personal experience the story has been great so far and your Granger has also improved 😁😁😁
Honestly I feel like the author writes what comes to mind but is too lazy to explain ****, maybe the idea of the novel was good but the final product was below average, I gave 4 stars for update rate and 2 stars for the rest, world background was going to be higher if he didn't change the plot but because he ****ed up his new plot it went down......
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Pretty awful the grammar was bad enough I got a headache from my brain auto correcting it and the spelling too much the story has no foundation the author reacts poorly to criticism he breaks the normal rules of world which is good if done right it wasn't the mc is pretty much copy and paste from every other novel no such thing as character depth or development Splish Splash 140 character limit is trash Splish Splash 140 character limit is trash Splish Splash 140 character limit is trash Splish Splash 140 character limit is trash Splish Splash 140 character limit is trash Splish Splash 140 character limit is trash Splish Splash 140 character limit is trash Splish Splash 140 character limit is trash Splish Splash 140 character limit is trash
I didn't create this to pleased all people Trash? So be it. . .thank you But I'm not pathetic enough to bicker to those who antagonize me. . . THIS ISN'T PAID I created this not jus for 'you' but those who enjoy my story So. . .to current or future readers. Don't hate what I lack and instead guide me. Thats all! PLUS ULTR—— oops wrong Anime
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Too many skips !!! No Foundation at all to understand basic consept of the world the MC is in... its like a continuation part of previews story or novel that i didnt know... and "a body that moves on its own before the decision" is a low level and illogila reasoning ! Its PLOT is not define cause of skipping ! It lacks enough explaination and world building !!! POORLY MADE FANFIC !
I am the Shameless author who rate his own Work high. . . This is HAREM. Indeed it is, but not to the point that the MC had so many girls fighting for him in a broad day light; or girls that fough for him with their life on the line. Or even have an inter'course one after another or one to many. Not that kind of Harem this novil has. I say, as an author a 'Casual-Harem' or 'Psuedo-Harem' because I focus on character development and of course story plot. Theres kind of romance but not too excessive. So those who want harem, I say, yes 'there' is but like what a say, a s psuedo form And those who hate it. I say, I'm sorry... Welp thats all I, author thanking those who read my every chaps and of course those commentators **: Webnovel is a Troll
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A pretty good novel, there's something off about volume 1, but after that the story gets better. 👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍☝👇👈👉👈👉
You should give the MC a quest becuse he did have a system. It's quite good to read I just wish that you make more scene with MC and Artemis.
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Can the MC have a harem. And make him save haruhime and make the MC ask her to join atemis familia? And can you make his gamer ability have a A.I?
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disappointed big time. the writing quality got better at ch40+, then worsening at 60+. also the author stretched the story too much by making multiple pov about different people except the mc that will make you lose interest on this novel even though the mc's pov is almost in his climax, more than 10+ ch of cliffhanger before we see the mc again.
[img=coins][img=coins][img=coins][img=coins] hay! can you please add an option in the system "daily quest" with rare consumables as a reward [img=coins][img=coins][img=coins][img=coins][img=coins][img=coins][img=coins]
Is it just me or is the mc useless in this fanfic. .......................................................................................
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I think this Fan-fic had a Great Potential, but the grammar is bad and sometimes you can‘t understand what the **** is going on. one critical is that the story is jumping from one side story to another and i don’t know what the main storyline is after the 20th chapter.
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well it's not a bad story just very very very confusing and the mc is pushed all over the world (at first he didn't bother with anyone else he clings to people for nothing)
Wouldn't recommend. Although good start on book but towards the latter the author becomes undecided on the plot. Can't focus on mc building, can't do proper grammar continuously, all that's good was the plot......WAS.......until he destroyed it by focusing on a side character. Well it's to be expected to drop I mean he can't even focus on his MC how can he develop a story without developing the actual MC.
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Revelar Spoiler You are writing a great story don't take the bad reviews to heart and use them to update the story in a better way. From personal experience the story has been great so far and your Granger has also improved 😁😁😁
Honestly I feel like the author writes what comes to mind but is too lazy to explain ****, maybe the idea of the novel was good but the final product was below average, I gave 4 stars for update rate and 2 stars for the rest, world background was going to be higher if he didn't change the plot but because he ****ed up his new plot it went down......
Revelar Spoiler Pretty awful the grammar was bad enough I got a headache from my brain auto correcting it and the spelling too much the story has no foundation the author reacts poorly to criticism he breaks the normal rules of world which is good if done right it wasn't the mc is pretty much copy and paste from every other novel no such thing as character depth or development Splish Splash 140 character limit is trash Splish Splash 140 character limit is trash Splish Splash 140 character limit is trash Splish Splash 140 character limit is trash Splish Splash 140 character limit is trash Splish Splash 140 character limit is trash Splish Splash 140 character limit is trash Splish Splash 140 character limit is trash Splish Splash 140 character limit is trash
I didn't create this to pleased all people Trash? So be it. . .thank you But I'm not pathetic enough to bicker to those who antagonize me. . . THIS ISN'T PAID I created this not jus for 'you' but those who enjoy my story So. . .to current or future readers. Don't hate what I lack and instead guide me. Thats all! PLUS ULTR—— oops wrong Anime
Revelar Spoiler Too many skips !!! No Foundation at all to understand basic consept of the world the MC is in... its like a continuation part of previews story or novel that i didnt know... and "a body that moves on its own before the decision" is a low level and illogila reasoning ! Its PLOT is not define cause of skipping ! It lacks enough explaination and world building !!! POORLY MADE FANFIC !
I am the Shameless author who rate his own Work high. . . This is HAREM. Indeed it is, but not to the point that the MC had so many girls fighting for him in a broad day light; or girls that fough for him with their life on the line. Or even have an inter'course one after another or one to many. Not that kind of Harem this novil has. I say, as an author a 'Casual-Harem' or 'Psuedo-Harem' because I focus on character development and of course story plot. Theres kind of romance but not too excessive. So those who want harem, I say, yes 'there' is but like what a say, a s psuedo form And those who hate it. I say, I'm sorry... Welp thats all I, author thanking those who read my every chaps and of course those commentators **: Webnovel is a Troll
Revelar Spoiler A pretty good novel, there's something off about volume 1, but after that the story gets better. 👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍☝👇👈👉👈👉
You should give the MC a quest becuse he did have a system. It's quite good to read I just wish that you make more scene with MC and Artemis.
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Can the MC have a harem. And make him save haruhime and make the MC ask her to join atemis familia? And can you make his gamer ability have a A.I?
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