The Great Journey With a System

LV 15

Etiger789

I sort of like the story but the mc is all kinds of ****ed up.I get people hated yun che becouse he did manipulate kill and also rape one of his future wives.But doing and torturing and putting him throgh this and also manipulating the mc's future wives is no fucking difrent if not worse then what yun che did.yes he killed alot but who hasent in that kind of world and environment.yes he manipulated but he cared and risked his life for them.The mc is just basically going after what yun che would have.it just feels like childish and petty jealousy gone beyond yandere wifu level.it dosent even feel like the Mc will love them only goes for them becouse of there beauty. He goes from being a hero saving a little girls life to being reincarnated as roach as he was a hero to manipulating xia qingyue with lies about being a self proclaimed hero to then torchering and tormenting Yun che mentally for I don't even no because he hadn't even said why he's don't it or why he hates yun che.so it's kind of ****ed up.but hey that's what fan fiction are these days. So even tho people may like this type of genre it's not for me. P.S And author if your resulting on deleting people's truthful opinions about you novel like my last review it means your insecure and dont like to see bad coments and reviews.And if so just think and read the reviews of all the people who do like you story and ignore the bad ones.you may think becouse I'm giving a low rating that I'm belittling your hard work because thats not the case at all.its just that I don't like this particular story structure and the Mc's personality. You have great sentence structures.good punctuation you have thought of your plot and had it planed out unlike some where they just write it on the spot.(guilty as charged 😅😅😅)So have more confidence.good luck with you novel.

LV 5

Farmy

If you HATE dumbass MC that share his system rebirth secret, well this is one of those. -.- -----------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------

LV 4

DripItachi

Cool Anime System is among tg best fanfics that I've ever read. It was really funny, amusing and "cool" with the system.. and I was a bit depressed that it was dropped all of a sudden.. But unlike the other readers I quite liked the whole Itachi-Sasuke drama presented during the tournament.. I was literally grinning while the whole scene was going on... I mean come on..who wouldn't find it hilarious when a guy who was quite awkward and a shut-in in real life tried to act cool with Itachi's persona... Well I admit that the ending where he confronts the real Itachi and the rest was quite bad..But overall, it was a very very fun read.. And to make matters worse, the novel was deleted....dammitt!!! I wanted to re-read that awesomeness once more only to find it removed from webnovel and wattpad.. but later I found it in wattpad in another language...which ofcourse can be resolved by accessing the novel through Google chrome and using the "Translate" option in the menu.. Then one day I was browsing through webnovel when I stumbled upon this and to my surprise and delight...a novel inspired by my favorite fanfic has been born.. Ah! What a delight that was.. I hope that you won't leave out any of Yun Che's harem members including Cang Yue(the rest of the fanfics didn't do any Justice to her.. it was thanks to her schemes that Yun Che got to marry Feng Xue smoothly), LDE(Little Demon Empress).. These two chicks were especially the ones that got ignored by those transmigrated bastards...I don't actually mind whether you include or ignore Little Aunt or Su Ling as their hearts were already taken my Yun Che.. But I especially don't mind if you include them in the harem, further enraging that bastard Che..🤣 I hope you won't let the MC be a psychopath like YC killing Innocents.. only kill when the opposite party shows clear ill intent and not just due to any sort of misunderstanding.. So my Lord author, please don't drop this like CAS.. I'm really looking forward to this being continued along with the original ATG. I'll give you all the power stones I can possibly offer.. And one last thing... ignore those overly negative comments.. there will always be haters.. h.ell, even a saint such as Mother Teresa had haters. Just don't take it to heart and continue with this fanfic.. I fully support you my brother👍

LV 3

StrikingWave

If you like: - Stupid MC telling everyone his secrets - Stupid MC who have many system points and don't use it - Stupid MC that reveals he has a system - Stupid MC who use his system points in other instead of himself - Stupid MC who gift powers to other that can kill him - Clone f*cking the "harem" of the MC - Stupid author which his only answers for the sh*ts he does is *for future plot* Then... Enjoy the reading :)

LV 15

Caliburns

Personally like the novel. There are a few questionable decisions and the grammar could improve a bit, but I still find it very enjoyable. ----------------------------

