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The writing is atrocious. The author doesn't seem to realize that they can rewrite and edit what they have written. The first 20 or so chapters are especially egregious and actively detract from the story. 0/10 for execution.
I enjoy reading it, enough said. If the translation was better it would be in the top 20 if not not 10 instead of the top 50 it is at now.
hello, Can you review my book----------------------------------------------------------------THE PART OF NO RETURN : FIRST HUMAN EMPIRE------------------------------ Please
could barely read this do to the grammar in this story needs some major edits at least for English unsure if its correct in other languages but English definitely not
I don't know if you are reading this or not, but bro, the writer, can you tell me why the first person pov? 100% If the novel was in third person and had a narrator instead of MC's own thoughts, the ranking of this novel would be much higher and the readers would increase many times. It's really a shame. I think if I give the novel itself a score of 7.5/10, but when MC explains everything, the score of the novel will be 4/10. good luck Of course, if the novel is rewritten from the beginning in the third person, it will be very good. in a dream
First, why did the non-privileged chapter release change? They are still releasing chapters but we can’t read them apparently. I like the book. It’s different from others in a lot of novel ways. Even if it has grammar errors and translation quirks, it is easily understandable. Way better than a lot of those mtl novels out there (though with AI, they are getting better). Main character always gets out of scrapes, but that’s every novel. And there are certainly many repetitive story arcs, but that’s a genre thing. And they are usually at least somewhat different. I didn’t like the weird teacher romance, but other novels are way worse. At least there are always new scenarios that keep it interesting and the greater world building is also more well-done and complex than many novels. I recommend.
the story overall is readable, but it's very frustrating: 1 - starting with his first pet, and only one, in this story the first pet decide your talent your maximum level your speed of development, and here we find our MC chosing the weakest monster outthere as his starting one while having the choice of much much better ones, which limited him to a specialist and with the wickest talent. i read till 500 ch and to me if he chose anyother pet and used the ressources wasted on the current one he would have become OP, but no the mc should be a weakling. 2 - the moment he met his crush he started simping to her no dignity no nothing. so read at your risk
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Didn't get far before I had to drop this. But I still feel I have been generous with the stars. So, the reason I had to drop this book is primarily the grammar, but also the way the author writes generally. If you can look past obvious mistakes every few lines and what feels like a 14 year pokemon fanfic go nuts. Also, how the hell can you claim chapters are editted when even the first chapter is full of mistakes .. so gl reading this, and if you get past my highest chapter read: ffs get some standards !
Full of typing errors, wrong grammar, inconsistent information(especially on the current level of characters)
Please someone tell me that the writing is going to get better after chapter 1000? 🙏🏻🙏🏻 How is it possible that even after 1000 chapter, the writing quality is not improving? 🫠 The story is great, but man, I really wish it would have a better grammar.
Even since MC learned healing It's just copy paste & repeat everytime MC helps someone using his own resources that person will get some kind hidden potential unlock than. MC get trapped or caputred than breakthrough and escape just repeat it every few chapters.
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este é um daqueles poucos livros que cria um gênero proprio, se tiver que escolher entre meus 3 livros favoritos com certeza será este. não é um romance clichê que o personagem ganha tudo automaticamente, ou se torna super forte do dia pra noite e sai solando tudo inclusive aliados. resumindo tem um mundo incrivel e personagem que ajudam a moldar estes cenários.
Beside the obvious, grammar; lack of reasonable motivation; and redundant leveling system, the story still suck. There fight are boring and just overall torturous to read. The story might get better, but from what I see it take 1000 chapter. Good luck if you decide to read.
The story is quite good it's worth reading. But only if you are ready to experience a very badly written story. First grammar was bad then the author started writing wrong names of characters like around ch550 MC' s love interests was introduced named Rachel. She is the sister of MC's friend's girlfriend named Sarah . This writer wrote Sarah's name at many places where he should have written Rachel. After all those mindf*cks I am still reading this. I don't know why
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Interesting world, decent characters, REPETITIVE. Everyone treats MC like trash, even when he brings top organizations multiple golden geeze and proves himself better, then their top tallents.Things are not getting any better.
The speed of the story is a little slow, but the character and the world are written with lots of thought, and I hope to read the novel till its last chapter
I just want to ask if Ellen or Jim are gonna come back in the story? Anwan, please respond.
The novel is really really good. Yah the grammer and sentences are quite troublesome but its not that much of a headache that people are making it. I've always longed for a novel like this and yeah, i really like it.
I've been reading this for what feels like years now and it's still good. Solid writing, good characters, great story !
