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I. hope you can come back and start updating this story again ill send power stones this storys great I've never seen a harry potter becoming harry potter with a system before just hp to hp stories
As it ended with the disown system the novel began to turn into a horrendous change Even the plot armour will be change if the system cannot be use.
É um bom livro, a história avança rapidamente ,um pouco bagunçado no sistema ,tem uma mudança rápida de personalidade, a ideia das 3 opções de roteiro é legal,faltou mostrar mais a ideias malucas kkk
Awful, I could deal with the writing quality, and the story seemed interesting at first, but the author has the MC acting like a complete idiot pretty early on. I’ve never bothered reviewing before but the author needs to lurk and read more decent stories before he tries to write this kind of crap
Why even give MC a system if he was going to act two and go one a tantrum and shut it down? Is it because you wanted the MC to have the sharingan? Why didn't you just give the MC two or three wishes before he came into the world or something like that instead of doing something stupid like that? I stopped reading after that. Don't even give this novel a chance it's utter trash!
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Starting chapters are good. Writing quality is good. Flow of story is smooth. Needs more original characters or focus background character to make the story deep and interesting. During summer holidays he can explore international magical competitions. Please continue
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I don't mind system novel, but if they're as cringe and cliche as this one... Well in not reading it. Author I don't understand why you need to put in the sharingan in the story. It's so cliche. You could have changed it so that it's an eye that can help cast magic or seal magic. BTW update transmigration it's a bloddyyygood novel. It improves on this novel.
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well well well ... I think it's a good fanfiction ... I love herry potter since little... maybe because I grew up with hes books and movies... (~￣³￣)~ this is a face slapping novel! THANKs you for this! <3 maybe a bit exaggerated in some aspects HAHAHA ♫꒰･◡･๑꒱ (∩_∩)♫ （●＞ω＜●）
Bro THis is the best fan fic i have ever read please don't drop it and continue also i hope you can make that harry would build an dungeon in school and so on
I got to say it is annoying in the 1st few chapter for the character of Harry buy it has it pros and cons. It got me hook up so its good novel I would say
Don't like the character main character I didn't make it past the second page so I don't know if it gets better or worse but I'm just not interested in it
It's not bad novel, but too similar in some parts to other HP fanfic. Unfortunately this novel isn't that good as the other one :) didn't read all chapters, so maybe it's better in later chapters, but I can't find it in myself to read more of them.
this story almost same with this https://***.webnovel.com/book/11586771005443205/Harry-Potter-and-The-Mystical-Journey especially with meditation+phisical training and how he show off his tranfiguration magic thus end up in dumbledore office (HPTMJ chapter 17-18)
Good novel with its own style which is hard to digest but good for story . Uldisudigtfigidghgggshsgkkstusjsyjsusttitixkxkktustlyjlsgtsshjsjflgdluyssteystetststuuisyisyuey
Je pense que ce roman est assez agréable, il a le potentiel de se développer davantage. En espérant que l'auteur pourra terminer l'histoire. Au moins, ne la laissez pas tomber mai j'aime ton travaille continu avec plus de chapitre merci!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
j'ai tout lu dommage qu'il n'y ai pas plus de chapitre qui sores pas mais j aimes ton travailles continu -----------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------
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j'ai lu tout les chapitre tous ce que je peux dire géniale dommage qu'il n'y a pas de mise a jour et pas plus de chapitre.......................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................
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Reading these comments i have feeling that even the author might be a kid.i mean which story in the world can be this horrible other than the ones scribbled by kid.
Meeh so basicily os too clichê , system off, MC pussy cry, dad is a mysterios being **** man This is só clichê ALL stories .... People dont have Brain to creat anithing diferent soo for my is a 0. Br que quiser ler fica dica, acho que não vale a pena ;() desativou sistema , papai eh quem mato ele kkkkk que ideia viajou muito o maluco ... Ps: if you like This shit dont hate me .....