LV 2

WhoWATTwhereWhenWh

I am currently at the latest chapter (61). I am actually not a huge fan of 'romance' between Mesa and other characters. They say that they 'love' him but they 'love' him in the first place only because Mesa is overpowered; which is not really love. I would rather Mesa move away from materialistic attachments and find meaning for himself; to grow as a character. Please make him tell his thots to f*** off no matter how cold it may seem. I would rather jerk off in p***hub than read s*x scenes. - Writing quality is good (4/5) -Updates are good (4/5) - Story development is meh (2/5) : Explain to me why God loves him so much (I don't care about karma... he could have molested dogs after microwaving them for all I care) : I personally hate Gods (not counted in this rating (i did not mark you down for this as this is a popular trope)) : Mesa's whole life seems meaningless; go to one place show them I am strong, f**k some b*tch*s, go to another place show them I am strong, f**k some b*tch*s... at some point he should realize that all is for none... he should grow tired and commit seppuku (I would). -Character design : meh (2/5) : Maybe against the God's has superficial characters so I can't blame you here but the men usually seem very prideful and the women are very greedy and bi**hy; a bit like the real world. Conclusion: Real world has sh**tty character design. MY OPINION MATTERS SO LISTEN TO ME; sorry I am a prideful person and I have a sh**tty character design. -World Background : Okay (3/5) : The world exists. I don't know what more to say but it just looks like a 3/5. It's like looking at someones face; it's hard to explain whether someone is attractive or not.

LV 5

SuzakuOkita

Autor have wet dreams and write what he dream .. Mc was cold and fucking psychopatch... Mutch worse than oryginal Mc. Bad Bad Bad. Only Anime system help series... I don t recomend...

LV 5

johnmyth

I feel like this story is for people who hate the main character from the original story(yun che). The biggest arguments against him is usually the killing too many people thing(burning heaven clan) and the "" rape "" I use quotation marks because I'm totally on the side of If I need to do this for you to survive ill do it. In other words life over chastity. And for the most part anybody who argues against it is an idiot. As for the heavy killing thing I feel like in cultivation oriented novels its definitely the right way to go otherwise you will suffer.Now don't get me wrong I completely had moments where I wanted to slap yun che for being reckless and stupid sometimes but overall I could appreciate the way he did things in general. Now I went into that simply because the story sounds so petty and its forced and awkward the way you did things. It felt like this to me: I don't like this guy, I'm gonna go into his world take away all his advantages that makes him strong in the future, give myself some really strong powers, and seduce and make most his future women mine. I felt that was petty. Now for the forced and awkward parts you kinda put yourself in the path yun che took when it was completely unnecessary like the fight with Murong Yi is completely meaningless when your so much stronger than him. Another thing is how you used normal tricks and changed the personalities of xia qingyue and chu yuecchan and ******* just to get them to like you and be in your harem. There were many things you used to get their attention and fondness to you that really wouldn't work on them. The last thing which is kinda weird is that I feel like the MC an this novel is " I'm an alpha, hear me roar, I'm gonna have really cool powers get into fights and bang hot chicks:" which is totally fine with me as long as it doesn't start to not make a lot of sense. But the way the MC comes off feels like one of those "Arrogant young master" personalities except he's actually strong. Apart from that your writing and updates are good which is really important for an author.So good luck with this novel and future works hopefully.

LV 7

Melshan

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linFan

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LV 6

ZzAaZzOo777

Thanks author for the good novel 🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍...........................................................................

LV 14

Azathothgrim

I only hope this to be good and the author should not drop it cuz I want to read an ATG FF novel which goes further than floating cloud city.

LV 11

EijiSeishuu

lol mc hates yun che's personality but his personality is worse than yun che ..................................................................................................................................

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LV 4

Mauve

I'm really sceptical about this novel. The story doesn't seem like it's going anywhere, and the plot is forced to proceed as the original, which makes it so disturbing. The system isn't most OP out there but still so OP. The world building is taken from the original novel, but described really briefly. The MC is mentally retarded and a freak (not a good way), he's so unlikable that he goes everywhere telling people about his system and someone's else sad story as his own, that even a child can tell that this idiot can't be the cool guy in his story. MC that talks so much explaining his every ability in every detail possible and its future developments isn't anyone's cup of tea.I literally had a headache following. I understand there's no need for "mystery" or "suspense" here, but even if you don't want, there has to be some so that it won't be as boring as it sounds.

LV 3

Mavee

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LV 4

MightyDick

OP = OVER POWER dont put op tag if the mc is not. strong to stronger is better. DROP THIS NOVEL!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

LV 14

FBI_B1TCH

You deleted my review? Seriously? If I remember correctly, ny last review was around 3 stars but this time around you get a big fat 0 for deleting my review.