Very bad spelling almost unreadable. The idea was good but the author just messed it up. 1/10
I have read 3700+ chapters, honestly I don’t recommend you reading it it’s a waste of time you might ask why I reads 3700+ chapters and not giving up until now , will the start of the story is good and the events and progress is also good but when he ascends from his home world it’s kinda boring and repetitive events , slow progression in strength, lots of grammar mistakes , no new exiting events or anything. Just - need resources> enter ruins > fight and collect resources > add some hidden projects we don’t know anything about > progress a stage and repeat ( this cycle of action is started from early chapters till now ) then recent chapters he get kidnapped every 30+ chapters. No new event nothings. I gave up on hoping for something else
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looks like author is in a dump and can no longer think of any plot besides kidnapping and ruins exploration. you should take a break and do a world building first and them comeback. latest kidnapping is utter nonsense he saw the raiders coming so he could've simply hidden himself, not the first time he hid from sky sovereigns using forbidden energy either.
Just finished chapter 51 and left a comment, will leave it here as well as it fits the book so far, if he doesn’t fix it he’s a lazy writer. Onomatopoeia shouldn’t be in quotes by itself as it’s not considered speech, you can’t just put “cheering” if there is a cheering crowd because it implies someone spoke the word but if you put ‘The crowd was cheering’ by itself It would be correct so don’t put “laugh” as it means the hyenas are literally saying ‘laugh’ If trees are falling over I’m not going to keep repeating boom for every tree I might not mention it at all because nobody here is 2 years old and doesn’t know that big falling things go boom. Some might not know what a hyena sounds like so mention it once but that’s good enough most animals who aren’t ambush predators make sounds while attacking. Say something like; The cackling of the hyenas sent shivers down my spine as they surrounded and prepared to attack us, eyes glinting with amusement as they readied to play with their food. ( If you want to add the sounds then put the actual sound in the paragraph where you need it, you could start this first paragraph with HeeHeeHee! The cackling… A laugh is what it sounds similar to but it’s not, it is how they communicate) And maybe; One jumped at Bob from his blind side and he barely managed to dodge, sweat dripping down his back as the hyena attack passed by with a whoosh, Its claws lightly grazing his armour. (Even if it wasn’t a hyena but a made-up beast it will let the readers understand the creature's both terrifying and playful nature by themselves and it adds suspense and lets people understand the fear the character(s) feel towards them, if you want the beast to seem more powerful you could then change the end of the last paragraph to ‘It’s claws grazing his armour leaving four deep gashes’) Not “laugh” “laugh” “laugh” What is this? A comedy? I’m not laughing. (XD) When making fight scenes especially you need to give readers a sense of imagery that’ll lead to suspense/excitement/dread (or any feeling at all really), and any kind of repetition or just saying things like “laugh, clang, bang” repeatedly ( unless it’s a word spoken by the characters, like making a finger gun while launching your fireballs and saying “Bang” that’s fine) makes things boring. The same goes for any pets he might get, a dog doesn’t say ‘bark’ but it does bark. So say ‘The dog barked out of hunger’ (The dog is an example he doesn’t have a pet dog) A cannon goes boom but saying; The cannons lining the bastion roared like thunder as they repeatedly fired upon the ghost ships attacking the port, flaming balls of steel leaving trails of smoke in their wake. Sounds better than; The cannons on the bastion went boom, firing flaming balls as they hit the ghost ships attacking the port. It might not seem like much but these little differences will help keep your readers hooked as it adds a little spice and flavour that even they might not notice. (But mistakes are easily seen and criticized so as a writer you must be sure to learn from them) Also if English is not your first language or if your readers complain about the translation there are many free programs that can fix everything up, get one and find some friend(s) in your local writers' circle or someone else who is fluent with reading/writing in English to give it a look. Remember that writing is the same as fishing, to catch lots of fish (Readers) you need a good bait and an even better hook to keep them here, or they’ll spit out the hook and leave. I’ll finish the novel over time as I enjoy the concept but I’m taking a break from it as I’m a bit annoyed.
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Once upon a time, I stumbled upon this book, I tried to read it, I could see words made of English letters , but still, it made no sense in the way it was composed. What is the use of a book if no one can read it may I ask ?
Praying that the MC doesn’t get involved with idiot Sarah and trash boyfriend of hers, but I’ll probably be disappointed
overall I am enjoying the read. But the Grammer errors make you shake your head and make it so you need to take a break to make sense of the grammer
Give Michael a new pet companion. How can it called monster integration with no monster..............................................................................
Problems 1-first person pov turns the story and especially the battles into an occupation, and if it wasn't there, the ranking of the novel would be several hundreds higher. 2-mc has nothing special and all his development is because he is the main character. 3- The story seems fake and it is not interesting for anyone who has read a few novels.
Ive read the Novel till Chapter 1972 and will continue to read it. I think its just amazing and you should really give it a try :D I hope the Author will continue writing it because you cant find such a World Emvironment anywhere else. Also the MC Micheal is really good written :3
The writing is atrocious. The author doesn't seem to realize that they can rewrite and edit what they have written. The first 20 or so chapters are especially egregious and actively detract from the story. 0/10 for execution.