A very good story, it would be a full 5 if it werent for the small grammar mistakes that appear now and then. I enjoy how the MC acts unlike the other MCs, as they are robots who get systems in other games without caring of anything of their previous life of why they were reincarnated. While some complain that hes trowing tantrums, keep in mind that hes still young when he dies and its normal to get mad, sad and confused. When you reincarnate into a world of a story you didnt enjoy and getting told that your mother went to the afterlife just "because", it is normal to have feelings unlike "Oh it happened, time to explore the world"
Just another positive review to help balance those 1-star reviews based on the first 5 chapters........................................keep up the good work mr. author!
Liking the novel so far, hope that author doesn't drop it. 👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍
A great self-incert fanfiction, still lack but is becoming better and is easy to read. Also dont have the cliche of others Harry Potter fanfiction.
This fan-fic is very well written and is an enjoyable read. I look forward to every update the author puts out. It also has the use of a system that is not overly in your face and focuses more on the story than system.
Nothing redeemable about this fanfic. Poorly written, certain characters behave way too immaturely, while others seem to have an insight to match seasoned therapists despite being 11 years old.
I love this novel and at the moment this is the best Harry Potter fiction! The story and characters are fun, the canon is not followed completely but new characters are introduced and they offer a refreshing insight into the magical world. The only thing that is limiting this novel is the way the author removed the system (It is reintroduced later on, so don't worry!!!!!). Harry seemed to be too emotional at that time, but even that can be explained, although I am not really a fan of the "he was very stressed out so he got emotional" trope. Overall, this novel deserves a far better rating than it currently has and the only reason for this is because people gave low ratings after the system was shutdown earlier. So don't be influenced by angry reviews but judge for yourself and see the brilliance and potential of this novel.
Unble to read beyond chapter 8. Horribly written. Cast is acting out of character and speaking opposite how they would normally doin the movies or books, the mc is an idiot
I. hope you can come back and start updating this story again ill send power stones this storys great I've never seen a harry potter becoming harry potter with a system before just hp to hp stories
As it ended with the disown system the novel began to turn into a horrendous change Even the plot armour will be change if the system cannot be use.
É um bom livro, a história avança rapidamente ,um pouco bagunçado no sistema ,tem uma mudança rápida de personalidade, a ideia das 3 opções de roteiro é legal,faltou mostrar mais a ideias malucas kkk
Awful, I could deal with the writing quality, and the story seemed interesting at first, but the author has the MC acting like a complete idiot pretty early on. I’ve never bothered reviewing before but the author needs to lurk and read more decent stories before he tries to write this kind of crap
Why even give MC a system if he was going to act two and go one a tantrum and shut it down? Is it because you wanted the MC to have the sharingan? Why didn't you just give the MC two or three wishes before he came into the world or something like that instead of doing something stupid like that? I stopped reading after that. Don't even give this novel a chance it's utter trash!
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Starting chapters are good. Writing quality is good. Flow of story is smooth. Needs more original characters or focus background character to make the story deep and interesting. During summer holidays he can explore international magical competitions. Please continue
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I don't mind system novel, but if they're as cringe and cliche as this one... Well in not reading it. Author I don't understand why you need to put in the sharingan in the story. It's so cliche. You could have changed it so that it's an eye that can help cast magic or seal magic. BTW update transmigration it's a bloddyyygood novel. It improves on this novel.
Crap, Crap, Crap, Crap, Crap, Crap, Crap, Crap, Crap, Crap, Crap, Crap, Crap, Crap, Crap, Crap, Crap, Crap, Crap, Crap, Crap, Crap, Crap, Crap,
well well well ... I think it's a good fanfiction ... I love herry potter since little... maybe because I grew up with hes books and movies... (~￣³￣)~ this is a face slapping novel! THANKs you for this! <3 maybe a bit exaggerated in some aspects HAHAHA ♫꒰･◡･๑꒱ (∩_∩)♫ （●＞ω＜●）
Bro THis is the best fan fic i have ever read please don't drop it and continue also i hope you can make that harry would build an dungeon in school and so on
I got to say it is annoying in the 1st few chapter for the character of Harry buy it has it pros and cons. It got me hook up so its good novel I would say
Don't like the character main character I didn't make it past the second page so I don't know if it gets better or worse but I'm just not interested in it
It's not bad novel, but too similar in some parts to other HP fanfic. Unfortunately this novel isn't that good as the other one :) didn't read all chapters, so maybe it's better in later chapters, but I can't find it in myself to read more of them.
