The Saga of A Mage Family

LV 1

WHBA

I am curious about what's the reference used behind the stage. Hohoho.. Seems like I recognized one It's getting interesting chapter by chapter Keep up the good work Cheers!

LV 4

Ruddkillz

I can't stand reading novels that are poorly referenced. But this novel is different. You will find heavy references even though they contain LN-style themes. I think, this is similar to the Nicholas Cage's movie, The Apprentice

LV 4

DragonTreasures

I like the start of the story, and I like the system you have in the story. Jack also is a good character, and I feel like you have good command of emotions when you write. There are some unnecessary explanations about blackholes, wormholes, and T-Rex's that I feel kind of detract from the story. For instance, in the start of the second chapter, I got a little thrown off by the part where you started explaining how black holes work. (Side note: Please work on grammar tenses because for a seasoned reader it can hurt their eyes) Try to protect the flow of the story, and when you read it see if anything makes you feel off. Hope this review helps,and hope to see you have more chapters churning out with more improvements and more succinct dialog. (It's not recommended to have a wall of text, even if its dialog.)

LV 5

Chryiss

The beginning chapter was very good, but from there on I was confused about what was happening. The events sorta skipped around, and I’m not sure what’s up with Sarah’s situation. Your writing at times is very good! I liked a lot of your phrasing, but in general it lacked consistency across all chapters. There’re a few typos, mostly formatting of punctuation, but they can be easily fixed with proofreading. At this point, it’s too early to make out the characters. I haven’t yet gotten a feel on any of the characters’ personalities yet. So far, Meyrlion piques my interest the most. Sarah has a tail! That’s pretty usual, so it’s a nice point of difference from other stories and their MCs. In short, I can see the potential in this story and your style of writing, but for now, the jumpy plot and loose reader’s understanding of the characters and settings make it hard to follow the storyline. Good job so far though, keep it up! (:

LV 4

Alaheeza

The best part about the novel is it's amazing background and out of the box characters! Waiting for more chapters to release! Keep up the good work dear author! 😊

LV 10

TJc

The story started well. Enganging. You can grasp an in-depth idea of the characters' emotion through the writing. On the grammar thingy, minor mistakes but does not affect the story flow. Keep going Author!

LV 3

NSI2018

Great. Keep up the goodwork. Meyrlion is my fav so far. Hope the world design will be great. Jack is bad boy. Please put more attention to update schedule

LV 4

Nzoputa

Like your story so far, and I'm glad how you take your time to explain stuff, like how the black hole works and all. Really great concept, and interesting characters.

LV 4

PeachyPearl

When I started reading I thought I'll just read a few chapters then leave but it's just too good to be left... Oh have some mercy and please don't create such an amazing work that I forgot my own work. Haha just kidding. I had a marvelous time reading it. The quality of writing improved in the latest chapters. I'm glad for that. Yes there are glitches here and there but since you're improving it's already quite good. The characters you designed with the amount of detail given (sorry at some places it was unnecessary) it was worth my read. Keep creating this amazing world author. Looking forward to read more.

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