I enjoy reading it, enough said. If the translation was better it would be in the top 20 if not not 10 instead of the top 50 it is at now.
hello, Can you review my book----------------------------------------------------------------THE PART OF NO RETURN : FIRST HUMAN EMPIRE------------------------------ Please
could barely read this do to the grammar in this story needs some major edits at least for English unsure if its correct in other languages but English definitely not
I don't know if you are reading this or not, but bro, the writer, can you tell me why the first person pov? 100% If the novel was in third person and had a narrator instead of MC's own thoughts, the ranking of this novel would be much higher and the readers would increase many times. It's really a shame. I think if I give the novel itself a score of 7.5/10, but when MC explains everything, the score of the novel will be 4/10. good luck Of course, if the novel is rewritten from the beginning in the third person, it will be very good. in a dream
First, why did the non-privileged chapter release change? They are still releasing chapters but we can’t read them apparently. I like the book. It’s different from others in a lot of novel ways. Even if it has grammar errors and translation quirks, it is easily understandable. Way better than a lot of those mtl novels out there (though with AI, they are getting better). Main character always gets out of scrapes, but that’s every novel. And there are certainly many repetitive story arcs, but that’s a genre thing. And they are usually at least somewhat different. I didn’t like the weird teacher romance, but other novels are way worse. At least there are always new scenarios that keep it interesting and the greater world building is also more well-done and complex than many novels. I recommend.
the story overall is readable, but it's very frustrating: 1 - starting with his first pet, and only one, in this story the first pet decide your talent your maximum level your speed of development, and here we find our MC chosing the weakest monster outthere as his starting one while having the choice of much much better ones, which limited him to a specialist and with the wickest talent. i read till 500 ch and to me if he chose anyother pet and used the ressources wasted on the current one he would have become OP, but no the mc should be a weakling. 2 - the moment he met his crush he started simping to her no dignity no nothing. so read at your risk
Revelar Spoiler Didn't get far before I had to drop this. But I still feel I have been generous with the stars. So, the reason I had to drop this book is primarily the grammar, but also the way the author writes generally. If you can look past obvious mistakes every few lines and what feels like a 14 year pokemon fanfic go nuts. Also, how the hell can you claim chapters are editted when even the first chapter is full of mistakes .. so gl reading this, and if you get past my highest chapter read: ffs get some standards !
Full of typing errors, wrong grammar, inconsistent information(especially on the current level of characters)
Please someone tell me that the writing is going to get better after chapter 1000? 🙏🏻🙏🏻 How is it possible that even after 1000 chapter, the writing quality is not improving? 🫠 The story is great, but man, I really wish it would have a better grammar.
Even since MC learned healing It's just copy paste & repeat everytime MC helps someone using his own resources that person will get some kind hidden potential unlock than. MC get trapped or caputred than breakthrough and escape just repeat it every few chapters.
Revelar Spoiler este é um daqueles poucos livros que cria um gênero proprio, se tiver que escolher entre meus 3 livros favoritos com certeza será este. não é um romance clichê que o personagem ganha tudo automaticamente, ou se torna super forte do dia pra noite e sai solando tudo inclusive aliados. resumindo tem um mundo incrivel e personagem que ajudam a moldar estes cenários.
Beside the obvious, grammar; lack of reasonable motivation; and redundant leveling system, the story still suck. There fight are boring and just overall torturous to read. The story might get better, but from what I see it take 1000 chapter. Good luck if you decide to read.
The story is quite good it's worth reading. But only if you are ready to experience a very badly written story. First grammar was bad then the author started writing wrong names of characters like around ch550 MC' s love interests was introduced named Rachel. She is the sister of MC's friend's girlfriend named Sarah . This writer wrote Sarah's name at many places where he should have written Rachel. After all those mindf*cks I am still reading this. I don't know why
Revelar Spoiler Interesting world, decent characters, REPETITIVE. Everyone treats MC like trash, even when he brings top organizations multiple golden geeze and proves himself better, then their top tallents.Things are not getting any better.
The speed of the story is a little slow, but the character and the world are written with lots of thought, and I hope to read the novel till its last chapter
I just want to ask if Ellen or Jim are gonna come back in the story? Anwan, please respond.
The novel is really really good. Yah the grammer and sentences are quite troublesome but its not that much of a headache that people are making it. I've always longed for a novel like this and yeah, i really like it.
I've been reading this for what feels like years now and it's still good. Solid writing, good characters, great story !