this story almost same with this https://***.webnovel.com/book/11586771005443205/Harry-Potter-and-The-Mystical-Journey especially with meditation+phisical training and how he show off his tranfiguration magic thus end up in dumbledore office (HPTMJ chapter 17-18)
Good novel with its own style which is hard to digest but good for story . Uldisudigtfigidghgggshsgkkstusjsyjsusttitixkxkktustlyjlsgtsshjsjflgdluyssteystetststuuisyisyuey
Je pense que ce roman est assez agréable, il a le potentiel de se développer davantage. En espérant que l'auteur pourra terminer l'histoire. Au moins, ne la laissez pas tomber mai j'aime ton travaille continu avec plus de chapitre merci!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
j'ai tout lu dommage qu'il n'y ai pas plus de chapitre qui sores pas mais j aimes ton travailles continu -----------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------
Revelar Spoiler j'ai lu tout les chapitre tous ce que je peux dire géniale dommage qu'il n'y a pas de mise a jour et pas plus de chapitre.......................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................
Revelar Spoiler Reading these comments i have feeling that even the author might be a kid.i mean which story in the world can be this horrible other than the ones scribbled by kid.
Meeh so basicily os too clichê , system off, MC pussy cry, dad is a mysterios being **** man This is só clichê ALL stories .... People dont have Brain to creat anithing diferent soo for my is a 0. Br que quiser ler fica dica, acho que não vale a pena ;() desativou sistema , papai eh quem mato ele kkkkk que ideia viajou muito o maluco ... Ps: if you like This shit dont hate me .....
A very good story, it would be a full 5 if it werent for the small grammar mistakes that appear now and then. I enjoy how the MC acts unlike the other MCs, as they are robots who get systems in other games without caring of anything of their previous life of why they were reincarnated. While some complain that hes trowing tantrums, keep in mind that hes still young when he dies and its normal to get mad, sad and confused. When you reincarnate into a world of a story you didnt enjoy and getting told that your mother went to the afterlife just "because", it is normal to have feelings unlike "Oh it happened, time to explore the world"
Just another positive review to help balance those 1-star reviews based on the first 5 chapters........................................keep up the good work mr. author!
Liking the novel so far, hope that author doesn't drop it. 👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍
A great self-incert fanfiction, still lack but is becoming better and is easy to read. Also dont have the cliche of others Harry Potter fanfiction.
This fan-fic is very well written and is an enjoyable read. I look forward to every update the author puts out. It also has the use of a system that is not overly in your face and focuses more on the story than system.
Nothing redeemable about this fanfic. Poorly written, certain characters behave way too immaturely, while others seem to have an insight to match seasoned therapists despite being 11 years old.
I love this novel and at the moment this is the best Harry Potter fiction! The story and characters are fun, the canon is not followed completely but new characters are introduced and they offer a refreshing insight into the magical world. The only thing that is limiting this novel is the way the author removed the system (It is reintroduced later on, so don't worry!!!!!). Harry seemed to be too emotional at that time, but even that can be explained, although I am not really a fan of the "he was very stressed out so he got emotional" trope. Overall, this novel deserves a far better rating than it currently has and the only reason for this is because people gave low ratings after the system was shutdown earlier. So don't be influenced by angry reviews but judge for yourself and see the brilliance and potential of this novel.
Unble to read beyond chapter 8. Horribly written. Cast is acting out of character and speaking opposite how they would normally doin the movies or books, the mc is an idiot