Very bad spelling almost unreadable. The idea was good but the author just messed it up. 1/10
I have read 3700+ chapters, honestly I don’t recommend you reading it it’s a waste of time you might ask why I reads 3700+ chapters and not giving up until now , will the start of the story is good and the events and progress is also good but when he ascends from his home world it’s kinda boring and repetitive events , slow progression in strength, lots of grammar mistakes , no new exiting events or anything. Just - need resources> enter ruins > fight and collect resources > add some hidden projects we don’t know anything about > progress a stage and repeat ( this cycle of action is started from early chapters till now ) then recent chapters he get kidnapped every 30+ chapters. No new event nothings. I gave up on hoping for something else
Revelar Spoiler looks like author is in a dump and can no longer think of any plot besides kidnapping and ruins exploration. you should take a break and do a world building first and them comeback. latest kidnapping is utter nonsense he saw the raiders coming so he could've simply hidden himself, not the first time he hid from sky sovereigns using forbidden energy either.
Just finished chapter 51 and left a comment, will leave it here as well as it fits the book so far, if he doesn’t fix it he’s a lazy writer. Onomatopoeia shouldn’t be in quotes by itself as it’s not considered speech, you can’t just put “cheering” if there is a cheering crowd because it implies someone spoke the word but if you put ‘The crowd was cheering’ by itself It would be correct so don’t put “laugh” as it means the hyenas are literally saying ‘laugh’ If trees are falling over I’m not going to keep repeating boom for every tree I might not mention it at all because nobody here is 2 years old and doesn’t know that big falling things go boom. Some might not know what a hyena sounds like so mention it once but that’s good enough most animals who aren’t ambush predators make sounds while attacking. Say something like; The cackling of the hyenas sent shivers down my spine as they surrounded and prepared to attack us, eyes glinting with amusement as they readied to play with their food. ( If you want to add the sounds then put the actual sound in the paragraph where you need it, you could start this first paragraph with HeeHeeHee! The cackling… A laugh is what it sounds similar to but it’s not, it is how they communicate) And maybe; One jumped at Bob from his blind side and he barely managed to dodge, sweat dripping down his back as the hyena attack passed by with a whoosh, Its claws lightly grazing his armour. (Even if it wasn’t a hyena but a made-up beast it will let the readers understand the creature's both terrifying and playful nature by themselves and it adds suspense and lets people understand the fear the character(s) feel towards them, if you want the beast to seem more powerful you could then change the end of the last paragraph to ‘It’s claws grazing his armour leaving four deep gashes’) Not “laugh” “laugh” “laugh” What is this? A comedy? I’m not laughing. (XD) When making fight scenes especially you need to give readers a sense of imagery that’ll lead to suspense/excitement/dread (or any feeling at all really), and any kind of repetition or just saying things like “laugh, clang, bang” repeatedly ( unless it’s a word spoken by the characters, like making a finger gun while launching your fireballs and saying “Bang” that’s fine) makes things boring. The same goes for any pets he might get, a dog doesn’t say ‘bark’ but it does bark. So say ‘The dog barked out of hunger’ (The dog is an example he doesn’t have a pet dog) A cannon goes boom but saying; The cannons lining the bastion roared like thunder as they repeatedly fired upon the ghost ships attacking the port, flaming balls of steel leaving trails of smoke in their wake. Sounds better than; The cannons on the bastion went boom, firing flaming balls as they hit the ghost ships attacking the port. It might not seem like much but these little differences will help keep your readers hooked as it adds a little spice and flavour that even they might not notice. (But mistakes are easily seen and criticized so as a writer you must be sure to learn from them) Also if English is not your first language or if your readers complain about the translation there are many free programs that can fix everything up, get one and find some friend(s) in your local writers' circle or someone else who is fluent with reading/writing in English to give it a look. Remember that writing is the same as fishing, to catch lots of fish (Readers) you need a good bait and an even better hook to keep them here, or they’ll spit out the hook and leave. I’ll finish the novel over time as I enjoy the concept but I’m taking a break from it as I’m a bit annoyed.
Revelar Spoiler Once upon a time, I stumbled upon this book, I tried to read it, I could see words made of English letters , but still, it made no sense in the way it was composed. What is the use of a book if no one can read it may I ask ?
Praying that the MC doesn’t get involved with idiot Sarah and trash boyfriend of hers, but I’ll probably be disappointed
overall I am enjoying the read. But the Grammer errors make you shake your head and make it so you need to take a break to make sense of the grammer
Give Michael a new pet companion. How can it called monster integration with no monster..............................................................................
Problems 1-first person pov turns the story and especially the battles into an occupation, and if it wasn't there, the ranking of the novel would be several hundreds higher. 2-mc has nothing special and all his development is because he is the main character. 3- The story seems fake and it is not interesting for anyone who has read a few novels.
Ive read the Novel till Chapter 1972 and will continue to read it. I think its just amazing and you should really give it a try :D I hope the Author will continue writing it because you cant find such a World Emvironment anywhere else. Also the MC Micheal is really good written :3